Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, fix grammar, and add a specific example or statistic to support your point. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, for instance, moreover). Avoid repetition such as saying the same idea twice ("have been a mode of transport" and "using for a long period").

例: Yes — bikes are very popular in India because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. For example, many office workers and students in my city use motorbikes to travel to work or college, especially during peak hours, because they are cheaper to run than cars and easier to park. Moreover, sales data show that two-wheelers account for a large share of vehicle registrations nationwide.

× Yes, I believe that bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I believe that bikes are very popular in my country.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to state a general belief about current popularity.

× I come from India and bikes are seen as a very affordable way to commute to your work, school or anywhere that you need to go.

✓ I come from India, and bikes are seen as a very affordable way to commute to work, school, or anywhere you need to go.

Use of 'your' is inconsistent in a personal response; replacing with 'you' or omitting makes the sentence general. Also add a comma after the introductory clause and use serial comma for clarity.

× I believe that bikes have been something have been a mode of transport from the beginning of time.

✓ I believe that bikes have been a mode of transport since ancient times.

Original sentence contains redundant repetition 'have been something have been' and awkward phrase 'from the beginning of time.' Replace with concise phrase 'have been a mode of transport since ancient times.' Use present perfect 'have been' to describe an action from the past continuing to present.

× It's something that Indian people have been using for a long period of time.

✓ It's something that Indian people have used for a long time.

Using 'have been using' (present perfect continuous) is acceptable but wordier; 'have used' (present perfect simple) is more natural when indicating long-term habitual use. Also 'a long time' is more idiomatic than 'a long period of time.'