Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and word choice, keep the answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., “for investigating for myself”) and use more appropriate verbs (e.g., “research” or “think carefully”).

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially when I buy things I really need. For example, I usually research items online first to compare features and avoid buying unnecessary products.

提案: Improve sentence structure and choose more precise vocabulary. Use linking words to connect reasons (for example, “because” or “and”). Replace vague words like “stuff” with specific terms like “products” or “items.”

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want the best value. In addition, I check product quality and read reviews to make sure I choose a reliable item.

提案: Make the response more fluent and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and give a reason linked with a cohesive phrase (e.g., “so” or “therefore”). Avoid awkward phrasing like “shopping in a real shop.”

例: Sometimes I find it hard to decide, especially when there are many similar options. Therefore, I prefer shopping online because it lets me compare prices and read reviews more easily.

提案: Improve accuracy and fluency: use present simple for general statements (“is decided” → “is determined”) and avoid fillers like “uh.” Provide a concise reason and a clear example to support your opinion.

例: No, I don't think expensive products are always better because price is determined by factors like brand, taxes, and shipping costs. For example, a locally made coat can be cheaper yet of higher quality than an imported brand-name coat.

× I really enjoy shopping, especially purchasing what I am actually need.

✓ I really enjoy shopping, especially purchasing what I actually need.

The verb 'need' should be in base form because it follows 'actually' which is an adverb modifying the verb; here we need the present tense 'need' not an infinitive or past form. Remove the extra 'am' which creates an incorrect present continuous. Suggestion: use 'I actually need' for correct present simple.

× However, I tend to save money for investigating for myself instead of buying some unnecessary stuff.

✓ However, I tend to save money to investigate for myself instead of buying unnecessary things.

The phrase 'save money for investigating for myself' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use the infinitive 'to investigate' after 'tend to' or 'save money to' to show purpose. 'Some unnecessary stuff' is informal; use 'unnecessary things'. Also remove redundant 'for' before 'myself'.

× I spend a lot of time to find the most reasonable price between shop.

✓ I spend a lot of time finding the most reasonable price between shops.

After 'spend time' use the gerund 'finding' (verb + -ing). 'Between shop' is ungrammatical; use the plural 'shops' when comparing multiple stores and 'between' works with plural nouns. So 'between shops' is correct.

× Beside the price, I find it very important to consider carefully the quality of this stuff.

✓ Besides the price, I find it very important to consider carefully the quality of these items.

Use the preposition 'besides' (not 'beside') to mean 'in addition to'. 'This stuff' is informal and disagrees in number with 'items' discussion; use 'these items' for plurality. Also keep adverb order: 'consider carefully the quality' is acceptable but 'carefully consider the quality' is more natural.

× Yes I do, I find it a bit challenging to make the final decision.

✓ Yes, I do. I find it a bit challenging to make the final decision.

This sentence mainly needs punctuation: use a period to separate the responses. Grammar is otherwise fine. Ensure subject-verb agreement and present simple tense are correct.

× However, I prefer purchasing online to shopping in a real shop because it's helped me compare the price of this shop easier.

✓ However, I prefer purchasing online to shopping in a real shop because it helps me compare shop prices more easily.

Use present simple 'helps' to describe a habitual effect (not 'it's helped'). 'Compare the price of this shop' is awkward; use 'compare shop prices'. Use the adverb 'more easily' (comparative adverb) to modify 'compare'. Also keep parallel gerund structures 'purchasing' and 'shopping'.

× I don't think so, because the price of a product was decided by many factors such as location, tax, transportation fees, etcetera.

✓ I don't think so, because the price of a product is determined by many factors such as location, taxes, transportation fees, etcetera.

Use present simple passive 'is determined' to state a general truth, not past 'was decided'. 'Tax' should be plural 'taxes' when referring generally. Use 'determined' (past participle) in present passive construction.

× Therefore, a cheaper product sometimes can be better than, uh, expensive.

✓ Therefore, a cheaper product can sometimes be better than an expensive one.

Word order: 'sometimes' is better placed after 'can' or before it; both are acceptable—'can sometimes be' is natural. When comparing, use 'an expensive one' to complete the comparison; 'expensive' alone is an adjective and needs a noun. Use the article 'an' before 'expensive one'.