Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency (e.g., “I rarely watch movies”). Use fewer words and correct grammar: avoid redundant phrases, correct verb forms, and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘synopsis’ → ‘premise’). Limit to 2–3 sentences and add one specific example to support your preference.

例: I rarely watch movies, maybe a few times a year, unless the premise is very interesting. For example, I enjoy sci‑fi horror because the suspense and unexpected scares are exciting and fun to share with friends.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the genre, then support with one or two specific reasons. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., ‘thrill’, ‘adrenaline’, ‘suspense’) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I usually watch sci‑fi horror films because they provide a strong sense of suspense and thrill. For instance, the combination of futuristic ideas and jump scares keeps me engaged and makes watching with friends more fun.

提案: Begin with a direct statement of preference. Explain one or two clear reasons using correct grammar and linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘however’). Be specific about what makes home better (comfort, control over noise) and avoid unnecessary repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer watching movies at home because I feel more comfortable and can control the environment, such as pausing or lowering the volume. However, I sometimes go to the cinema for big releases because of the immersive experience.

提案: Answer directly and give two specific benefits with clear linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘also’). Use correct noun forms ('languages', 'dialects') and concise phrasing. Mention how often or how you watch (subtitles, repetition) to make your point specific.

例: Yes, watching movies in other languages is useful because it improves listening skills and exposes you to vocabulary and natural expressions. For example, watching French films with subtitles helped me learn common phrases and understand cultural context.

× I don't normally watch movies unless it's very interesting synopsis, but I'm interested of watching a sci-fi horror movies because I felt enjoyed and like I can able to share feared out of nowhere while watching those movies.

✓ I don't normally watch movies unless they have a very interesting synopsis, but I'm interested in watching sci-fi horror movies because I feel enjoyment and I like that I can share sudden scares while watching them.

The sentence contains several preposition errors: 'interested of' should be 'interested in'; 'share feared' is incorrect—use 'share sudden scares' or 'share the fear'. Also 'it's very interesting synopsis' should match number and use 'they have a very interesting synopsis' or 'it has a very interesting synopsis' depending on subject. 'Sci-fi horror movies' should be plural without 'a'. Clarify verb forms: 'I felt enjoyed' -> 'I feel enjoyment' or 'I feel enjoyment' and 'I can able to' -> remove 'able to' or 'can' (use one). Suggestions: use 'interested in', ensure subject-verb agreement, remove redundant modals, and use correct nouns for abstract feelings (enjoyment) or gerunds (enjoy).' ,

× I do usually watch sci-fi horror film because it gives me price and I was in enjoyed it with my other friends while frightening with while watching the movie.

✓ I usually watch sci-fi horror films because they give me pleasure, and I enjoyed them with my friends while being frightened during the movie.

Pronoun and number errors: 'sci-fi horror film' mismatches with plural context—use 'films'; 'it gives me price' is incorrect word choice—should be 'pleasure'; 'I was in enjoyed it' mixes tense and pronoun—use 'I enjoyed them'. Also 'while frightening with while watching' is awkward; use 'while being frightened during the movie'. Suggestions: match singular/plural, use correct pronouns to refer back to 'films' (they/them), choose correct nouns ('pleasure'), and keep verb tense consistent.' ,

× I I feel it very enjoyable and fun at the same time while watching the horror films.

✓ I feel it is very enjoyable and fun at the same time when watching horror films.

Redundant words and word order: double 'I' is a typo; 'feel it very enjoyable' needs a linking verb: 'feel it is very enjoyable' or 'find it very enjoyable'. 'While watching the horror films' is better as 'when watching horror films' for natural adverbial use. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, include appropriate linking verbs (is), and use 'when' for habitual actions.' ,

× I'm introvert person so I prefer to watching at the comfort of my own home because I feel safe and calmer when I was in my own zone.

✓ I'm an introverted person, so I prefer watching in the comfort of my own home because I feel safe and calmer in my own space.

Pronoun/article and tense issues: missing article 'an' before 'introvert person' and 'introvert' should be 'introverted'. 'Prefer to watching' is incorrect—use 'prefer watching' or 'prefer to watch'. 'At the comfort' should be 'in the comfort'. 'When I was in my own zone' mixes past tense—use present 'in my own space'. Suggestions: add correct articles, use adjective forms, correct verb patterns (prefer + gerund), and use consistent present tense.' ,

× But if outside of my comfort zone like cinema, I need to deal with the public especially.

✓ But if I'm outside my comfort zone, such as in a cinema, I have to deal with the public.

Preposition and structure errors: 'if outside of my comfort zone like cinema' is ungrammatical—use 'if I'm outside my comfort zone, such as in a cinema'. 'Need to deal with the public especially' is awkward; use 'have to deal with the public' and place 'especially' appropriately if needed. Suggestions: include subject (I'm), use 'such as' for examples, and place adverbs correctly.' ,

× There are some noises that you can even prevent especially if you're watching a movie in a crowded places.

✓ There is some noise that you cannot avoid, especially if you're watching a movie in crowded places.

Quantifier and number agreement: 'There are some noises' can be 'There is some noise' (uncountable) or 'There are some noises' with plural later—here 'a crowded places' is incorrect: mix of singular article and plural noun. 'You can even prevent' is wrong meaning—should be 'cannot avoid'. Suggestions: choose correct countable/uncountable forms, match articles with noun number, and use verbs that reflect intended meaning (avoid vs prevent).' ,

× Yes, I agree that watching movies in other language you can learn the dialect itself by especially if you watch it all the time and also other language.

✓ Yes, I agree that by watching movies in another language, you can learn the dialect, especially if you watch them often and other languages as well.

Modal/word order errors: sentence needs 'by' to show method: 'by watching'. 'Other language' should be 'another language' or 'other languages'. 'You can learn the dialect itself by especially' has misplaced 'especially'. Also use plural 'them' to refer to 'movies'. Suggestions: use 'by' for methods, correct determiners (another/other), place adverbs like 'especially' near what they modify, and keep pronouns consistent.' ,

× I'll give you idea about their culture and the way they speak and how they able to communicate based on their own language.

✓ It will give you an idea about their culture, the way they speak, and how they are able to communicate in their language.

Pronoun and article errors: 'I'll give you idea' needs article 'an idea' or rephrase 'It will give you an idea'. 'How they able to communicate' lacks auxiliary 'are' -> 'how they are able to communicate'. Also 'based on their own language' is better as 'in their language'. Suggestions: include necessary articles, add auxiliary verbs for correct tense and voice, and use 'in' for language medium.