Geography— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I enjoy geography”), then give one or two specific, relevant details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and unclear fragments. Keep to under five sentences and use more natural phrasing.

예시: I enjoy geography because it helps me understand places, especially where I live. For example, I like that my town is near mountains and green areas, which makes me want to stay there. Overall, geography helps me appreciate my local environment.

제안: Give a clear main idea and a specific, coherent example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and correct tense/grammar. Avoid filler words like “like” and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I think geography is very useful because it helps me choose places to live. For example, when I bought an apartment I checked the area’s geography to see if it was green and near mountains, which influenced my decision.

제안: Answer directly and chronologically: state whether you learned it, then add concise details about when and how. Use correct verb forms and avoid trailing, unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes, I learned geography at school when I was a child. My teacher was organized and patient, and she encouraged us to study maps and different countries, which made the lessons enjoyable.

제안: State your opinion clearly, then give one or two concise reasons, using linking words like because or so. Correct grammar (verb tenses, word order) and avoid long, repeated clauses.

예시: No, I would not like to be a geography teacher because I found the subject difficult as a child. Therefore I think teaching it would be stressful and I might struggle to help students understand maps and climates.

제안: Be specific about what you want to learn and why. Avoid vague or incorrect statements and filler words. Use clear linking words to connect ideas and give one concrete example of what you would study.

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about other countries’ geography, especially the United States. For example, I want to study its different climates and landscapes, such as deserts, mountains, and snowy regions, so I can plan future trips like visiting Dubai or the US.

× I like geography because I can understand about the places and moreover like where I live.

✓ I like geography because I can learn about places and especially about where I live.

Using 'understand about' is incorrect; we say 'learn about' or 'know about'. Also 'moreover like where I live' is ungrammatical; 'especially about where I live' expresses the intended emphasis. Use base verb 'learn' after 'can' and proper preposition 'about'.

× I can see the mountains and I would say that I want to live in that place.

✓ I can see the mountains, so I would say that I want to live in that area.

The original is understandable but awkward: 'in that place' is less natural than 'in that area'. Linking idea with 'so' clarifies cause and effect. Use a comma before 'so' when joining clauses.

× I like in this way and moreover like geography.

✓ I like it this way, and I also like geography.

'I like in this way' is ungrammatical; use 'I like it this way' or 'I like this'. 'Moreover like geography' should be 'I also like geography' for natural English and correct conjunction use.

× Tell us about the condition of.

✓ Tell us about the condition of the place.

The sentence ends abruptly and misses the object. Add 'the place' or another noun to complete the sentence and form a full thought.

× I strongly believe that geography is useful because it can tell us like for example when I was buying a new apartment.

✓ I strongly believe that geography is useful because it can tell us important things, for example when I was buying a new apartment.

'tell us like for example' is redundant and colloquial. Use 'for example' to introduce an illustration, and add a clearer noun phrase 'important things' to complete the idea.

× So firstly I want check the geography of place.

✓ So firstly I wanted to check the geography of the place.

After 'so firstly' use a past tense consistent with 'when I was buying' (past). Also include the article 'the' and the verb 'check' needs 'to' if present ('want to check') or change to 'wanted to check' for past continuity. Here past 'wanted to check' fits better.

× So the geography of place is very green and moreover than all over the years now mountains.

✓ The area was very green, with mountains nearby throughout the year.

Original has incorrect word order and misuse of 'moreover than all over the years now mountains' which is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'with mountains nearby throughout the year' to convey the intended meaning.

× So yeah, I was like thinking that it will be.

✓ So yeah, I was thinking that it would be nice to live there.

'I was like thinking' is colloquial; use 'I was thinking'. 'It will be' is vague and inconsistent with past-tense context; 'it would be nice to live there' gives a clearer, grammatically consistent meaning.

× To be honest, I'm not interested in geography since school, but yeah.

✓ To be honest, I haven't been interested in geography since school.

Use present perfect 'haven't been' with 'since' to indicate an action/state continuing from the past to now. 'I'm not interested ... since school' is incorrect tense usage.

× And my childhood, I learn geography in my school.

✓ In my childhood, I learned geography at my school.

Use past tense 'learned' for completed action in the past. 'In my childhood' is the correct phrase, and 'at my school' is the normal preposition for attending a school.

× My geography teacher is very organized and very patient and she encouraged us about to learn these things.

✓ My geography teacher was very organized and patient, and she encouraged us to learn these things.

Maintain past tense 'was' and 'encouraged us to learn' is the correct verb pattern (encourage + object + to-infinitive). Remove extra 'about' which is incorrect here.

× So yeah, I learned that the places of.

✓ So yeah, I learned about different places.

'I learned that the places of' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'learned about different places' to complete the idea.

× To be honest I don't want to be a geography teacher because in since my childhood geography is difficult for me and as a teacher it would be challenging for me and more stressful and I can't understand students too encourage about maps and countries and different climates.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to be a geography teacher because geography has been difficult for me since childhood, and as a teacher it would be challenging and more stressful. I don't feel confident encouraging students about maps, countries, and different climates.

Multiple tense and structure errors: use present perfect 'has been' with 'since childhood'. Break long run-on sentence into two. Use 'encouraging students about' instead of 'too encourage about'. Improve word choice and parallel structure.

× Yes, I really want to learn about the American geography because, uh, many people said it in America there is always gold, inventor and snow.

✓ Yes, I really want to learn about American geography because many people say that in America there is always wealth, innovation, and snow in some places.

Use simple present 'say' for general statements. 'Gold, inventor and snow' is unclear; 'wealth' and 'innovation' better capture intended ideas. Avoid 'it in America there is' — restructure to 'that in America there is'.

× So I want to learn about that and how when I visit to Dubai, so I learn about the geography of the country.

✓ So I want to learn about that, and when I visit Dubai, I will learn about the country's geography.

Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'visit'. Use future 'will learn' for planned action. Simplify sentence structure and remove redundant 'so'.

× So yeah, I was very fascinating.

✓ So yeah, I was very fascinated.

'Fascinating' describes something that causes fascination; 'fascinated' describes a person's feeling. Use 'fascinated' to state how the student felt.

× It is very concerned the geography of the.

✓ I am very concerned about the geography of the country.

Original word order is incorrect and missing noun. Use 'concerned about' plus the object 'the geography of the country' to make a complete, correct sentence.