App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and ungrammatical. Give a direct topic sentence naming the app(s), then add one specific reason or detail. Use correct tense and simple sentence structure. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

例: I have recently been using Instagram. I use it to keep in touch with my friends and to see their photos and stories.

提案: The reply is confusing and off-topic. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the kinds of apps you like, then give one or two concrete reasons or examples using linking words (for example, because, so, and). Keep sentences simple and coherent.

例: I am usually interested in social media and messaging apps because I can chat with friends and follow updates. For example, I use WhatsApp to message people and Instagram to see photos and new features.

提案: The answer lacks clarity and specific methods. Provide a clear topic sentence about how you discover apps (e.g., app stores, recommendations, ads), then add one specific example and a linking word to connect ideas.

例: I usually find new apps through the app store and recommendations from friends. For example, I saw a helpful photo-editing app in the app store and later a friend suggested another one on Facebook.

提案: This answer lists app types but is fragmented. Begin with a clear topic sentence about the types you would like, then give specific reasons and an example of how you would use one of those apps. Use linking words like because or for example.

例: In the future I would like to use mobile banking and online grocery apps because they save time and are convenient. For instance, I would use an online grocery app to order food and have it delivered to my home.

× That I have used recently that the Instagram to all my friends still.

✓ I have been using Instagram recently and still use it to keep in touch with all my friends.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('that') that make it ungrammatical. It lacks clear subject-verb-object structure. Use present perfect progressive or present perfect ('have been using' or 'have used') to indicate recent continuous use, and connect ideas with 'and' or 'to' for purpose. Suggestion: simplify to 'I have been using Instagram recently and still use it to keep in touch with all my friends.'

× Where's? Look at the ground up. To chat with my friends which I'm scrolling the trees with the new stamps, new techniques.

✓ I usually use apps to chat with my friends and to scroll through new stickers and features.

This response contains fragmented clauses, incorrect question word 'Where's?', and unclear nouns ('ground up', 'trees', 'stamps'). It needs reordering into a coherent sentence with parallel structure: 'to chat' and 'to scroll'. Replace vague words with appropriate terms like 'stickers' or 'features'.

× I find out different apps.

✓ I find different apps.

The verb 'find' does not require the preposition 'out' in this context. 'Find out' means to discover information. Use 'find' or 'discover' to indicate locating apps.

× On myself on Windows, so many ads are.

✓ On my Windows computer, there are so many ads.

Word order is incorrect and the reflexive 'myself' is wrongly used. Use 'On my Windows computer' as a prepositional phrase and 'there are' to introduce the existence of many ads.

× Sean on the national car, Facebook's Snapchat.

✓ I see ads on Facebook and Snapchat, and sometimes on national car websites.

The original is unclear and contains a name 'Sean' that seems incorrect. The pronoun/subject is missing; clarify subject 'I' and list platforms properly. If referring to 'national car' websites, use 'national car websites' for clarity.

× This way I get different apps.

✓ This is how I find different apps.

'This way' is informal; 'This is how' plus 'find' makes the cause-effect relationship clear. 'Get' can be replaced with 'find' to fit the context of discovering apps.

× That's what I like to use in the future.

✓ Those are the kinds of apps I would like to use in the future.

The demonstrative 'That's' is singular but the student lists multiple apps. Use 'Those are' for plural, and 'would like to use' to express future preference.

× Mobile banking app Grocery, Online grocery.

✓ Mobile banking apps, online grocery apps,

List items need plural form and articles are unnecessary. Use plural nouns to match the question asking 'kinds of apps'.

× Change the food products, clothes, shoes, etcetera.

✓ for ordering food products, clothes, shoes, etc.

Fragment lacks clear connection to previous phrase. Use a prepositional phrase 'for ordering' to explain what the apps are used for. Also use 'etc.' and keep parallel noun forms.