Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve coherence and completeness: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), finish sentences, and add one specific example explaining why a rule matters. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, therefore). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform and walk in the hallway to keep order; this prevents accidents and helps teachers supervise students easily. Therefore, these rules provide safety and a sense of equality.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition: give a clear opinion, support it with one specific reason and an example, and remove hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words like because or for example to structure the answer.

예시: Yes, I do. For example, a rule requiring uniforms can reduce visible differences between students, which helps lessen bullying and creates a more focused learning environment.

제안: Clarify and provide concrete details: state one or two specific behaviors that showed dedication (e.g., stayed after class, prepared materials). Remove fillers and unclear phrases. Link the behavior to its impact on you or the class.

예시: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher. She prepared detailed lesson plans and stayed after class to help students, which motivated us to work harder and improved our grades.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear position and one supporting reason: state your conditional preference and give a concise example or consequence. Avoid repetition and hesitations.

예시: It depends: I prefer more rules only when behavior is out of control because stricter guidelines can restore discipline. Otherwise, the current rules are sufficient for most classes.

제안: Use precise language and concise structure: answer directly, give a brief example of strict measures and explain the effect on students. Avoid vague phrasing and fillers.

예시: Yes, she was quite strict. For instance, she assigned extra homework or contacted parents when rules were broken, which encouraged most students to behave and complete their work.

제안: Give a direct answer and one clear reason with a brief consequence: remove hesitations, complete the final thought, and use linking words like because or so. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I would not. As a teacher, I prefer some rules because without them students may become disruptive, lose respect for others, and bullying could increase.

× There are so many rules for students in my school.

✓ There are so many rules for the students in my school.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'students' because you are referring to a specific group (students at your school). Use 'the students' to indicate that specificity.

× For example, rules for uniform, rules for hallway walking, uh, rules for running.

✓ For example, rules about uniforms, rules for walking in the hallways, and rules for running.

Use the preposition 'about' to introduce topics (rules about). Also pluralize 'uniform' to 'uniforms' when speaking generally, and use prepositions 'in' with 'hallways'. Improve parallel structure by making items consistent.

× And these are important rules to follow because they give guidance and maintain the.

✓ These are important rules to follow because they give guidance and maintain order.

The sentence was incomplete and ended abruptly. Add the noun 'order' to complete the phrase 'maintain order' and remove the leading 'And' for a cleaner sentence start.

× I believe yes, if there are more rules, they benefit a lot, such as rules about wearing uniforms where they feel that everybody is same.

✓ I believe so; if there are more rules, students benefit a lot, such as rules about wearing uniforms that make everyone feel the same.

Use 'so' instead of 'yes' after 'I believe' for natural phrasing. Replace 'they' with 'students' to clarify the subject. Add 'that make' to connect the clause, and use 'everyone' and 'the same' for correct expression and article use.

× There is no, uh, color, race or gender difference in in a human being and rules make them structured and safe at safety.

✓ There is no color, racial, or gender difference in a human being, and rules make people more orderly and safe.

Use 'racial' instead of 'race' to modify 'difference' and avoid repeating 'in'. 'A human being' is awkward for general statements; use 'people'. 'Make them structured and safe at safety' is incorrect: 'make people more orderly and safe' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher.

✓ Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher.

'Really' is acceptable but 'very' is more natural in this context; this is a style improvement rather than a strict grammar error. Past tense 'had' is correct if the teacher is no longer teaching you.

× She was really organized and uh, she would, she used to follow all the rules, which I really liked and that's made her different from others and she was quite bringing active.

✓ She was really organized; she used to follow all the rules, which I really liked, and that made her different from others. She was also very proactive.

Remove redundant 'would' with 'used to'. Change 'that's made' to past 'that made' to match past tense. 'Bringing active' is ungrammatical; 'proactive' or 'very active' correctly conveys the meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent past tense.

× If the the situation is out of control, then definitely we need more rules.

✓ If the situation is out of control, then we definitely need more rules.

Remove the duplicate 'the' and place 'definitely' in natural position. No change to plurality needed beyond fixing repetition.

× Otherwise, the rules we have are working fine.

✓ Otherwise, the rules we have work fine.

Both versions are acceptable; 'work fine' is simpler and more direct. This corrects tense usage for present simple habitual statements.

× And sometimes I feel that there is uh, with the new generation, disrespect is going on and then I feel that new rules are required.

✓ Sometimes I feel that, with the new generation, disrespect is increasing, so I think new rules are required.

Remove the filler 'there is uh' and rephrase to 'disrespect is increasing' for clarity. Use 'so I think' to link cause and effect more naturally.

× The teacher I mentioned in my earlier answer, she was the one of the disciplined and a strict teacher.

✓ The teacher I mentioned earlier was one of the most disciplined and strict teachers.

Remove the unnecessary comma and pronoun 'she'. Use 'one of the most disciplined and strict teachers' to express that she ranked among disciplined teachers; adjust articles accordingly.

× She was very confirmed with hers rules and if somebody was not following the rules, she was punishing them uh, with different activities like doing homework or complaining to parents.

✓ She strongly enforced her rules, and if somebody did not follow them, she punished the student with activities like extra homework or by contacting parents.

'Confirmed with hers rules' is incorrect; use 'enforced her rules'. Change tense to past 'did not follow' and 'punished'. Replace 'doing homework' with 'extra homework' and 'complaining to parents' with 'contacting parents' for natural phrasing. Use 'student' or 'them' consistently.

× I am working as a teacher right now but for sure I don't want to work in an environment which is rule free because then uh student will be oh uh, they will not be in control and they will forget respect towards others and bullying and.

✓ I am working as a teacher right now, but I certainly don't want to work in a rule-free environment because students would not be in control; they would lose respect for others and bullying would increase.

Use 'certainly' rather than 'for sure' for formality. Hyphenate 'rule-free'. Use plural 'students' and conditional 'would' to match hypothetical outcome. Clarify 'forget respect towards others' to 'lose respect for others' and complete the thought 'bullying would increase'.