Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で自然ですが、内容がやや単調で詳細が足りません。具体的な情報（どんな料理か、どのように準備するか、どのように感じるか）を加え、接続詞（for example, because, so）を使って文をつなげるとより効果的です。また“make me happy and excited”の語彙を変えて感情を具体的に表現すると高得点につながります。

例: I usually have a family dinner with my parents on my birthday because they cook a special meal for me. For example, my mother often makes my favorite dish—grilled salmon with vegetables—which makes the evening feel warm and memorable. I enjoy talking with them and celebrating together, so I feel very grateful and relaxed.

提案: 簡潔に答えていますが、文法や語彙の選択に改善の余地があります（“I was a child”は不要、“a sushi”は誤り）。また、具体的なエピソード（何歳の頃か、誰が来たか、どんな行事があったか）を織り交ぜ、接続詞を使って流れを滑らかにしてください。感情表現もより自然な語に置き換えましょう。

例: When I was a child, I often spent my birthday at my grandmother’s house because she would prepare special dishes such as sushi. I remember being around six or seven and inviting cousins to eat and play, which made the day cheerful and comforting.

提案: 答えは肯定的ですが、時制と語彙の誤り（“made me fun”は不自然）を直す必要があります。理由を一つに絞って深掘りし、現在形と過去形を正しく使い分けてください。接続語（because, so, therefore, as a result）を活用して論理的に述べましょう。

例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it gives me a chance to connect with family. Because my parents and grandmother always prepare a nice dinner, celebrating together helps me feel loved and appreciated, so I continue the tradition every year.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、文法ミス（主語一致や時制、語順）と語彙選択の問題が目立ちます（“gives me a life”は不自然）。また一般化するなら“in China”という問いに対して文化的な根拠や比較を加えると説得力が増します。敬意を表す表現や理由を具体化してください。

例: I believe celebrating a mother’s birthday is especially important. In Chinese culture, parents are highly respected, and celebrating my mother’s birthday is a way to thank her for raising me and supporting the family. For example, I usually give her a heartfelt card and prepare a special meal to show my appreciation.

× I usually eat dinner with my parents on my birthday because they prepare a special dinner for me.

✓ I usually eat dinner with my parents on my birthday because they prepare a special meal for me.

Use present simple for habitual actions (correct). Change 'dinner' repeated to 'meal' to avoid repetition and sound natural; no tense change needed.

× I was a child.

✓ When I was a child,

The sentence fragment 'I was a child.' is grammatically correct but unnatural as a standalone answer to the question. Beginning with 'When I was a child,' links it to the following clause and maintains past tense.

× I often went to my grandmother's house on my birthday because she prepared a special dinner like a sushi for me.

✓ I often went to my grandmother's house on my birthday because she prepared a special dish like sushi for me.

Past simple 'went' and 'prepared' are correct for past habitual actions. Change 'a special dinner like a sushi' to 'a special dish like sushi' because 'sushi' is uncountable and does not take the indefinite article 'a'; 'dish' is more natural.

× It made me happy and reduced stress.

✓ It made me happy and reduced my stress.

Past simple is appropriate. Add the possessive 'my' before 'stress' to clarify whose stress was reduced.

× Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because my parents and grandmother prepared a special dinner for me.

✓ Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because my parents and grandmother prepare a special dinner for me.

The first clause is present simple to state a general truth. Change 'prepared' to present simple 'prepare' to match habitual present meaning (they habitually prepare it).

× It made me fun and excited, so I still celebrate my birthday with my family.

✓ It made me feel happy and excited, so I still celebrate my birthday with my family.

'Made me fun' is incorrect because 'fun' describes something enjoyable, not a person's feeling. Use 'feel happy' or 'made me happy' and 'excited' to describe emotions.

× I think it is the most important for me to celebrate mother's birthday because she gives me a life and have supported me so it helps me fun and excited.

✓ I think it is most important for me to celebrate my mother's birthday because she gave me life and has supported me, so it makes me happy and excited.

Multiple issues: possessive 'my mother's' is required. Use past simple 'gave me life' (birth) and present perfect 'has supported me' to show ongoing support. 'Have' must agree with subject—here 'she has'. Replace 'helps me fun and excited' with 'makes me happy and excited' to correctly express emotions.