Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and gives specific memories, but reduce hesitation sounds (uh, umm), tighten sentences, and use clearer linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with smooth connectors. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and correct small collocation errors (e.g., say “ride a bike” or “cycle with friends”).

例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child and I rode it to school every day. I often cycled with my friends on the way to school, and sometimes we rode to nearby parks to hang out.

提案: Good content and clear reasons, but reduce hesitations and use more natural phrasing. Provide a concise topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / moreover). Avoid informal phrases like “kinda” and “hard” for weather — use “hot” or “humid.”

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. This is mainly because roads are crowded and most people prefer motorbikes or cars; moreover, the hot and humid weather makes cycling uncomfortable for long journeys.

× I often cycle the bike uh, alongside with my friends on the way uh to school, but sometimes we also cycle to uh, other places just to hang out.

✓ I often cycle the bike alongside my friends on the way to school, but sometimes we also cycle to other places just to hang out.

The phrase 'alongside with' is incorrect; use 'alongside' without 'with' or use 'along with'. Also remove filler words. 'Cycle' as a verb is correct; no -ing form needed here. Suggest using 'cycle alongside my friends' or 'cycle with my friends'.

× Currently, it's not really popular, uh, in my country, umm, normally people use motorbike or car instead of bikes.

✓ Currently, cycling is not very popular in my country; normally people use motorbikes or cars instead of bikes.

Use the noun 'cycling' or 'bikes' as the topic. 'Motorbike' and 'car' should be plural to match 'people' and general statement. 'Not really popular' is informal; 'not very popular' is more natural. Also punctuation adjusted for clarity.

× Uh, since the traffic in Cambodia is kinda crowded and I can tell that it's the weather is really hard in Cambodia, so not many people uh, like biking.

✓ Since the traffic in Cambodia is quite crowded and the weather is very harsh, not many people like biking.

Remove redundant 'I can tell that' and repeated 'in Cambodia'. 'Kinda' is informal; use 'quite'. 'The weather is really hard' is ungrammatical; use 'the weather is very harsh' or 'the weather is very hot'. Also remove unnecessary filler words for fluency.

× normally people use motorbike or car instead of bikes.

✓ Normally, people use motorbikes or cars instead of bikes.

When speaking about general habits, use plural forms 'motorbikes' and 'cars' to agree with plural 'people'. Using singular 'motorbike or car' with plural 'people' is inconsistent.