Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use a clearer structure: start with a direct topic sentence stating your favourite colour, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g. use 'suits me' not 'it suits me a lot' twice).

例: My favourite colour is sky blue. I like it because it’s light and calming, which helps me feel relaxed. For example, I often choose sky-blue shirts in spring because they make me feel fresher and I receive compliments for that colour.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: begin with a clear topic sentence naming the disliked colour, then give one or two coherent reasons using linking words. Correct verb forms and pronouns (e.g. 'they act' not 'it act', 'they don't suit me'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'don't attach with my fear.'

例: I dislike neon colours because they are extremely bright and hurt my eyes. Also, they feel overwhelming in clothing; for instance, I avoid neon shirts because they draw too much attention and make me feel uncomfortable.

提案: Structure the response: state the main colours, then explain why with one supporting detail. Use plural/singular forms correctly and avoid vague phrases like 'this suits a lot.' Use linking words such as 'and' or 'because' to connect ideas.

例: Most of my friends prefer basic colours like black, white and sky blue. They choose these because such colours are easy to match with other clothes and look neat for both casual and formal occasions.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the colours, then explain one specific reason. Fix grammar and tense errors, and avoid contradictory clauses. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however'.

例: Bright colours make me uncomfortable in my room because they are too stimulating and prevent me from relaxing. For example, I prefer pale or pastel walls because when I sit in a softly lit room I feel calmer and can focus better.

× I prefer to wear different types of clothes with different colours in different seasons but my favorite colour is sky blue colour because it suits me a lot and it is a light and attractive colour and when I feel little bit relaxed and more compliments it suits me a lot.

✓ I prefer to wear different types of clothes in different seasons, but my favorite colour is sky blue because it suits me and is light and attractive; when I feel a little relaxed and receive compliments, it suits me even more.

The sentence has several adjective/adverb misuse and wordiness. 'Sky blue colour' is redundant; use 'sky blue'. 'A lot' is informal and repetitious; use 'even more' or omit. 'Little bit relaxed' should be 'a little relaxed'. 'More compliments' requires a verb: 'receive compliments'. Break the long run-on sentence with commas or semicolons for clarity.

× I don't like neon colors because I hate the bright colors. It act as a very sharp shades in our eyes and it don't suit me very well and it apart from this they are very heavy and don't attach with my fear.

✓ I don't like neon colors because they are too bright. They act as very sharp shades to the eyes and don't suit me. Besides, they feel overwhelming and do not match my taste.

Multiple subject-verb and pronoun agreement errors: 'It act' should be 'They act' to agree with plural 'neon colors'. 'A very sharp shades' mixes singular and plural; use 'very sharp shades' or 'a very sharp shade'. 'It don't suit' should be 'they don't suit' or 'do not suit'. 'Don't attach with my fear' is incorrect phrasing; 'do not match my taste' or 'make me uncomfortable' conveys meaning. Also remove redundancy and correct verb forms.

× My friends like very basic colors such as black, white or sky blue and apart from this they also love to wear light color because they think that it is a kind of light and happier colours and this suits a lot.

✓ My friends prefer basic colours such as black, white, or sky blue, and they also like wearing light colours because they think these look brighter and happier, which suits them well.

Adjective/adverb choices and agreement need fixing: 'light color' should be 'light colours' to match plural friends. 'It is a kind of light and happier colours' is ungrammatical; use 'these look brighter and happier'. 'This suits a lot' is informal and unclear; use 'suits them well'.

× Mostly the bright colors are often feel uncomfortable in my room because I don't feel relaxed and comfortable then I was set in a dark room but when I sit in a Lightroom I feel little bit relaxed and quiet and they don't distract me.

✓ Bright colours often make me feel uncomfortable in my room because I don't feel relaxed there; when I sit in a dark room I feel more relaxed and calm, and bright colours do not distract me then.

Tense and verb form issues: 'are often feel' is incorrect — use 'often make me feel' or 'often make the room uncomfortable'. 'Then I was set in a dark room' mixes past tense without context; use present 'when I sit in a dark room'. 'Lightroom' is wrong term; likely 'bright room' or 'a room with natural light' — adjusted to 'dark room' and contrast. 'Little bit relaxed and quiet' should be 'more relaxed and calm'. Ensure consistent present tense and correct verb forms.