Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更直接、有条理并注意语法和句子简洁。可以先给出主题句说明频率或态度，然后用1-2个简短具体理由支持，避免重复表达，纠正语法错误（如“gain way”应为“gain weight”或“get fat”，以及“in them”应为“in it”），并控制在不超过五句。

例: I rarely look at myself in the mirror because I feel self-conscious about my appearance, especially when I gain weight or feel tired. However, I do glance at mirrors occasionally to fix my hair or check my clothes before going out.

提案: 内容较好但需改进语法与用词，先给出直接回答，再补充具体细节。注意冠词和名词单复数（“a big fan of that characters”应为“a big fan of that character”或“those characters”），并可用连接词增强连贯性。

例: Yes, I have. Two years ago I bought a small Kitty hand mirror because I’m a big fan of that character. It’s compact and portable, so I can slip it into my bag and use it to check my makeup or tidy my hair when I’m out.

提案: 回答明确但注意语法和词汇准确性，先一句直接回答频率，再用一两个具体情境说明。修正复数与所有格（“take mirror”→“take a mirror”，“mobile phones camera”→“my mobile phone’s camera”，“makeups”→“makeup”）。避免冗余表达。

例: I don't usually carry a mirror because I can use my mobile phone’s camera when needed. However, I sometimes bring a compact mirror when I travel or attend important events to quickly check my hair and makeup.

提案: 回答含糊且语法混乱，需先直接回答是否会使用，再清楚简洁地解释理由并给出具体文化背景或个人看法。修正许多语法错误（如“a mirror is represents the function”，“affect your lucky”，“your mom, the trends of money”，“it's import”），使用连贯词连接句子并控制句子数。

例: No, I wouldn’t use mirrors as room decorations because in Chinese culture mirrors are thought to influence luck and wealth. For that reason my family prefers to avoid placing large mirrors in the bedroom.

× Well, I seldom look at myself in the mirror because I have little confidence about my appearance, especially when I gain way or look tired in my daily life.

✓ Well, I seldom look at myself in the mirror because I have little confidence about my appearance, especially when I gain weight or look tired in my daily life.

原句中用的是“gain way”显然是拼写错误，正确应为“gain weight”。该句时态为一般现在时，描述习惯或常态，使用现在时是正确的。建议注意单词拼写并检查常见短语（gain weight）。

× So whenever I pass by the mirror in public, I avoid looking at myself in them.

✓ So whenever I pass a mirror in public, I avoid looking at myself in it.

原句中“the mirror in public”和代词“them”数不一致，产生代词指代错误。应将前文改为单数“a mirror”或将代词改为“it”。建议确保先行词与代词在人称和数上一致。

× But sometimes I need to check out my hair and dress up.

✓ But sometimes I need to check my hair and dress up.

“check out”多用于非正式口语且含有‘查看、约会’等含义，直接使用“check my hair”更自然。句中动词形式本身无时态错误，但精简用法更地道。建议在正式表达中使用更准确的动词搭配。

× About two years ago I bought a small Kitty hands mirror because I am big fan of that characters.

✓ About two years ago I bought a small Kitty hand mirror because I am a big fan of those characters.

原句有多处错误：1) “Kitty hands mirror”词序和单复数不对，正确应为“Kitty hand mirror”或更常见“Kitty handheld mirror”；2) “I am big fan”缺少不定冠词“a”；3) “that characters”数不一致且指示代词错误，应为复数“those characters”。建议注意冠词使用、名词单复数和指示代词的搭配。

× It was compact and very portable so I could easily slip it into my bag and use it to check my makeup or tidy my hair on the go.

✓ It was compact and very portable, so I could easily slip it into my bag and use it to check my makeup or tidy my hair on the go.

原句语法基本正确，但缺少在复合句中常用的逗号以分隔主句和从句。建议在写作中使用逗号改善句子流畅性。

× Well, I don't usually take mirror with me because I can easily use my mobile phones camera if it's necessary.

✓ Well, I don't usually take a mirror with me because I can easily use my mobile phone's camera if it's necessary.

原句中“take mirror”缺少不定冠词“a”；“mobile phones camera”缺少所有格撇号且“phones”应为单数“phone”。建议注意冠词和所有格的正确使用。

× Sometimes I carry a compact mirror when I travel or attend important events just to check my makeups and my hair on the go.

✓ Sometimes I carry a compact mirror when I travel or attend important events just to check my makeup and my hair on the go.

“makeups”为不可数名词，应使用单数形式“makeup”。建议记住某些名词（如makeup）在英语中通常为不可数。

× Well, I would say I never use mirrors to decorate my room because, you know, in Chinese culture, a mirror is represents the function.

✓ Well, I would say I never use mirrors to decorate my room because, you know, in Chinese culture, a mirror represents a function.

原句中“a mirror is represents the function”有多余的系动词“is”和不明确的名词“the function”。应删去多余的“is”，并改为更自然的表达“represents a function”。建议检查系动词和动词原形的重复使用，并使名词表述更明确。

× So we, uh, it means it can affect your lucky and your mom, the trends of money.

✓ So, uh, it means it can affect your luck and the flow of money.

原句中代词和名词混乱：“your lucky”应为名词“luck”；“your mom”显然不符合语境，可能是错误听写，改为“the flow of money”或“people's fortune”。建议使用正确的名词并确保句子成分一致且与语境相符。

× So, umm, it's import.

✓ So, umm, it's important.

原句“it's import”中“import”是名词或动词，缺少形容词“important”。句子结构需用形容词来描述“it”。建议注意词类选择，使用正确的词形。