Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing. It helps me relax and improve my breathing, so I often sing when I’m in a good mood, especially at home after work.

제안: Make your response direct and clearer. Use linking words to structure the sentence and give a specific example of what you learn from competitions. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “learned about” → “never had formal lessons”).

예시: I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I watch singing competitions regularly. From them I pick up tips on breathing and phrasing, and I try to practice those techniques at home.

제안: Be clearer and more accurate. Start with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and one short supporting detail. Fix unclear phrases and tense errors.

예시: I would sing for my grandmother because she always loved music. When I was a child she would play songs while cooking, and singing for her would make her happy.

제안: Avoid contradictions and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion, then explain how and give a brief example. Replace confusing negatives (e.g., “can't warm the heart”) with positive expressions.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it lifts people’s spirits and creates a sense of connection. For example, a cheerful song can make a crowd smile and feel more relaxed.

× Yes I do, when I singing I found out that it's good for my breathing and I usually sing it when I'm in a good mood.

✓ Yes, I do. When I sing, I find that it is good for my breathing, and I usually sing when I'm in a good mood.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'When I singing' should use the base form 'sing' after 'when' (present simple). 'I found out' is past tense but the general truth requires present simple 'I find'. 'it's' can be expanded to 'it is' and 'sing it' is awkward; remove 'it' because 'sing' is intransitive here. Suggestions: keep consistent present tense for habitual actions and use the base verb after time conjunctions like 'when'.

× No, I have learned about it, but I love to listen the competitions of singing content and that accepted some tip for thinking and I really enjoyed and try to adopt this technique.

✓ No, I have learned about it, but I love listening to singing competitions; they offered some tips I thought about, and I really enjoyed them and tried to adopt the techniques.

Multiple issues: 'love to listen the competitions' needs a gerund and correct preposition: 'love listening to singing competitions' (verb + -ing and preposition). 'that accepted some tip for thinking' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'they offered some tips I thought about' or 'they accepted some tips' — corrected to 'they offered some tips I thought about'. 'I really enjoyed and try to adopt' mixes tenses; use past 'enjoyed' and past 'tried' or keep present 'enjoy and try'. Suggestions: use gerunds after 'love' when referring to activities, use 'to listen to', and keep tense consistent.

× I would say my grandmother because she loved to listen to music all the time. She played the music into the black girl and she cooking doing a show.

✓ I would say my grandmother because she loves to listen to music all the time. She would play music for the family and pretend she was putting on a show while cooking.

Pronoun and tense errors: 'she loved' changes tense; use present 'loves' for habitual preference. 'played the music into the black girl' is incoherent — likely meant 'play music for the family' or 'for us'. 'she cooking doing a show' needs auxiliary and correct word order: 'she would cook and put on a show' or 'she would pretend she was putting on a show while cooking'. Suggestions: choose clear pronouns and restructure the sentence, use auxiliary verbs for progressive forms.

× Yes, I think so. Singing can't warm the heart and make the people feel joy when they listen to music.

✓ Yes, I think so. Singing can warm the heart and make people feel joy when they listen to music.

The modal 'can't' contradicts the intended meaning; likely should be 'can'. Also 'make the people' is unnatural; use 'make people' (omit 'the'). Maintain consistent modal meaning. Suggestion: use 'can' to express ability/effect and omit unnecessary articles before 'people'.