Laughing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your view, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid contradictory phrases (e.g., “like some kinds of disease”) and correct grammar (use present simple: “I prefer”). Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to connect ideas.

例: I think laughter is an important part of daily life because it reduces stress and brings people closer. For example, I usually laugh most at family gatherings and on my birthday, when we tell jokes and share funny stories. This helps me relax and feel connected to my relatives.

提案: Answer directly with a clear time reference, then give concise, specific details and use linking words like “because” or “while.” Reduce hesitation and repetition, and fix verb tense (past simple). Keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: I laughed yesterday with my sisters while we were playing games and watching cartoons. For example, we watched Doraemon and some funny clips, which made us laugh a lot because the characters did silly things.

提案: Give a direct, confident response and explain how you make people laugh with specific methods or examples. Avoid vague or odd phrases like “my face is very funny” unless you connect them naturally. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Correct grammar (e.g., “I can make people laugh by…”).

例: Yes, I think I can make others laugh because I like to tell silly stories and imitate voices. For example, at parties I often mimic cartoon characters and tell funny anecdotes, which usually gets everyone laughing.

提案: Start with a direct statement, then give a clear reason with correct tense and specific examples. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid awkward phrasing such as “continuously watching” — instead say “I watched a lot of cartoons as a child.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I prefer watching comedies to horror films because I grew up watching cartoons that made me laugh. For example, I often watched Doraemon and Ninja Hatori as a child, and I still enjoy lighthearted films that cheer me up now.

× So I would prefer laughing can be like sometime some kinds of disease.

✓ I would prefer not to laugh because sometimes laughter can seem inappropriate, like in cases of illness.

The original sentence misuses 'prefer' and has awkward adjective/adverb usage ('sometime some kinds of disease'). It also has sentence structure issues. Use 'prefer not to' to express choice, 'sometimes' for adverb, and rephrase 'some kinds of disease' to 'cases of illness' for clarity. Keep verb forms consistent. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13)

× So I would only prefer laughing in my birthday times or family meetings, gatherings or with my sisters.

✓ I would only prefer laughing at my birthdays, during family meetings and gatherings, or with my sisters.

Use correct prepositions: 'at' for events like birthdays, 'during' for meetings/gatherings, and use parallel structure. Also pluralize 'birthday' to 'birthdays' for regular occasions. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11)

× I would prefer laughing with my families.

✓ I would prefer laughing with my family.

'Family' as a group is usually singular when referring to one's relatives collectively. 'Families' implies multiple, separate families. Use 'my family' for your relatives. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1)

× Uh, so basically last time I laugh, uh, is yesterday with my sisters.

✓ Basically, the last time I laughed was yesterday with my sisters.

Use past tense 'laughed' for a past event and place the time expression correctly: 'the last time I laughed was yesterday.' Also adjust word order for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5)

× Uh, so we were playing games, uh, watching video videos like cartoons, Doraemons.

✓ We were playing games and watching videos like cartoons, such as Doraemon.

Redundant 'video videos' should be 'videos.' Use 'Doraemon' as the singular name of the cartoon. Use 'and' to join activities. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13)

× It was very funny and it was very amusing to us watching the.

✓ They were very funny and very amusing for us to watch.

Original ends abruptly and has incorrect structure. Use plural 'they' to refer to videos/cartoons and 'to watch' for the action. Place 'for us' appropriately. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× So I would say I can make other people laugh because I'm very amusing to people.

✓ I would say I can make other people laugh because I am amusing to them.

Use 'am' for first person and 'to them' is more natural than 'to people' when referring to 'other people.' This is a pronoun/preposition clarity and verb form consistency issue. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 2)

× So I can make people laugh by laughing them and.

✓ I can make people laugh by laughing with them and being playful.

'Laughing them' is incorrect; use 'laughing with them.' Complete the sentence with a parallel phrase like 'being playful.' Ensure correct verb-preposition collocation. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 8)

× Yes, I prefer watching funny movies rather than horror movies because in childhood I am continuously watching the cartoons like Doraemons and Ninja Authority that makes me very often laughed before and now.

✓ Yes, I prefer watching funny movies rather than horror movies because, in childhood, I watched cartoons like Doraemon and Ninja Turtles that often made me laugh then and still do now.

Tense should be past for childhood 'watched' and 'made me laugh.' 'Am continuously watching' is incorrect; use simple past. Correct cartoon names and use 'often made me laugh' and 'still do now' for present continuation. Fix subject-verb agreement 'that made' referring to plural 'cartoons.' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 6)