Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và chính xác. Tránh lặp từ, ngắt quãng bằng tiếng lắp (umm, uh) và sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ "washing machine" vs "dishwasher"). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, so) và ví dụ nếu cần. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng từ vựng phù hợp như "convenient", "save time", "do the dishes".

예시: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time. It is very convenient since I don't have to wash dishes by hand after meals, so I can relax or study instead. For example, it finishes a full load in about an hour, which is very helpful on busy days.

제안: Câu trả lời lặp ý và lặp cấu trúc. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề duy nhất, dùng liên từ để phát triển ý (for example, therefore) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (who benefits, how). Chú ý ngữ pháp (subject-verb agreement: "families don't"), tránh lặp câu giống hệt nhau, và hạn chế cụm từ mơ hồ như "or something like that".

예시: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important because many people work long hours and have little time for chores. For example, a washing machine cleans clothes quickly and a vacuum cleaner keeps the house tidy, so these machines help families maintain a clean home without spending too much time on housework.

제안: Cần câu trả lời ngắn, mạch lạc, bỏ tiếng lắp và sửa cấu trúc cú pháp ("before using a machine", "read the instructions"). Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tiếp theo nêu lý do ngắn gọn (safety, correct operation) và một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ "instruction" nhiều lần.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new machine because it helps me operate it safely and correctly. For instance, I read the dishwasher manual to learn which detergent to use and which cycle is best for heavy pots.

제안: Ý đúng nhưng diễn đạt sai ngữ pháp và thiếu trôi chảy. Sửa lỗi cấu trúc ("Without instructions, you won't know how to use the machine"), dùng từ phù hợp (use, operate) và nêu lý do rõ ràng (safety, longevity, correct use). Giữ 1–2 câu, tránh cụm từ thừa.

예시: Yes, I think reading the instructions is important because it teaches you how to use the machine properly and prevents accidents. For example, following the user guide can extend the machine's lifespan and avoid misuse that might damage it.

× My favorite machine is the the wash washing machine.

✓ My favorite machine is the washing machine.

The definite article 'the' is repeated and 'wash washing' is erroneous duplication. Use a single article and the correct noun form 'washing machine'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'the' and duplicate 'wash'.

× Actually it is umm, it is a dish washing machine and the reason alliance is is very convenient and I don't have to wash the dish often.

✓ Actually, it is a dishwashing machine and the reason is it is very convenient, so I don't have to wash the dishes often.

Multiple issues: 'dish washing' should be compounded to 'dishwashing' or 'dish-washing'; 'alliance' is incorrect word choice; 'is is' duplicates the verb; 'dish' should be plural 'dishes' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'dishwashing machine', remove duplicate 'is', replace 'alliance' with 'is it', and pluralize 'dishes'.

× In my opinion, both are very important because with today's pressure of working, many families doesn't have time to do housework like washing the dish or something like that.

✓ In my opinion, both are very important because with today's work pressures, many families don't have time to do housework like washing the dishes or similar tasks.

Subject 'many families' is plural so verb must be 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Also 'pressure of working' is awkward; 'work pressures' or 'pressure from work' is better. 'dish' should be plural 'dishes'. Suggestion: match plural subject and verb and use natural phrasing.

× In my opinion, they both are very important since they help them deal with housework.

✓ In my opinion, both are very important since they help people deal with housework.

Pronoun reference error: 'they help them' is unclear because 'them' could refer to the machines; use 'people' or 'households' to indicate who benefits. Suggestion: replace 'them' with 'people' or 'households'.

× Yes, actually before use using a machine, I always try to read the instruction first and, uh, remember the important that paper told me.

✓ Yes, actually before using a machine, I always try to read the instructions first and remember the important points that the paper tells me.

'before use using' is incorrect; use gerund 'using' after 'before'. 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'remember the important that paper told me' is ungrammatical: use 'remember the important points that the paper tells me'. Suggestion: use 'before using', pluralize 'instructions', and rephrase for clarity.

× And I think it's very important to use to use the instruction paper first before using a machine.

✓ And I think it's very important to use the instruction sheet before using a machine.

Duplicate phrase 'to use to use' is an error; 'instruction paper' is awkward—use 'instruction sheet' or 'instruction manual'. Also redundant 'first before' can be simplified to 'before'. Suggestion: remove duplication and choose natural noun.

× Yes, actually it's very important to read the instruction.

✓ Yes, actually it's very important to read the instructions.

'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to the set of guidance for a device. Suggestion: use 'instructions' or 'the instructions'.

× Without the being instructed you won't know anything about the machine you will be use in the future, like you don't know how to operating it.

✓ Without reading the instructions, you won't know anything about the machine you will use in the future, for example, you won't know how to operate it.

Multiple structural errors: 'the being instructed' is incorrect—use 'reading the instructions' or 'being instructed'. 'you will be use' should be 'you will use'. 'how to operating it' should be 'how to operate it'. Suggestion: simplify to 'Without reading the instructions' and use infinitive 'to operate'.