Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid fillers (umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use a slightly wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'invigorated' or 'lifted').

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it makes me feel invigorated. For example, when I sing with friends, the positive energy and harmonies lift my mood and make the experience more enjoyable.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical response and avoid unclear phrases. State directly whether you have learned, then explain your plan using linking words (e.g., 'but', 'so', 'because'). Use correct verbs and vocabulary like 'lessons' or 'training'.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I would like to in the future. For example, I plan to take weekly voice lessons so I can improve my pitch and breathing technique.

제안: Avoid hesitations and awkward phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Use natural expressions (e.g., 'my future partner' and 'impress').

예시: I would like to sing for my future partner because music is a personal way to express affection. For instance, performing a song at a special moment could help create a memorable and romantic atmosphere.

제안: Be concise and precise. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use appropriate nouns and avoid repetition (e.g., 'singers' rather than 'sing singer celebrities').

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness and boost confidence because it allows people to express emotions and connect with others. For example, fans often feel inspired and comforted when their favorite singer performs live.

× I do really like singing because it makes me refreshed and energized.

✓ I really like singing because it makes me feel refreshed and energized.

Use of auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for simple statement; 'makes me refreshed' is incorrect adjective use—use 'feel refreshed' to describe experiencing a state.

× If I sing with my friends, I can be more, umm energetic because of the vibes they give me.

✓ If I sing with my friends, I can be more energetic because of the vibes they give me.

Remove filler comma and hesitation; 'be more energetic' is correct but extra comma breaks flow. Use uninterrupted adjective phrase.

× I actually have never learned how to sing, but I want you sing, come to sing well.

✓ I actually have never learned how to sing, but I want to learn to sing well.

Original contains incorrect phrase 'want you sing' and 'come to sing well' which are ungrammatical. Use 'want to learn to sing well' with infinitive form after 'want'.

× So I someday I would like to take restance of that.

✓ Someday I would like to take lessons for that.

Sentence has repetition 'So I someday I' and wrong word 'restance'. Correct to 'Someday I would like to take lessons for that' to convey intent; 'lessons' is appropriate noun.

× I am not trying to be dramatic, but I would like to sing for uh, my future, uh, wife potentially.

✓ I am not trying to be dramatic, but I would like to sing for my future wife, potentially.

Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas; 'my future wife' is standard noun phrase. Keep 'potentially' after phrase.

× If I can umm, perform a mesmerizing uh, song for her, she will get for sure come to like me so more.

✓ If I can perform a mesmerizing song for her, she will surely come to like me more.

Original word order 'get for sure come to like me so more' is ungrammatical. Use adverb 'surely' before verb 'come to like' and 'more' after 'like'.

× Yes, I firmly believe that singing can bring happiness and confidence to people.

✓ Yes, I firmly believe that singing can bring happiness and confidence to people.

Sentence is correct; no article change needed. Included for completeness.

× That is why many people are a huge fan of singers or sing singer celebrities.

✓ That is why many people are huge fans of singers or singing celebrities.

Use plural 'fans' to agree with 'many people' and correct adjective 'singing' rather than 'sing singer'.

× So actually they are giving their the audience the vibes and the sometimes cheering.

✓ So actually they are giving the audience the vibes and sometimes cheering them on.

Original has incorrect possessive 'their the audience' and awkward phrasing. Use 'the audience' and 'cheering them on' to express supporting action; move 'sometimes' before verb phrase.