Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 시제 사용을 고쳐야 합니다. 어린 시절을 말할 때는 과거형을 사용해야 하고, 의미가 모호한 표현('when I was charged') 대신 명확한 표현을 써야 합니다. 답변은 간단한 주제문으로 시작하고 필요하면 한두 문장의 추가 설명(어떤 종류의 자전거였는지, 누가 사주었는지, 얼마나 자주 탔는지 등)을 연결어로 이어 자연스럽게 확장하세요. 예: 'Yes, I did.'로 시작하고 과거 경험을 부연할 때 'because', 'so', 'and' 같은 연결어를 쓰세요.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was a child because my parents bought it for me as a birthday present. I rode it almost every day after school and learned to ride without training wheels within a week.

提案: 문법(복수형, 현재 시제), 어순, 그리고 자연스러운 표현을 개선해야 합니다. 일반적 의견을 말할 때는 'Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.'처럼 복수형을 사용하고, 추가 설명은 연결어('for example', 'because', 'also')로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 구체적인 세부사항(특정 장소, 이유, 빈도)을 포함하면 점수가 올라갑니다. 예: 사람들이 산악 자전거를 즐긴다는 점을 말하려면 'many people enjoy mountain biking'이라고 하세요.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people enjoy mountain biking in the countryside because we have lots of trails, and I also go cycling on weekends with my friends.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was charged.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was charged' and also wrote 'charged' instead of 'child'. Use past tense 'had' for past situations and correct the noun to 'child'. Suggestion: use 'I had' for past possession and 'child' instead of 'charged' (likely a typo).

× Yes, the bike is really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country.

The examiner asked about bikes in general, so use the plural noun 'bikes' with the plural verb 'are'. Using 'the bike is' implies a specific single bike. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about general popularity: 'bikes are popular'.

× Many, many people are take the bike in mountain and then I also ride bike.

✓ Many people ride bikes in the mountains, and I also ride a bike.

Problems: 'are take' is incorrect verb form; use simple present 'ride' for habitual actions. 'the bike' should be plural 'bikes' or 'a bike'; 'in mountain' needs plural 'in the mountains'. Also add 'a' before 'bike' in the second clause. Suggestion: use simple present for habits: 'Many people ride bikes in the mountains, and I also ride a bike.'