Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子有语法和用词错误，答案有些冗长且结构不够清晰。建议首先给出直接的主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，并使用连词使表达更连贯。注意定冠词与名词搭配（a big → a big fan / into），以及动词形式（enjoy capture → enjoy capturing）。控制在最多5句内。

예시: I'm a big fan of photography. I especially enjoy capturing sunrises, rainbows and evening scenes because they change so quickly and feel special. For example, I often photograph my meals and small moments to remember my day, and taking photos helps me relax after work.

제안: 用词不当（detecting novels 应为 detective novels 或 reading detective novels）。总体结构较好，有主题句和支持细节，但可更具体说明影响和举例以增强说服力。使用衔接词如 'because' 或 'so' 来强化因果关系。

예시: Yes, I used to read detective novels when I was a child because I loved their intricate plots and unexpected twists. For example, solving clues in stories like Sherlock Holmes made me more curious and improved my problem-solving skills.

제안: 答案总体清晰，内容具体。但有个别词不准确（the costumes → costumes or traditional clothing），可用更自然的连接词并略微压缩答案长度。可补充一两句说明为何持续至今或举一个具体细节，使回答更完整。

예시: Yes, I've loved traveling since childhood because my mother often took us on family trips and I became curious about different cultures and traditional clothing. For example, visiting ethnic minority areas taught me about local festivals and dishes, and that curiosity still makes me plan new trips today.

제안: 答案信息稍显混乱，连接词使用不够自然（'Lastly, Labor Day' 不合适）。建议先给出主题句，然后用一两个具体例子说明你们如何一起进行该爱好，注意时间表达的自然性。保持句子简洁，避免不必要的细节。

예시: Yes, my cousin and I both enjoy traveling, so we often plan trips together despite living in different cities. For example, last Labor Day we visited Shanghai and several cities in Zhejiang Province, which was great because we could explore new places and create shared memories.

× Yes, I'm a big of photography.

✓ Yes, I'm big on photography.

原句中使用介词“of”不当。英语里常用短语“be big on something”或“be keen on something”表示非常喜欢某事；也可以说“I am a big fan of photography.” 建议使用固定搭配，避免直接翻译中文结构。

× I'm keen to take pictures of almost everything, like sunrise and rainbows in the sky and the evening, every meal of my day because I enjoy capture, fleeting and the memorable moments of life.

✓ I'm keen on taking pictures of almost everything, like sunrises, rainbows, the evening sky, and even every meal of my day because I enjoy capturing fleeting and memorable moments of life.

原句中存在多个问题：动词搭配、名词复数和修饰词次序错误。根据题库项： - “keen to take” 在表示爱好时更常用“keen on doing”或“keen to do”；这里用动名词更自然。 - “sunrise” 与“rainbows” 在列举时应使用复数或一致形式（sunrises）；“the evening, every meal of my day”表述混乱，应改为“the evening sky, and even every meal”。 - “enjoy capture” 动词形式错误，应为“enjoy capturing”。 修改建议：使用“keen on taking”、“capturing”，并注意名词复数及并列结构。

× It helps me unwind.

✓ It helps me unwind.

该句语法正确；使用不定式或动名词均可，但“helps me unwind”是自然且正确的表达，表明该句无需修改。因此在其它句子中应保持这种简洁表达。

× Yes, when I was a child, I was into detecting novels because I enjoy their intricate plots and the unexpected twists.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I was into detective novels because I enjoyed their intricate plots and unexpected twists.

原句中“detecting novels”是错误词形，应为“detective novels”（侦探小说）。另外时态不一致：描述过去爱好应使用过去时“enjoyed”。建议保持时态一致，名词用正确形式。

× Every book felt like a small world to explore and reading them made me more curious and better at solving problems.

✓ Every book felt like a small world to explore, and reading them made me more curious and better at solving problems.

句子语法基本正确，唯一建议为在并列句前加逗号以提高可读性。时态使用为过去时，与前句一致。保持时态一致即可。

× Yes, I have been passionate about traveling since childhood because my mom often took me on family trips, which sparked my curiosity about different cultures and the costumes.

✓ Yes, I have been passionate about traveling since childhood because my mom often took me on family trips, which sparked my curiosity about different cultures and their costumes.

主要问题是指代不清和名词用法：应在“costumes”前加所有格“their”以明确指代不同文化的服饰。时态“have been passionate”适合持续到现在；后半句使用过去时描述过去的行为（took）和其结果（sparked）是合理的。建议在名词前加明确指代词。

× For example, when we visited ethnic minority areas, I learned a lot about local festivals and dishes.

✓ For example, when we visited ethnic minority areas, I learned a lot about local festivals and dishes.

句子结构与介词使用正确，无需修改。保持原句即可。

× Yes, my cousin loves traveling just like me, so we usually go on trips even though we don't live in the same city.

✓ Yes, my cousin loves traveling just like me, so we usually go on trips even though we don't live in the same city.

时态和语法均正确。该句使用一般现在时描述习惯性动作（loves, usually go），无需修改。

× Lastly, Labor Day, we travel to Shanghai and several cities in Zhejiang province, which was really fun because we could share memories and explore new places together.

✓ For example, during Labor Day we traveled to Shanghai and several cities in Zhejiang province, which was really fun because we could share memories and explore new places together.

原句结构混乱：开头用“Lastly, Labor Day,”不自然。要表达在劳动节期间做过的事，需用介词短语“during Labor Day”并将主要动词用过去时“traveled”与后文“was”保持一致。建议调整为“during Labor Day we traveled...”。