Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/word-choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., 'friends and family members' twice), and correct articles and word forms (use 'a suitable gift' and remove 'to' at end). Use one linking phrase to add a short reason or example.

例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts. I enjoy choosing a suitable present because I can imagine my friends’ reactions, and that thought makes me happy.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add specific details with a linking word. Replace vague phrase 'This depends' with a brief clarification (e.g., 'Mostly on special occasions'). Be careful with pluralization and article use ('the spring festival' or 'Spring Festival').

例: Mostly on special occasions. For example, I give gifts on birthdays and during the Spring Festival, because presents are a way to show my appreciation and best wishes.

提案: Start without filler words ('And') and correct word choices ('good at drawing' instead of 'king on'). Use a clear topic sentence followed by a specific example and a linking word ('for example' is fine). Also keep sentences concise and grammatically accurate.

例: First, I consider the recipient’s preferences. For example, one friend is good at drawing, so I would choose a beautiful artwork that suits her taste.

提案: Use correct tense and concise sentence structure. Avoid awkward relative clause ('which has spent more than a week') — instead say how long it took. Use linking words ('and') carefully to join two clear ideas (process and reaction).

例: Yes. I made a handmade gift for my best friend that took me more than a week to complete, and when she received it she was very happy and said she would keep it forever.

提案: Avoid hesitation sounds ('uh') and use a clear structure: topic sentence, brief reason, and an example if needed. Correct possessive and article errors ('the giver's best wishes'). Keep it concise and natural.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts are necessary. A meaningful present that suits the recipient’s preferences can better express the giver’s feelings and best wishes.

× I enjoy the process of choosing A suitable gift for my friends and my family members, and I can imagine their expressions when they receive the gifts.

✓ I enjoy the process of choosing a suitable gift for my friends and family members, and I can imagine their expressions when they receive the gifts.

Capitalization error and unnecessary article: 'A' should be lowercase 'a'. Also 'my friends and my family members' is wordy; omit the second 'my'. Use 'a suitable gift' not 'A suitable gift'. Suggestion: Use consistent capitalization and avoid redundant possessive adjectives.

× And I feel very happy to.

✓ I also feel very happy.

'feel very happy to' is incomplete and ungrammatical; 'to' needs an infinitive verb. Replace with 'I also feel very happy' to complete the sentence and flow naturally. Suggestion: avoid beginning sentences with 'And' in formal speech and ensure verbs are complete.

× This depends.

✓ That depends.

In this context, when referring to a general situation, native speakers typically use 'That depends.' 'This depends' is less natural. Suggestion: Use 'That depends' to respond to a question about conditions.

× I usually give gifts to my friends and family members on some special events such as their birthdays and the spring festivals, and I think this gift can symbolize my best wishes to them.

✓ I usually give gifts to my friends and family members on special occasions such as their birthdays and the Spring Festival, and I think these gifts can symbolize my best wishes to them.

Preposition and word choice: use 'on special occasions' not 'on some special events'. Capitalization: 'Spring Festival' as the name of the holiday. Agreement: 'this gift' should be 'these gifts' or 'a gift' depending on meaning; plural 'gifts' fits since multiple occasions. Suggestion: match number and capitalize proper nouns.

× And first of all I will consider their preference.

✓ First of all, I will consider their preferences.

Starting with 'And' is unnecessary; remove it. Use plural 'preferences' to match 'their'. Add comma after 'First of all'. Suggestion: avoid leading conjunctions and ensure number agreement.

× For example, one of my friends is king on drawing, so I will choose a beautiful artwork for her.

✓ For example, one of my friends is good at drawing, so I would choose a beautiful piece of artwork for her.

Incorrect word 'king' should be 'good at' for ability. 'Choose' tense/modal: 'would choose' is more natural when explaining preference; 'a beautiful artwork' is awkward—use 'a beautiful piece of artwork' or 'a beautiful drawing'. Suggestion: use 'good at' + gerund and natural collocations for artwork.

× I have prepared a handmade gift for my best friend which has spent more than a week and the moment my friend received this gift she was very happy and she said she will keep it forever.

✓ I prepared a handmade gift for my best friend that took me more than a week to make, and the moment she received it she was very happy and said she would keep it forever.

Tense and clause issues: 'I have prepared ... which has spent more than a week' is ungrammatical—use active subject 'that took me more than a week to make'. Use simple past 'prepared' to narrate a past event. Use 'would' for reported future in past context ('said she would'). Also replace 'my friend received this gift' with 'she received it' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clear relative clauses.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. However, consider alternative phrasing: 'Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?' for more natural word order. Suggestion: place 'better' after the verb phrase.

× I don't think so. I think different kinds of gifts can, uh, represent different meanings. Uh, a good gift can uh, not only suit the person's preference, but also can express the givers, uh, best wishes to their friends.

✓ I don't think so. I think different kinds of gifts can represent different meanings. A good gift can not only suit the person's preferences but also express the giver's best wishes to their friend.

Fluency and punctuation: remove filler 'uh'. Parallel structure: 'not only ... but also' should have parallel verbs—'suit' and 'express' without extra 'can'. Number and possessive errors: 'preference' -> 'preferences' or 'the person's preference'; 'givers' should be singular possessive 'giver's' and 'their friends' -> 'their friend' or 'the recipient'. Suggestion: use parallel structure and correct possessives.