Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use present tense for current habits; keep it concise and coherent (max 4–5 short sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobby, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "then", "after that"). Correct grammar (e.g., "I have a morning routine" not "I had a routine hobbies") and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: I have a simple morning routine that I enjoy. I usually get up around 8 or 9 am and check my phone for emails and messages. Then I drink a cup of coffee and have breakfast. If I have church paperwork to do, I do it after breakfast.

제안: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Begin with a clear topic sentence about the hobby, then add a specific detail or memory. Use linking words like "when" or "and" to connect ideas and avoid vague expressions like "I will really remembered."

예시: Yes, when I was a child I loved role-playing games where we pretended to be students and teachers. We played this with neighbors after school, and it was one of our favorite activities because it was fun and creative. I still remember how excited we were.

제안: Answer directly with present perfect or past simple to show continuity or past habit. Name the game clearly and give specific details (how to play, why you liked it). Reduce hesitation sounds ("uh") and use linking words like "because" or "so" to make reasons clear.

예시: Yes. Since childhood I used to play a traditional game called Jaxton with my schoolmates. It involved throwing stones to hit targets, and we enjoyed it because it was competitive and helped us practice aim and concentration. I still cherish those memories.

제안: Be concise and use present or past consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence answering yes/no, then give one or two specific contrasting examples (e.g., brother liked video games, I preferred outdoor play). Use linking words such as "while" or "whereas" to show contrast and avoid repetition.

예시: Not really — our hobbies were different. For example, my older brother liked playing video games, whereas I preferred outdoor role-playing games with my neighbors. We each enjoyed different activities growing up, so our interests didn't overlap much.

× I had a routine hobbies every morning I normally get up around between 8:00 or 9:00 AM, check my phone if there's some e-mail and messages.

✓ I have a routine hobby every morning: I normally get up between 8:00 and 9:00 AM and check my phone for any e-mail and messages.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural but 'a routine' requires a singular noun, so use 'hobby' (singular and plural issue). Also 'around between' is redundant; choose 'between' and use 'and' for time ranges. Use 'check my phone for' rather than 'if there's some' to sound natural and correct preposition use.

× After that I took a sip of coffee and had a breakfast for a day afterwards.

✓ After that I take a sip of coffee and have breakfast for the day.

The surrounding context is present habitual, so present tense should be used instead of past (past tense issue). Also 'a breakfast' is unnatural here; use 'have breakfast' and 'for the day' is more natural than 'for a day afterwards.'

× If I had my other paper works in my church I'm doing.

✓ If I have other paperwork at my church, I do it then.

The original sentence mixes conditional and present continuous incorrectly (sentence structure error). Use a clear conditional with present tense 'If I have...' and simple present 'I do it then.' Also 'paper works' should be 'paperwork' (uncountable) and 'in my church' is better as 'at my church.'

× I will really remembered when I was in my younger years.

✓ I really remember when I was younger.

Using 'will' with 'remembered' is incorrect (past tense issue). For recalling past memories, use simple present 'I really remember' or simple past 'I really remembered.' 'In my younger years' can be simplified to 'when I was younger.'

× During my primary school, we had a habit of playing games of student and teacher role-playing and I remember that we enjoyed that with my other neighboring playmates.

✓ During primary school, we had a habit of playing student-and-teacher role-play games, and I remember enjoying that with my neighboring playmates.

'During my primary school' is awkward; use 'During primary school.' Article use and word order around 'student and teacher role-playing' is incorrect (article errors and word order); 'student-and-teacher role-play games' is clearer. 'My other neighboring playmates' is redundant; 'my neighboring playmates' suffices.

× I will not forget those moments.

✓ I will not forget those moments.

This sentence is grammatically correct as future intention; no correction needed. It is retained to show correct usage. (No change required.)

× I've been able to remembered when I was in my childhood years, my schoolmate and I used to play the games at Jaxton.

✓ I can remember when I was a child: my schoolmates and I used to play games at Jaxton.

'I've been able to remembered' mixes perfect continuous and past participle incorrectly; use 'I can remember' or 'I remember' (verb + -ing and past participle issues). Also 'my schoolmate and I' should be plural 'my schoolmates and I' if more than one; 'in my childhood years' is wordy—use 'when I was a child.'

× It is uh, like a, a stone throwing and we enjoyed it a lot until then.

✓ It was, uh, like stone throwing, and we enjoyed it a lot back then.

Article use 'a stone throwing' is incorrect; 'stone throwing' is a noun phrase without 'a' here. Tense should be past 'was' to match 'we enjoyed' (article and tense errors). 'Until then' should be 'back then' for natural phrasing.

× It's popular games for those younger generation way back in my country in the Philippines.

✓ It was a popular game for the younger generation back in my country, the Philippines.

Word forms and agreement are wrong: 'It's popular games' should be 'It was a popular game' (singular and adjective-noun agreement). 'Those younger generation' is incorrect; use 'the younger generation.' Also tense past 'was' fits the narrative about the past.

× I cherish those moments.

✓ I cherish those moments.

This present-tense sentence is acceptable to express ongoing feeling about past memories, so no change is necessary.

× My family members and I had different hobbies, particularly during our childhood years.

✓ My family members and I had different hobbies, particularly during our childhood.

'Childhood years' is redundant; 'childhood' is sufficient. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct regarding singular/plural usage.

× I remembered that my older brother likes to play video games and while I'm playing alone by myself or my other neighbor, neighboring playmates, we used to play the the games like teacher and student role-playing.

✓ I remember that my older brother liked to play video games, while my friends and I used to play teacher-and-student role-playing games.

Pronoun and tense inconsistencies: mix of 'remembered' (past) with 'likes' (present) is wrong—use 'remember' with 'liked' or 'I remember that my older brother liked...' Also 'I'm playing alone by myself' is redundant and mismatched with 'used to'; replace with 'my friends and I.' Remove duplicate 'the the' and correct phrase order to 'teacher-and-student role-playing games.'