Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundant words and incorrect grammar (e.g., say “I love singing” and “I sing very well”).

예시: I love singing because it’s my passion and helps me express my emotions. For example, I often practice songs after school to improve my voice and enjoy performing for my family.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical answer and be specific about who taught you and what you learned. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct word choices (e.g., “learned,” “teachers,” “relaxed” or “cheered up”). Avoid unclear phrases like “release our surprise” or “very rude mood.”

예시: Yes, I learned to sing from my elders, especially my aunt who taught me breathing techniques and basic vocal exercises. As a result, singing helps me relax and lifts my mood when I feel stressed.

제안: Answer directly: say who you would like to sing for and why. Keep sentences short and coherent, use correct pronouns and avoid confusing phrases. Provide a specific reason or example about how singing for them matters.

예시: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because they have always supported me. For instance, I often perform at family gatherings to thank them for their encouragement.

제안: Give a clear opinion with a concise reason and a specific example. Use correct grammar and natural phrases like “people feel relaxed” and “release tension.” Use linking words (for example, because, for instance).

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and release stress. For example, after a hard day at work, singing my favorite song always makes me feel calmer and more positive.

× Yes, I love very much singing because singing is my passion.

✓ Yes, I love singing very much because singing is my passion.

Placement of the adverb 'very much' is incorrect. Adverb phrases modifying verbs are normally placed after the verb or verb phrase in English. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and natural order: 'love singing very much' is the natural word order. Suggestion: Put the adverb after the verb phrase: 'I love singing very much.'

× I sing very good.

✓ I sing very well.

'Good' is an adjective; after a verb describing how an action is done, use an adverb: 'well'. Use 'very well' to modify the verb 'sing'. Suggestion: Use adverb forms after verbs: 'I sing well' or 'I sing very well.'

× Yes, I learn how to sing with my elders and these things very good and with the help of singing I release our surprise and I get very rude mood.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing from my elders and practice a lot; singing helps me release stress and improves my mood.

Multiple errors: tense, verb choice, prepositions, adjective/adverb, pronouns, and word choice. Use past tense 'learned' for past learning. Use 'from my elders' rather than 'with my elders'. 'These things very good' is unclear; replace with 'practice a lot' or similar. 'Release our surprise' is incorrect—likely meant 'release stress' or 'feel surprised'. 'I get very rude mood' should be 'my mood improves' or 'I feel better'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use correct collocations: 'learned from', 'practice', 'release stress', 'improves my mood.'

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This question sentence is fine as written. No correction needed. (Included to show it's grammatically acceptable.)

× I want to thank for my family and just friends because family and friends are really important for us and his sports, us and his sports are at all time when when a friend can share sympathy whenever we need it, he sports us at all time.

✓ I want to thank my family and my friends because they are very important to me; they are always there to support me and share sympathy whenever I need it.

Many pronoun and sentence structure errors: don't use 'thank for'—use 'thank' with direct object ('thank my family'). 'Just friends' should be 'my friends'. 'Family and friends are really important for us' should be 'they are very important to me' (correct preposition and pronoun). Phrases like 'his sports' and 'he sports us' are incorrect—likely intended 'they support me' or 'they are supportive'. Also remove repetition and fix tense/word choice. Suggestion: Use correct object after 'thank', correct pronouns ('they'), correct prepositions ('to me'), and use 'support' for 'sports'.

× Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?

✓ Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?

This question is grammatically correct as written. No correction needed.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to the people because when the people saying they feel very relaxed about his body and all the tensions are released with singing.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because when people sing they feel very relaxed, and their tensions are released by singing.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'people' in general statements—use 'people'. 'When the people saying' is grammatically wrong; use 'when people sing' or 'when they sing'. Pronoun 'his body' is incorrect and inconsistent; use 'their bodies' or 'they feel relaxed'. Passive/verb forms: 'are released with singing' is better as 'their tensions are released by singing' or 'singing releases their tensions.' Suggestion: Use consistent pronouns and correct verb forms: 'when people sing, they feel relaxed, and their tensions are released.'