Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız anlaşılır fakat birkaç dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi hatası var; ayrıca daha doğal ve akıcı olmak için kısa bir açıklama ekleyebilirsiniz. Özellikle: "4 tired" yerine "four‑wheeled" veya daha iyi "training wheels"; "probably a seven years old" yerine "when I was about seven" demelisiniz. Cümlenizi tek bir net konu cümlesiyle başlayıp, bir destekleyici detay (ör. nerede sürerdiniz veya kiminle) ile 2-3 cümlede tamamlayın. Ayrıca gereksiz kelimeleri çıkararak 3-4 cümle sınırında kalın.

例: Yes. I had a small pink bike with training wheels when I was about seven. I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park and my older brother often helped me practice until I could ride on my own.

提案: Cevabınız doğrudan ve anlaşılır fakat daha özgün detaylar ve bağlantı sözcükleri ekleyerek cevabı güçlendirebilirsiniz. Örneğin, neden popüler olduklarını, kimlerin sürdüğünü veya bisikletlerin hangi amaçlarla kullanıldığını belirtin. Ayrıca "we have a lot of marathons" yerine "there are many cycling events or races" gibi daha uygun terimler kullanın. Cümleleri birbirine bağlamak için "because" veya "for example" gibi bağlaçlar ekleyin ve toplamda 2-3 cümleyle sınırlı tutun.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, there are numerous cycling events and races throughout the year that attract both amateurs and serious cyclists.

× I used to have a small 4 tired and pink bike when I was probably a seven years old.

✓ I used to have a small, four‑tired pink bike when I was probably seven years old.

The phrase contains adjective and number format errors. '4 tired' should be 'four‑tired' (hyphenate compound adjective before a noun and spell out small numbers in formal writing), and 'a seven years old' is incorrect because age phrases with 'years' do not take an article and should be singular/plural correctly: use 'seven years old' without 'a'. Also add a comma between coordinate adjectives 'small' and 'four‑tired' if desired for clarity. Suggestions: hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, do not use an article before 'seven years old', and write numbers in words in speaking/test responses.'},{

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country and we have a lot of marathons.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, and we have a lot of marathons.

The sentence needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' when joining two independent clauses to improve clarity and punctuation; this also helps avoid subject-verb agreement misreading. Suggestions: place a comma before 'and' when connecting two complete sentences and ensure verbs agree with their subjects (here 'bikes are' and 'we have' are correct).