Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence that answers frequency, correct small grammar errors, avoid redundant fragments, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I look in the mirror every morning before I leave the house to make sure my clothes and hair look neat. For example, I check that my shirt is tucked in and my hair is tidy, which helps me feel confident when I meet colleagues or friends.

提案: Good direct answer and clear detail. To improve, add a linking word to explain why you liked it and include one specific feature or benefit. Keep responses natural and concise (max 3 sentences).

例: Yes, I bought a mirror online last year because it had an attractive frame and a very clear reflective surface. Because of its size and clarity, I enjoy using it every morning to check my hair and outfit.

提案: Remove unclear fragments and correct word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use a linking word to add a specific example of when you use the compact mirror. Keep it natural and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I always carry a small compact mirror in my handbag because it lets me quickly check my hair and makeup. For instance, I use it before meetings or social events to make sure I look presentable.

提案: Good content and relevant detail. Improve fluency by removing fillers (uh) and small grammar mistakes; use one linking word to connect the decorative reason and the practical use. Keep to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: Yes, I have a large mirror in my bedroom because it makes the room look bigger and brighter. Additionally, I use it every morning to check my clothes and appearance before going to work.

× this helps me make sure my hand make clothes look neat

✓ this helps me make sure my hands and clothes look neat

The original phrase uses 'hand' singular and an incorrect structure 'make clothes' causing a plural mismatch and meaning confusion. 'Hands' should be plural to match 'my' and both 'hands and clothes' are the intended items. Use 'and' to join two nouns and ensure verbs agree: 'make sure my hands and clothes look neat.'

× Having a mirror at home is convenient when I need to do a quick room and check before going to work or meeting friends

✓ Having a mirror at home is convenient when I need to do a quick room check before going to work or meeting friends

The phrase 'do a quick room and check' is ungrammatical due to word order and an extra conjunction. Combine 'room' and 'check' into the compound noun 'room check' or better 'quick room check.' This fixes sentence structure and produces a natural expression.

× Have you ever bought mirrors?

✓ Have you ever bought a mirror?

The question likely asks about purchasing a mirror in general or at least one mirror; using the singular 'a mirror' is more natural. 'Have you ever bought mirrors?' is grammatical but implies multiple mirrors; choose singular for clarity.

× It has a very attractive design and a clear reflective surface, so I enjoy checking my appearance in it every morning

✓ It has a very attractive design and a clear reflective surface, so I enjoy checking my appearance in it every morning

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct and the third person singular verb 'has' correctly matches 'it.' (Included here to show it was checked and needs no change.)

× Grow with you. Yes, I always carry a small compact mirror in my handbag because it's easier for me to check my appearance, especially my hair and effort

✓ Yes, I always carry a small compact mirror in my handbag because it's easier for me to check my appearance, especially my hair and makeup

'Grow with you.' is irrelevant and likely a transcription error and must be removed. 'Effort' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'makeup.' Replacing it with 'makeup' produces a coherent meaning. Also remove the extraneous fragment.

× I often use it. Use this before meetings or social events to make sure I look presentable

✓ I often use it before meetings or social events to make sure I look presentable

The two short sentences are disjointed; 'Use this before...' is an imperative fragment that doesn't fit the speaker's narration. Combine into a single declarative sentence: 'I often use it before meetings or social events...' This fixes sentence structure and maintains tense and subject consistency.

× it's uh, it's surface enhances the room, making it look bigger and brighter

✓ its surface enhances the room, making it look bigger and brighter

Two issues: the filler 'uh' can be omitted in written form, and 'it's' (contraction for 'it is') is incorrect; the possessive form 'its' should be used to modify 'surface.' Using 'its surface' correctly shows possession.