Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, grammatical and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and filler words. Aim for 2–4 complete sentences and use relevant vocabulary like “email,” “check my calendar,” “contact colleagues” or “friends.”

例: Yes, I send emails quite often. I mainly use email to check my calendar and confirm appointments, and I also contact colleagues and friends when I need to share documents or important information.

提案: Clarify the situation and provide specific reasons. Begin with a direct answer, then explain when and why, using linking words (for example, because, when, so). Correct grammar (e.g., “don’t have my professional number”) and avoid trailing fragments.

例: I send emails mainly when I need to share important schedule information, because I often don’t have someone’s professional phone number. For example, I email meeting times and attachments so recipients can keep a written record.

提案: Make the structure clearer and choose precise vocabulary. Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, since). Replace vague phrases like “others app” with “other apps” or “instant messaging.” Reduce hesitation words like “uh.”

例: Yes, email is still popular in China. Many people use email because it is convenient and reliable, and it is better for sending formal documents compared with instant messaging apps.

提案: Give a clear prediction and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, however). Avoid repeating phrases and use correct tense and modal verbs (e.g., “will become” not “would be developed”).

例: I think email will become less popular in everyday communication because new technologies and messaging apps are developing quickly. However, email will still be used for formal or professional communication because it provides a reliable written record.

× Absolutely yes. I usually use my mail whenever I check my schedule or. Communicating with friends or. My.

✓ Absolutely. I usually use my email when I check my schedule or communicate with friends.

Original contains sentence fragments and incorrect punctuation making the structure unclear. Combine fragments into complete sentences and use 'email' (uncountable or singular form) and the base verb 'communicate' after 'or' to form parallel structure. Also remove unnecessary filler 'yes' after 'Absolutely' for natural speech.

× I usually use my emails whenever I share about my important schedule because mostly I didn't know my professional number. Because it is.

✓ I usually use my email when I share important schedule information because I often did not have my work phone number with me.

The original uses awkward phrasing 'share about my important schedule' and an incomplete reason 'Because it is.' Replace with 'share important schedule information' and supply a complete clause. 'Didn't know my professional number' is corrected to 'did not have my work phone number' for clarity and correct verb usage; 'did not have' is past tense appropriate for the context.

× In my country many people tend to use uh emails because it is really convenient and quicker than others app and people can use really easier than other apps.

✓ In my country many people tend to use email because it is really convenient and quicker than other apps, and people find it easier to use than other apps.

Use 'email' without plural or article when speaking generally. 'Others app' is incorrect; use 'other apps'. Change 'people can use really easier' to 'people find it easier to use' to correct adjective/adverb placement and verb choice. Ensure parallel structure and correct comparative form 'easier'.

× It depends on the situation, but I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because technology would be developed really faster, so I think.

✓ It depends on the situation, but I think sending emails will be less popular in the future because technology will develop much faster.

Mixes conditional/modal forms incorrectly ('will be' with 'would be developed'). Use future simple 'will develop' to match 'will be less popular'. Replace 'really faster' with comparative 'much faster'. Remove the redundant 'so I think' at the end for concision.