Fishing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition, filler phrases (e.g. "I'm not going to lie", "you know", "speaking of"), and irrelevant tangents. Use correct word choices and short sentences (no more than five).

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy grilled tuna and classic fish and chips because the flavors are simple and satisfying. For example, when I visit coastal restaurants I usually order tuna steak, which is both healthy and tasty.

提案: Answer directly and correct vocabulary. Begin with a clear yes/no, then give one or two specific facts or experiences. Remove slang and unclear words (e.g. "fish mortgage", "heckle"). Keep sentences short and coherent and use linking words like "for example" or "so" when adding detail.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I often go to the local fish market where vendors sell fresh mackerel and shrimp. I usually bargain with sellers and buy fish early in the morning when it is freshest.

提案: Give a clear, structured response: state whether fishing is popular, then provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid awkward phrasing and fillers (e.g. "I can't live is of absolute popularity", "and all that stuff"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example" and limit to three to five sentences.

例: Yes, fishing is very popular in Vietnam because many people rely on seafood for their diet and livelihood. For example, coastal towns have large fishing fleets, and many cities have markets selling a wide variety of fresh and canned fish.

× Eating fish? Are you kidding? I'm not going to lie, I love eating all sort of fish.

✓ Eating fish? Are you kidding? I'm not going to lie, I love eating all sorts of fish.

The phrase 'all sort of' is incorrect; the plural 'all sorts of' is the correct idiom when referring to various kinds. This is a quantifier/alignment with plural nouns; change 'sort' to 'sorts' to match 'fish' in a general, plural sense.

× And Speaking of eating fish and consuming fish related, well, dishes, you know, I love a tuna to the moon and back and fish and chip, the latter being a tradition of the British cuisine.

✓ And speaking of eating fish and fish-related dishes, you know, I love tuna to the moon and back and fish and chips, the latter being a tradition of British cuisine.

Multiple issues: 'Speaking' should be lowercase as it continues the sentence; 'fish related' needs a hyphen to form the compound adjective 'fish-related'; 'a tuna' is unnatural—use 'tuna' without 'a' when speaking generally; 'fish and chip' should be plural 'fish and chips'; 'the British cuisine' should be 'British cuisine' without 'the'. These corrections fix adjective formation, article usage, and idiomatic plurality.

× I'm not going to lie, it's the best thing in the world.

✓ I'm not going to lie, it's the best thing in the world.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. Included here to show it fits the context and requires no correction.

× Now come to think of it, you know I'm dying to have one right now in front of me.

✓ Now that I come to think of it, I'm dying to have one right in front of me.

Original word order 'Now come to think of it' is less natural; 'Now that I come to think of it' or 'Come to think of it' is correct. Also 'in front of me' is better as 'right in front of me' for emphasis. This adjusts sentence structure and natural phrasing.

× Are you kidding? I'm not gonna lie, I have been to a traditional fish mortgage and fish vendors, if I can call it this way for so many times.

✓ Are you kidding? I'm not gonna lie, I have been to a traditional fish market and dealt with fish vendors, if I can put it that way, many times.

'fish mortgage' is a wrong word; should be 'fish market'. 'Fish vendors' need a verb — 'dealt with' or 'visited' — to make sense. 'If I can call it this way' is awkward; better 'if I can put it that way'. 'For so many times' should be 'many times'. These fix preposition/word choice and idiomatic phrasing.

× I'm Speaking of those wholesalers and St. vendors.

✓ I'm speaking of those wholesalers and street vendors.

Capitalization 'Speaking' should be lowercase; 'St.' incorrectly abbreviates 'street' here and may be misinterpreted. Use 'street vendors' for clarity. This corrects pronoun/capitalization and abbreviation misuse.

× I would say they have everything in the world and everything under the sun.

✓ I would say they have everything in the world and everything under the sun.

Sentence is grammatical and idiomatic; no correction needed. Included to show it's acceptable.

× You can actually smell fish from afar and lay your hands on Heckle, bargain with the sellers and whatnot.

✓ You can actually smell fish from afar, get your hands on them, haggle with the sellers, and so on.

'lay your hands on Heckle' is incorrect: 'lay your hands on' is idiomatic but must be followed by the object (e.g., 'them'); 'Heckle' is wrong word—likely 'haggle' meaning bargain. Replace with 'get your hands on them' and 'haggle'. 'Whatnot' is informal; 'and so on' is clearer. Fixes preposition/object and word choice.

× Well, fishing I can't live is of absolute popularity in my country, Vietnam.

✓ Well, fishing is extremely popular in my country, Vietnam.

Original has garbled word order 'fishing I can't live is of absolute popularity' which mixes idioms and tenses. Recast to simple present 'fishing is extremely popular' to state a general fact. This corrects tense and sentence structure.

× Speaking of its prominence, you can see fish markets everywhere and fish wholesalers and supermarkets and St. vendors and even convenience stores and selling fish of all kinds from canned fish to fresh fish and all that stuff and and the list goes on.

✓ Speaking of its prominence, you can see fish markets everywhere: wholesalers, supermarkets, street vendors, and even convenience stores selling fish of all kinds, from canned to fresh, and the list goes on.

Multiple issues: 'St. vendors' should be 'street vendors'; double 'and' error 'and and'; 'selling fish' should attach to the stores not be a separate fragment. Use a colon and list items for clarity and correct preposition/structure. Remove redundancy 'fish of all kinds' to 'fish of all kinds, from canned to fresh'.