Machine— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Fix pronouns and verb forms (e.g., "My favorite machine at home is the washing machine"). Avoid repetition and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because I wash my work uniform three times a week. It saves me a lot of time and ensures my clothes are clean and ready every morning.

제안: Give a direct answer then explain with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct grammar and use plural consistency ("these machines are"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes, I think these machines are essential. For example, washing machines clean clothes quickly and vacuum sweepers keep floors dust-free, which reduces household workload and saves time.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give one or two focused reasons using linking words. Correct noun forms and phrasing ("instructions" and "keeps you safe"). Keep sentences complete and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they explain correct operation and safety precautions. This helps me avoid mistakes and prevents accidents.

제안: Answer directly, then give clear, specific reasons with linking words. Remove fillers ("uh") and repetitive phrases. Use correct nouns and phrasing ("instructions", "keep you safe", "assembly"). Limit to 2–3 polished sentences.

예시: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because they tell you how to assemble and use an item safely. As a result, you reduce the risk of damage or injury and use the product correctly.

× Their favorite, the technology that I normally I use at home is the washing machine because I always wash my everyday uniform from my work and I you set up three times for a week.

✓ My favorite household appliance is the washing machine because I always wash my work uniform and I use it three times a week.

Pronoun 'Their' is incorrect for referring to the speaker; use 'My'. Redundant 'I' and incorrect 'I you set up' should be 'I use it'. 'Everyday uniform from my work' is unnatural; use 'my work uniform'. Also adjust word order and article use to sound natural. Suggest practicing subject pronouns and common collocations like 'use something three times a week'.

× That's why it's one of my favorite technology.

✓ That's why it's one of my favorite pieces of technology.

'Technology' is uncountable in this context; use 'piece of technology' or 'appliances'. The adjective 'favorite' needs a countable noun after it. Suggest learning countable/uncountable noun patterns and using 'piece of' for single items.

× Yes, it it is very vital to everyday life especially if cleaning your things or your clothes and also sweeping machine it makes your your house clean as well and it prevent you your task overload.

✓ Yes, they are very important in everyday life, especially for cleaning your belongings or clothes. A vacuum or sweeping machine helps keep your house clean and prevents task overload.

Sentence has repetition ('it it', 'your your') and mixed subjects. Use plural 'they are' to refer to machines. 'Cleaning your things' is odd; 'cleaning your belongings' is better. Verb agreement: 'it prevent' should be 'prevents' or 'prevent' depending on subject; here 'a machine helps... and prevents'. Suggest breaking long sentences into smaller ones and checking subject-verb agreement.

× So those kind of machine is.

✓ So those kinds of machines are.

Incorrect number agreement and article: 'those' requires plural 'kinds' and plural noun 'machines', and verb should be plural 'are'. Also sentence was incomplete; provide full clause. Suggest matching demonstratives with plural nouns and verbs.

× Yes, I have a habit of reading the instruction first before trying the product because through reading first you will know the consequences of your action just in case you made a mistake.

✓ Yes, I habitually read the instructions before trying a product because by reading first you will know the consequences of your actions in case you make a mistake.

Article and noun number: use 'the instructions' or 'instructions' plural. 'A habit of reading the instruction' is awkward; 'habitually read the instructions' is concise. Tense consistency: 'in case you made a mistake' should be 'in case you make a mistake'. Also 'consequences of your action' -> 'consequences of your actions'. Suggest maintaining plural for 'instructions' and matching tense.

× And also reading it in proper instruction are keeping you safe away from the.

✓ Also, following the proper instructions keeps you safe.

Phrase 'reading it in proper instruction' is ungrammatical; use 'following the proper instructions'. Subject-verb agreement: 'instructions... keeps' - actually 'following... keeps' is singular. Sentence ended abruptly; complete the idea. Suggest using 'follow' or 'read' plus 'instructions' and ensure verb agrees with subject.

× Yes, it's very vital to read the instruction first, so you you keep away from danger.

✓ Yes, it's very important to read the instructions first so you stay away from danger.

Use 'instructions' plural and 'important' rather than 'vital' optionally; avoid repeating 'you'. 'Keep away from danger' is better as 'stay away from danger'. Suggest eliminating repetition and using standard collocations like 'read the instructions'.

× Most importantly, uh, you will learn the proper assembly of the specific items or material before using it, and it is the most important to learn by uh, reading the.

✓ Most importantly, you will learn how to assemble the specific items or materials before using them, and it is best to learn this by reading the instructions.

Awkward phrase 'proper assembly of the specific items or material' should be 'how to assemble the specific items or materials'. Pronoun agreement: 'using it' -> 'using them' for plural. Repetition 'most important' and filler 'uh' should be avoided. Sentence ended incomplete; finish with 'instructions'. Suggest using 'how to' for processes and matching plural nouns with plural pronouns.