Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct basic idea but fix grammar, pronunciation, and specificity. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and unrelated words (e.g., “skis books”).

例: Yes, I love drawing because it helps me relax and express my imagination. For example, I often sketch characters from my favorite stories in my sketchbook, which makes me feel calm and proud of my progress.

提案: Make the response more natural and specific, correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “go to the gallery,” “their colors,” “more vivid” instead of “frail”). Use one reason with a supporting detail and a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries because the quiet atmosphere helps me concentrate and appreciate artworks. For example, seeing a large painting in person lets me notice brushstrokes and vibrant colors that photos cannot capture.

提案: Clarify tense and structure: answer the question directly in present/future, then give specific examples. Use linking words to list examples and ensure correct plurals and article use.

例: Yes, I would like to learn more about art so I can improve my techniques. For instance, I want to study landscape painting and practice painting rivers, skies, and animals to make my scenes more realistic and expressive.

提案: Use correct past tense and concise structure: give a clear topic sentence about childhood, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid tense inconsistencies and unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I learned to draw when I was a child. I used to draw on the walls and fill many sketchbooks, and I often spent my free time after school practicing painting characters and landscapes.

× I loves drawing because it makes me feel relaxed and happy and I can express my ideas and imagination through colours and skis books.

✓ I love drawing because it makes me feel relaxed and happy and I can express my ideas and imagination through colours and sketchbooks.

The subject I requires the base form of the verb (love), not the third-person singular form loves. Also 'skis books' is incorrect; context suggests 'sketchbooks'. Suggestion: use 'I love' and replace the incorrect noun with 'sketchbooks'. Note: no double quotes used.

× Yes, I love to go the gallery because I love the beautiful environment there and seeing the actual size picture and colors of ours feels more frail and memorable.

✓ Yes, I love to go to the gallery because I love the beautiful environment there and seeing the actual-size pictures and colors feels more real and memorable.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'Actual size' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'actual-size' before 'pictures'. 'Picture' should be plural to match 'seeing' of artworks, and 'colors of ours' is incorrect and unclear; 'colors' alone or 'the colors' is appropriate. 'Frail' is incorrect in context; 'real' fits meaning. Suggestion: add 'to', hyphenate compound adjective, pluralize 'pictures', and choose appropriate adjective 'real'.

× Yes, I learned more about art. I would love to paint different things such as a natural scenes, rivers, sky, more animals and cartoons scenes in a creative way.

✓ Yes, I have learned more about art. I would love to paint different things such as natural scenes, rivers, the sky, more animals, and cartoon scenes in a creative way.

The student used simple past 'learned' while context of current interest calls for present perfect 'have learned' to show experience up to now. 'a natural scenes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove article and make 'natural scenes' plural. Add 'the' before 'sky' for specificity. 'cartoons scenes' is incorrect pluralization and order; use 'cartoon scenes'. Suggestion: use present perfect for ongoing experience, fix article-noun agreement and noun forms, and add missing commas for clarity.

× Honestly I learn drawing.

✓ Honestly, I learned drawing when I was young.

The student used present tense 'learn' but refers to past learning; use past tense 'learned'. The original sentence is also incomplete; adding 'when I was young' or similar clarifies timing and fits the question about being a kid. Suggestion: use past tense and provide time reference. (Comma added after 'Honestly' for natural speech.)

× When I was kid I was draw on the walls and in my sketchbooks.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to draw on the walls and in my sketchbooks.

Missing article 'a' before 'kid'. 'I was draw' is incorrect verb structure; use 'used to draw' to express past habitual action or 'I drew'. Also add comma after the time clause. Suggestion: include the article and use correct past habitual construction.

× Whenever I get some free times after schools I love painting.

✓ Whenever I get some free time after school, I love painting.

'Some free times' is incorrect; 'free time' is uncountable. 'After schools' should be singular 'after school' to refer to one's school day. Add comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use uncountable noun 'time' and singular 'school' for this context.