Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且内容具体，但句子稍长且有口语填充词（如无）。建议：1）将主句与例子分成两到三句以更清晰；2）避免重复表述，删去多余短语；3）适当使用连接词如“so”或“for instance”使逻辑更紧凑。可以练习用一两个简洁句子先给出观点，再用一两个具体细节支撑。

例: Yes. I pay attention to people’s tastes and habits and try to choose gifts they’ll actually use. For instance, my roommate once said her feet get cold at night, so I bought her an electric foot warmer for her birthday.

提案: 内容相关且包含个人习惯，但存在口语填充词（“UMM”, “uh”）和断句不顺。建议：1）去掉填充词，保持流畅；2）用连词连接两部分（例如“Besides”后直接接动词短语）；3）将两点分别陈述，控制在两至三句内。

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions like festivals and holidays because they’re a traditional way to celebrate. Besides, I often bring back local souvenirs when I travel to share my experiences with friends and family.

提案: 回答结构良好，细节具体且有例子。但“price and priority”表达不够自然，应更明确说明价格和实用性。建议：1）将“price and priority”改为“price and practicality/usefulness”；2）保持句子简洁，使用连接词如“and”或“also”。

例: I mainly consider the recipient’s tastes and hobbies, so I pick gifts that fit their interests — for example, a cookbook for a friend who loves cooking. I also consider price and practicality, choosing something affordable, useful and easy to accept.

提案: 回答自然且富有细节，时间线和例子清晰。小建议：1）把长句分成两句以提高流畅性；2）把“I'm into making gifts by hand”可替换为更正式的“I enjoy making handmade gifts”。

例: Yes, I enjoy making handmade gifts because they feel more personal and show sincere feelings. As a child I made many birthday cards, and this year I made a horse-shaped shell decoration for my dad because it’s the Year of the Horse in China.

提案: 观点明确且有对比，但有一句“It can feel overwhelming or even bursting”用词不当（“bursting”不合适）。建议：1）用更自然的表达如“overwhelming or uncomfortable”；2）稍微扩展一两句说明原因以增强说服力。

例: Sometimes an expensive gift can show how much you value someone, but lavish presents may make people feel overwhelmed or uncomfortable. Overall, I think thoughtfulness matters more than price because a well-chosen, meaningful gift shows you understand the recipient.

× I love picking up local souvenirs while traveling and uh, giving to my friends and family to share my experiences.

✓ I love picking up local souvenirs while traveling and giving them to my friends and family to share my experiences.

原句中“giving to my friends and family”缺少宾语（what to give），造成结构不完整。将“them”补充为代词，指代前文的“local souvenirs”，使句子完整且连贯。建议养成在使用动名词短语后检查是否需要宾语的习惯。

× I usually give gifts on special occasions like festivals and holidays because they are a traditional way to celebrate.

✓ I usually give gifts on special occasions like festivals and holidays because they are a traditional way to celebrate.

句子本身时态使用正确，但“they are a traditional way to celebrate”中代词“they”指前面的“special occasions”，语义可接受；此处无需改动。仅在此处标注为时态检查过且正确。

× I try to pick a gift that is affordable, useful, and easy to accept.

✓ I try to pick a gift that is affordable, useful, and easy to receive.

短语“easy to accept”在此语境下不够地道，英语中更常用“easy to receive”或“easy to accept”可指人是否愿意接受礼物，但“easy to receive”更直接表达“容易接受（携带或使用）”。为清晰建议改为“easy to receive”。（此为用法微调建议）

× When I was a kid I used to make lots of birthday cards for my family and friends and this year I made a horse shaped decoration out of shells for my dad as it's the year of the horse in China.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to make lots of birthday cards for my family and friends, and this year I made a horse-shaped decoration out of shells for my dad because it's the Year of the Horse in China.

原句缺少标点分隔导致句子冗长难读；“horse shaped”应为复合形容词“horse-shaped”；连接词“as”在口语可用，但书面或正式表达更清晰用“because”；“Year of the Horse”作为节日名称首字母大写更合适。以上为时态与格式的修正建议。

× Besides UMM. I love picking up local souvenirs while traveling and uh, giving to my friends and family to share my experiences.

✓ Besides, um, I love picking up local souvenirs while traveling and giving them to my friends and family to share my experiences.

原句断句不当，“Besides UMM.”含有非正式语气词且句子分割不合理。将“Besides, um,”并入句首，去掉不必要的句号，并补上宾语“them”，使结构完整且更自然。建议在正式表达中减少语气词的使用或将其以逗号形式插入句中。

× Maybe sometimes I agree that an expensive gift can show how much you value someone, but not everyone enjoys lavish presents.

✓ Maybe sometimes I agree that an expensive gift can show how much you value someone, but not everyone enjoys lavish presents.

句子代词使用正确（you 指一般人），时态和结构也可接受。这里只确认代词使用无误，因此无需改动。

× It can feel overwhelming or even bursting.

✓ It can feel overwhelming or even excessive.

“Bursting”用作描述礼物带来的情绪不太恰当，通常用于物理爆裂或“充满”的表达，改为“excessive”更符合语义，表示过于奢华或让人不适。建议选择与情感相匹配的形容词。