Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音と語彙の誤りを直し、文法的に正しい短い文で答える練習をしてください。まず主題文（Yes, there are several rules at my school.）で直接答えを述べ、その後に具体例（skirts, hair color）を1文で付け足します。不要な語や躊躇語（uh, um）を減らし、動詞や助動詞の形（had → had, should → must）を正しく使いましょう。

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, in high school we had strict rules about skirt length and hair color, and students were required to keep their hair natural (black).

제안: 意図を明確にし、理由を簡潔に示す練習をしてください。『場合による』という答えを最初に言い、その後で具体的な理由（学習に関係するかどうか）を述べます。不要な語（um）を避け、文法と語順を整えましょう。

예시: It depends on the situation. If the rules help with learning, they can be beneficial, but rules that are unrelated to education usually do not help students and can be distracting.

제안: 時制と代名詞、語順と単語の形を直す必要があります。まず簡潔な主題文（Yes, I have.）を使い、その後に先生の具体的な行動（advised me about relationships and career）を1〜2文で述べます。助動詞や動詞の形（advice → advised）に注意してください。

예시: Yes, I have. My high school homeroom teacher was very dedicated and kind, and he often advised me about personal relationships and future career choices.

제안: 語彙の選択（rooms → rules）や二重否定を直し、理由を明確に述べる練習をしてください。主張（I prefer fewer rules）を最初に述べ、続けて具体的な理由（rules unrelated to learning distract students）を簡潔に述べます。

예시: I prefer to have fewer rules at school because many rules are not related to learning and can distract students from their studies.

제안: 感情の表現を丁寧にし、文法（check → checked）と語彙（hairstyle → hair styles）を修正してください。理由を述べるときは理由と感情を分けて2文以内にまとめます。攻撃的な表現は控えめにし、なぜ嫌だったかを説明しましょう。

예시: Yes, I have. My junior high science teacher was very strict; she checked students' hairstyles and skirt length. Because her rules felt too strict, I didn't like her style of teaching.

제안: 仮定法と助動詞の使い方を正し、理由を簡潔に述べる練習をしてください。まず明確に答え（No, I wouldn't）を言い、その後で理由（I'm not good at teaching）を1文で説明します。冗長な語や繰り返しを避けましょう。

예시: No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school. I'm not confident in teaching, so I prefer a different career.

× Yes, there are many words for student at my school.

✓ Yes, there are many rules for students at my school.

The speaker used 'words' instead of 'rules' and 'student' should be plural 'students'. Use the definite/indefinite article appropriately with countable nouns and pluralization. Suggestion: use plural 'students' and the correct noun 'rules'.

× For example, in high school I had UH rules about the length of skirts and hair color.

✓ For example, in high school I had rules about the length of skirts and hair color.

Remove filler 'UH' and 'rules' is correct; ensure plural nouns 'skirts' and 'hair color' are fine. Keep plural subject for general rules. Suggestion: omit fillers and keep plural forms.

× I should black hair and.

✓ I should have black hair.

The original sentence is missing the verb 'have' and has an extra 'and'. 'Should' requires the base verb 'have'. Suggestion: use 'I should have black hair' or better express obligation like 'I had to have black hair'.

× I think it depends on the occasion, but if it is a UMM not related to studying, I think the there are no benefits of this world.

✓ I think it depends on the situation, but if it is not related to studying, I don't think there are any benefits to it.

Replace 'occasion' or 'UMM' with 'situation', remove extra 'the', and use 'don't think there are any benefits to it' for correct negation and preposition. Maintain present tense for general statements. Suggestion: use 'there are any benefits to it' or 'it is beneficial'.

× Yes I have when I was in high school my classroom teacher was a really dedicated and he's really kind and he usually advice for me when I. Have traveled some relationships and future career.

✓ Yes I have. When I was in high school, my classroom teacher was really dedicated and kind, and he usually advised me about relationships and my future career.

Use past tense 'advised' for past habitual actions; remove contraction 'he's' which is present 'he is'; correct 'advice' (noun) to 'advised' (verb) and phrasing 'advised me about relationships and my future career'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct verb forms.

× I prefer to have fewer rooms at school because most words at the school is have not nothing to do with the learning, so students don't have to. Abide by these rules to study.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because most rules at school have nothing to do with learning, so students don't have to abide by these rules to study.

Replace 'rooms' with 'rules', fix subject-verb agreement 'rules have' (not 'is have'), remove double negative 'not nothing' to 'nothing', and join broken sentence. Suggestion: use 'fewer rules' and 'have nothing to do with'.

× Yes I have, when I was in junior high school my science teacher was really strict. She usually check students hairstyle and the length of skirts so I hate her.

✓ Yes I have. When I was in junior high school, my science teacher was really strict. She usually checked students' hairstyles and the length of skirts, so I hated her.

Use past tense 'checked' for past habitual actions and 'hated' for past feeling. Add possessive apostrophe 'students'' and plural 'hairstyles'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistency.

× No I wouldn't like to work as a teacher even if I will free school or many loose school because I'm not good at teaching something so I don't want to. Work as a teacher.

✓ No, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher even in a free or very relaxed school because I'm not good at teaching, so I don't want to work as a teacher.

Do not use 'will' after 'even if' for hypothetical preference; use 'in' a 'free or very relaxed school'. Remove awkward phrases and split run-on. Keep conditional/modal 'wouldn't like'. Suggestion: use 'even in a free or very relaxed school' and keep 'wouldn't' for preference.