Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and confident. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetitive phrases like "I don't consider myself as someone" and duplicate words such as "I notice that I think." Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "however," "but").

예시: No, I wouldn't say my memory is very strong; however, I'm good at remembering routes. For example, after visiting a neighbourhood once I can usually find my way back without using maps.

제안: Make the story clear, coherent and concise. Start with a direct answer (Yes), then give a single, well-structured example with chronological details and a short conclusion about what you learned. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., "If it's not my Another teammate" and "goldfish head"). Use linking words (e.g., "for example," "because," "so") to connect sentences.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, once I forgot a Zoom meeting with a client because I misread the time. Fortunately a teammate reminded me right before the call, so I joined late. Since then I always set phone reminders and add meetings to my calendar.

제안: Be more precise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence listing key daily things you must remember (deadlines, meetings, documents), then give one or two specific examples of how you manage them. Use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly and avoid awkward phrasing ("my things with clients").

예시: I need to remember deadlines, client meetings and important documents because I manage several projects. Therefore, each morning I write a short to-do list and update my calendar so I don't miss tasks or meetings.

제안: Make the explanation smoother and more precise. Begin with a concise topic sentence about your main methods, then give two clear methods with specific details and an example of reminders. Remove conversational fillers like "like" and "oh." Use linking words ("also," "for example").

예시: I use two main methods to remember important things: a daily to-do list and calendar reminders. For example, I write tasks each morning and set calendar alerts that notify me two days before a client meeting and one day before a deadline.

× I don't consider myself as someone who has a good memory, but I notice that I think I am quite good at remembering roads or ways to go to a place.

✓ I don't consider myself someone who has a good memory, but I think I am quite good at remembering roads or ways to get to a place.

The phrase 'consider myself as someone' is incorrect; 'consider myself someone' is the standard structure (remove 'as'). Also 'I notice that I think' is redundant and awkward; simplify to 'I think'. Finally, 'ways to go to a place' is unnatural; 'ways to get to a place' is clearer.

× Yes, it happens very often. One time I forgot I had a meeting with a client and I almost missed everything.

✓ Yes, it happens very often. One time I forgot I had a meeting with a client and I almost missed it all.

The phrase 'missed everything' is unnatural in this context; use 'missed it all' or 'missed the meeting'. Tense usage 'forgot I had' is acceptable past tense; adjust object for clarity.

× If it's not my Another teammate reminds me that oh, you have a Zoom right after this lunch so I'm quiet.

✓ If it isn't for my teammate reminding me, I would have missed the meeting; they said, 'Oh, you have a Zoom right after lunch,' so I stayed quiet.

Original sentence has fragmented clauses and incorrect connectors ('If it's not my Another teammate'). Use conditional structure 'If it weren't for...' or 'If it isn't for...' and separate the reported speech. Also correct 'right after this lunch' to 'right after lunch' and 'I'm quiet' to 'I stayed quiet' to match past context.

× Umm, goldfish head if I have to say.

✓ Um, I have a 'goldfish memory', if I have to say.

The original phrase 'goldfish head' is incorrect; the idiom is 'goldfish memory' meaning poor memory. Also supply subject 'I' and structure 'if I have to say' to make it a complete expression.

× I often need to remember my things with clients and important deadlines because my job involves managing multiple projects.

✓ I often need to remember things related to clients and important deadlines because my job involves managing multiple projects.

'Remember my things with clients' is ungrammatical. Use 'things related to clients' or 'client-related things'. 'Related to' correctly links the noun 'things' with 'clients'.

× So I also require to keep track of tasks and how to solve problems by making a short To Do List each morning so nothing is forgotten.

✓ So I also need to keep track of tasks and how to solve problems by making a short to-do list each morning so nothing is forgotten.

'Require to keep' is not natural here; use 'need to keep' or 'need to'. 'To Do List' should be 'to-do list' as a common noun. Verb choice 'need' fits the meaning better.

× I usually keep track of my schedule by making To Do List of what I need to do on that day.

✓ I usually keep track of my schedule by making a to-do list of what I need to do that day.

Use the singular countable noun 'a to-do list' (article 'a' needed). Also 'on that day' is better as 'that day'. Capitalization of 'To Do List' is unnecessary.

× I also have the schedule written on my calendars and it has like reminders about oh in two days you will have the meetings which client A or tomorrow is the deadline for task B.

✓ I also have my schedule written on my calendar, and it has reminders such as 'In two days you will have a meeting with client A' or 'Tomorrow is the deadline for task B.'

Use singular 'calendar' if referring to one, or 'calendars' consistently; 'written on my calendars' is awkward. 'Has like reminders about oh' is informal and unclear; rephrase to 'has reminders such as' and present the reminders as quoted complete sentences. Use 'a meeting with client A' rather than 'the meetings which client A'.