Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tense (use past), fix word order and prepositions, and avoid short fragments. Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. state that you had a bike, who gave it to you, and a brief specific memory or how you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. I enjoyed learning new tricks and exploring my neighborhood with friends.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and linking words (for example, because, however, also). Use correct vocabulary (e.g. "cities" not "cook" or "St") and grammar (word order). Be specific about where bikes are less popular and why, and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Korea. This is mainly because many cities lack dedicated bike lanes, so cycling can feel unsafe. Also, people often prefer public transport or cars for convenience.

× I have a bike because my dad bought to me, so I enjoy it.

✓ I had a bike because my dad bought it for me, so I enjoyed it.

The student used 'have' (present) while describing childhood; past tense is required. 'Bought to me' is incorrect word order and preposition usage; use 'bought it for me' (direct object + preposition). Also 'enjoy it' should be past 'enjoyed' to match past timeframe. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about past events and place the object after 'bought' followed by 'for' when indicating the recipient.

× Ride bike.

✓ I used to ride my bike.

'Ride bike' is a fragment lacking a subject and correct tense. In context of childhood habitual action, use 'I used to ride my bike' or 'I would ride my bike'. Also include the article 'my' before 'bike'. Suggestion: form a full sentence with subject + verb and choose appropriate past habitual expression.

× I think in Korea bikes are not popular than other big cook because in Korea there have they don't have a lot of bike St.

✓ I think in Korea bikes are not as popular as in other big countries because in Korea there are not a lot of bike lanes.

Multiple issues: comparison structure 'not popular than' is incorrect; correct form is 'not as popular as' (comparison). 'Other big cook' seems to be mispronounced 'other big countries'. 'There have they don't have a lot of bike St' mixes structures; correct is 'there are not a lot of bike lanes' or 'we don't have many bike lanes'. Use 'are' with 'there' for existence. Suggestion: use 'not as ... as' for negative comparisons, correct noun 'countries', and 'there are not' + plural noun or 'we don't have many' + plural noun.

× Also people think it is dangerous.

✓ Also, people think biking is dangerous.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but lacks clarity about the subject 'it'. Replace 'it' with 'biking' to be specific. This falls under 'there be' only insofar as existence statements earlier; here clarity improves sentence. Suggestion: use a clear noun as the subject when referring to an activity.

× When I was a child, yeah, yes, absolutely. I have a bike because my dad bought to me, so I enjoy it.

✓ When I was a child, yes, absolutely. I had a bike because my dad bought it for me, so I enjoyed it.

Combines earlier points: mixing present tense 'have' and 'enjoy' with past context 'When I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' and 'enjoyed' to keep tense consistency. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for the time frame you mention.