Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบมีความหมายไม่ชัดเจนและมีหลายข้อผิดพลาดด้านไวยากรณ์ ควรใช้ประโยคเริ่มต้นที่ตรงกับคำถาม ระบุคำว่า “teacher” แทนคำผิด พยายามใช้ประโยคสั้น 2–3 ประโยค และแก้ข้อผิดพลาดของกริยาและคำสรรพนาม ตัวอย่างสิ่งที่ควรปรับ: ใช้คำกริยาที่เหมาะสมกับประธาน (he doesn’t), ใช้คำเชื่อมอย่าง however หรือ although อย่างถูกต้อง และลดความซ้ำซ้อน

例: Yes, my favourite teacher is my advisor. He no longer teaches at night school, but he still advises me and helped me a lot with assignments and getting into university.

提案: ประโยคสับสน ใช้คำศัพท์ผิด (เช่น “T-shirt” แทน “teacher”) และโครงสร้างประโยคไม่เป็นธรรมชาติ ควรตอบตรง ๆ ว่า ‘ใช่’ หรือ ‘ไม่’ แล้วให้เหตุผลสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น but หรือ although อย่างเหมาะสม และแก้ tense ให้ถูกต้อง (present simple/present perfect)

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher. My parents still talk to them occasionally, but I rarely hear any details about their news.

提案: คำตอบยาวไม่เป็นระเบียบ มีคำผิดหลายจุด และลำดับเหตุผลไม่ชัดเจน ควรเริ่มด้วย topic sentence แล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้ linking words เช่น because, so, for example และปรับไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง (e.g. helped me, encouraged me to join activities, add to my portfolio)

例: He helped me by encouraging me to join extracurricular activities because I'm quite shy. For example, he suggested projects I could include in my portfolio, which improved my chances of getting into university.

提案: ตอบชัดเจนว่าไม่อยากเป็นครู แต่มีคำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ผิด (เช่น T-shirt, require -> requires, double 'and') ควรใช้โครงสร้างที่ชัดเจน: give a direct answer, then 1–2 supporting reasons เชื่อมด้วย because หรือ moreover และใช้คำศัพท์เหมาะสม เช่น talkative, working with children

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future. I think the job requires a lot of talking and I'm not very talkative, and I also don't enjoy working with children.

× Yes, my favorite T-shirt is my advisor, although he don't teach at night school anymore but he still works as my advisor and helped me a lot with my assignments and to get into the university.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher is my advisor. Although he doesn't teach at night school anymore, he still works as my advisor and has helped me a lot with my assignments and getting into university.

The sentence contains multiple errors. 'T-shirt' is the wrong word; use 'teacher' (vocabulary, not in list, but corrected). 'don't' should be 'doesn't' because the subject 'he' requires third person singular (Grammar Problem Type ID 2). The long sentence should be split for clarity (sentence structure). 'helped me a lot with my assignments and to get into the university' is ungrammatical: use present perfect 'has helped' to show ongoing relevance and 'getting into university' (gerund) instead of 'to get into the university'. Also remove the definite article before 'university' in general statements. Suggestion: use shorter sentences, match verb forms to subject and use gerunds after 'help' in this context.

× Although he don't teach at night school anymore but he still works as my advisor and helped me a lot with my assignments and to get into the university.

✓ Although he doesn't teach at night school anymore, he still works as my advisor and has helped me a lot with my assignments and getting into university.

'Don't' is incorrect with third person singular 'he'; use 'doesn't' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2). Also use 'has helped' (present perfect) to indicate assistance that affects the present, and 'getting into university' (gerund) after 'help' rather than 'to get'.

× I am not contacting my family school T-shirt anymore, although my parents still do but they didn't tell me a lot about it.

✓ I am not in contact with my primary school teacher anymore, although my parents still are, but they haven't told me much about it.

'Contacting' is the wrong verb form; the idiom is 'in contact with' (preposition + noun). 'Family school T-shirt' is incorrect vocabulary; use 'primary school teacher'. 'Parents still do' requires clarification 'still are' (in contact). 'Didn't tell me a lot' should be present perfect 'haven't told me much' to relate past actions to the present. Also use 'much' not 'a lot' in negative contexts for naturalness (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 for pronouns and also tense issues ID 5/6).

× My favorite T-shirt, helping me to get it to the university because he knows I'm a quite inactive person, so he keeps letting me the activities that I can do to get to put into My Portfolio and that helped me a lot.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me get into university because he knows I'm quite an inactive person, so he keeps suggesting activities I can include in my portfolio, and that has helped me a lot.

Multiple issues: 'T-shirt' should be 'teacher'. Sentence fragment 'My favorite teacher, helping me...' is incorrect; use a full clause with past tense 'helped' or present perfect. 'Helping me to get it to the university' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me get into university' (omit 'to' after 'help' when followed by verb). 'He keeps letting me the activities' is wrong; use 'keeps suggesting activities' or 'keeps giving me activities'. 'Get to put into My Portfolio' should be 'include in my portfolio'. Use article 'my' lowercase. Use present perfect 'has helped me a lot' to show ongoing result. Also adjust 'quite an inactive person' for correct article use (Grammar Problem Type IDs 8,9,22).

× In the future I don't want to be a T-shirt because I think this thought require a lot of talking and and not talkative person.

✓ In the future I don't want to be a teacher because I think the job requires a lot of talking and I am not a talkative person.

'T-shirt' should be 'teacher'. 'Require' must agree with singular noun 'job' or 'this' => 'requires' (third person singular) (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27). 'And and not talkative person' is ungrammatical; insert subject 'I am not a talkative person'. Use 'the job' or 'teaching' to be precise. Suggestion: use subject-verb agreement and a clear subject in the second clause.

× Moreover, I don't like being with kids so I think I won't be able to be a teacher.

✓ Moreover, I don't like being with children, so I don't think I would be a good teacher.

'Kids' is informal; 'children' is more appropriate. 'I don't think I won't be able to be a teacher' would be a double negative; original used 'I think I won't be able' which is acceptable but stylistically 'I don't think I would be a good teacher' is more natural. Also adjust modal verb 'would' for hypothetical future and smoother phrasing (Grammar Problem Type IDs 7 and 26).