Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use correct tense and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the usual time, then briefly give a reason using a linking phrase (e.g. because/so). Also correct grammar (use contractions sparingly) and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeated words.

예시: I usually eat snacks around 4 or 5 pm because it’s about four hours after lunch, so I get a little hungry. This time works well for me to recharge before dinner.

제안: Answer directly then give specific examples and a short reason. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct word choice (light/low in calories). Avoid asking questions back unless the examiner asks.

예시: Yes, I think snacks can be healthy if you choose wisely. For example, yogurt and fruit are low in calories and provide nutrients, so they are a better option than sugary snacks.

제안: Use past tense consistently and give a brief reason or example. Avoid repetition and filler. Start with a clear past-time sentence, then add a short explanation with a linking word (because/so).

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child because I liked the taste. For instance, I frequently had biscuits and candy after school.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming your favorite snack, then give brief reasons and an additional option. Use correct subject-verb agreement, clearer vocabulary (e.g. 'gives you energy'), and finish sentences completely. Avoid trailing off.

예시: My favorite snack is chocolate because it’s sweet and gives me a quick energy boost. I also often eat yogurt because it’s healthier and contains protein and probiotics.

× Uh, about four PM, 5:00 PM because that time is, I think I have like it's 4 hour after I eat lunch so I'm a little bit hungry and I think that be a perfect time to eat a snack.

✓ Uh, about four or five PM, because at that time I think it is about four hours after I eat lunch, so I'm a little bit hungry and I think that is a perfect time to eat a snack.

Errors: incorrect present tense forms and awkward time expressions. Reason: use of 'have' and 'be' are incorrect here; 'have' should be 'is' when describing time difference and 'be' should be 'is' for present simple. Also '4 hour' needs plural and clearer phrasing. Suggestion: use 'it is', 'about four hours after', and 'is a perfect time' to match present simple description of habitual actions.

× I think we can choose like healthy snacks, for example some yogurt or some fruits because it lightly and is good for your health. And may you?

✓ I think we can choose healthy snacks, for example yogurt or fruit, because they are light and good for your health. And you?

Errors: adjective/adverb misuse and pronoun agreement. 'Lightly' (an adverb) is incorrect; the adjective 'light' describes snacks. 'Some fruits' is better as 'fruit' or 'fruits' but 'fruit' as an uncountable general term is natural. 'They are' must agree with plural noun. Suggestion: use 'they are light' and 'And you?' to ask the other person.

× When I was young, I really I I often eat snacks because it's delicious. I think every every children have it have often is snacks.

✓ When I was young, I often ate snacks because they were delicious. I think every child often had snacks.

Errors: incorrect tense forms and number agreement. 'Often eat' should be past tense 'often ate' to match 'When I was young'. 'It's delicious' should be 'they were delicious' to agree with plural 'snacks' and past tense. 'Every children' is wrong; use singular 'every child'. 'Have it have often is snacks' is ungrammatical; use 'often had snacks'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct singular/plural forms.

× My favorite snacks is chocolate as is sweet and give you energy and sometimes I have some yogurt too because I think it's good for my health and maybe sometime my mother like give me a.

✓ My favorite snack is chocolate because it is sweet and gives you energy, and sometimes I have yogurt too because I think it's good for my health, and maybe sometimes my mother gives me some.

Errors: singular/plural agreement and verb agreement. 'Favorite snacks is' should be singular 'favorite snack is' since one item follows. 'Chocolate... give' needs third-person singular 'gives'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'My mother like give me' should be 'my mother gives me'. Also finish the sentence with 'some' or 'a snack'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use adverb 'sometimes'.