Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word forms (e.g., 'remember' → 'remembered'). Use a linking phrase to contrast strengths and weaknesses.

예시: I’m fairly good at memorising some types of information, especially numbers, but I struggle with names, dates and historical facts. For example, I can remember phone numbers easily, but I often forget people’s names unless I write them down.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and provide a specific, concise anecdote with a brief consequence. Correct phrases and grammar (e.g., 'every now and then' position, 'forgot my driving licence'). Use a linking word to show consequence.

예시: Yes, I forget important things occasionally. For instance, last weekend I forgot my driving licence before a lesson, so I had to cancel and pay an extra fee to reschedule.

제안: Open with a clear topic sentence listing the main items, then give one or two specific details. Remove redundant words and fix grammar (e.g., 'keep remember' → 'remember', 'as also like' → 'also'). Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'especially'.

예시: In daily life I need to remember a few essential items, especially my keys, phone, medication and class schedule. For example, I always double-check my bag for my keys and phone before leaving home and set an alarm for my medication.

제안: Start with a clear statement of your main strategies, then give brief, specific examples. Correct phrasing (e.g., 'I make a to-do list' and 'I check my pockets before leaving'). Avoid filler sounds and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I use two main strategies: I make a to-do list and I create physical checks for everyday items. For example, I write important tasks on a list and always check my pockets and bag for my phone and keys before I leave the house.

× I would say I am good at memorizing some things like numbers but really not good at memorizing history, dates and names.

✓ I would say I am good at memorizing some things, like numbers, but really not good at memorizing history, dates, and names.

The sentence mostly uses correct present tense but needed punctuation for clarity and parallel structure (commas between list items). Improve by adding commas to separate list items and a comma before 'but' for readability.

× Sometimes I keep remember things for longer period of time.

✓ Sometimes I remember things for a longer period of time.

The verb phrase 'keep remember' is incorrect; English uses either 'keep' + -ing (keeping remembering, uncommon) or simply 'remember'. Also add the article 'a' before 'longer period'. Use 'I remember' for present habit.

× It happens usually every now and then I forget something which is important.

✓ It happens usually; every now and then I forget something that is important.

The original runs two clauses together without clear punctuation. Replace 'which' with 'that' for essential clause and add punctuation. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× Like last weekend I forgot my driving licence while going for my driving classes and then I needed to pay them extra money for that.

✓ Last weekend I forgot my driving licence when I was going to my driving class, and then I had to pay extra money for it.

Use past continuous 'was going' to describe the ongoing action and 'had to' instead of 'needed to' for obligation in the past. 'Driving classes' -> 'driving class' for single course instance, and replace 'them' with 'it' for the licence.

× There are different essential things which I need to keep remember like when while I'm leaving from my house I need to keep my keys with me, I need to remind myself for my phone and as also like medications and my classes.

✓ There are various essential things I need to remember, like my keys when I leave the house, my phone, medications, and my classes.

Replace 'keep remember' with 'remember' and simplify the sentence. Remove redundant words 'when while' and incorrect preposition 'remind myself for' -> just list items to remember. Use parallel structure for list items.

× To keep remember significant items, I always make A to do list and I mention all the items there.

✓ To remember significant items, I always make a to-do list and write all the items on it.

'Keep remember' is incorrect; use 'remember' or 'keep remembering'. 'A' should be lowercase and 'to do list' normally hyphenated as 'to-do list'. 'Mention' is awkward here; use 'write' and 'on it' for clarity.

× And for the phone and keys, umm. I remind myself whenever I'm leaving from home that I check my pockets, uh.

✓ For my phone and keys, I remind myself to check my pockets whenever I leave home.

Combine fragments into one clear present simple sentence. Use 'leave home' rather than 'leaving from home' and 'remind myself to check' (verb + infinitive) instead of 'remind myself that I check'. Remove filler sounds for a cleaner sentence.