Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verbs and pronouns, reduce repetition, and add one brief supporting detail with a linking word. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes, I enjoy playing the guitar in my free time because it helps me relax and disconnect from social media. For example, I practice for 30 minutes every evening, which improves my mood and concentration.

제안: Provide a clear structure and specific details: state which hobbies you had, use correct tense, and explain briefly why with a linking word. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. I played the guitar and also enjoyed basketball because it helped me relax and stay active with my friends.

제안: Correct grammar and be specific: use past tense for childhood, clarify who helped you, and give one concrete detail about what you learned. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I have played football since childhood because a friend who was a coach at a local club helped me train. As a result, I learned basic techniques like passing and positioning, which improved my confidence on the field.

제안: Answer directly and politely: state whether your hobbies match your family's, explain briefly why with a reason, and avoid slang or unclear phrases. Use correct pronouns and simple comparative language.

예시: Not really. My family members prefer playing football with their friends, but I prefer basketball because I find it more fun and better suited to my style of play.

× Yes, I have I usually play guitar when I have free time because it's helped me to relax and like can stay away from the social media.

✓ Yes, I usually play the guitar when I have free time because it helps me to relax and helps me stay away from social media.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and extra words. 'It's helped me' uses present perfect where simple present ('helps') is appropriate for habitual actions. 'Like can stay away' is ungrammatical; use 'helps me stay away'. Also include definite article 'the' before 'guitar' for the musical instrument. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and remove unnecessary words.

× That's that's the main issue that I facing.

✓ That's the main issue that I am facing.

Error: missing auxiliary verb 'am' required for present continuous 'I am facing'. Also duplicated 'That's'. Suggestion: Remove the duplicate and use correct continuous form for ongoing situations.

× So I usually pay this.

✓ So I usually play it.

Error: 'pay' is a wrong verb choice; likely meant 'play'. 'This' is unnatural; use 'it' to refer to the hobby. Suggestion: Use the verb 'play' for instruments and the appropriate pronoun.

× Yes, I did when I was young. Guitar is the one is the my hobby too.

✓ Yes, I did when I was young. The guitar was my hobby too.

Errors: inconsistent tense and extra words. When discussing a past habit use past tense 'was'. 'Guitar is the one is the my hobby' has redundant words and wrong articles. Suggestion: Use 'the guitar' and simple past 'was' for childhood habits.

× But the other thing that I used to play is the basketball because it's helped me to more relax and more ways can help me uh, my.

✓ But the other thing I used to play was basketball because it helped me relax and could help me in other ways.

Errors: mixed tenses and ungrammatical clause order. Use past tense 'used to play' and 'was'. 'It's helped me to more relax' should be 'it helped me relax'. 'More ways can help me' is awkward; rephrase to 'could help me in other ways'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and simplify clauses.

× Yeah, I heard it would be his football because when I am childhood my friend who is the help me to practice my football because he is a coach for Samusa Horns like United, so they teach me a lot.

✓ Yeah, it was football because when I was a child my friend helped me practice football; he was a coach for Samusa Horns United and taught me a lot.

Errors: wrong verbs and tense ('heard it would be his' incorrect), incorrect pronouns, and awkward phrasing. Use 'it was football' for identifying the hobby, 'when I was a child' for past, 'helped me' for past assistance, and consistent past tense 'was'/'taught'. Remove unnecessary words and correct club name spacing. Suggestion: Use simple past for past events and clear subject references.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members? If you ask me now, not because my factor is to be playing football, right, They're like playing football with their friends.

✓ If you ask me now, no, because my father used to play football. They like playing football with their friends.

Errors: 'my factor' is incorrect; likely 'my father'. Sentence fragment 'If you ask me now, not' lacks verb; change to 'no'. Capitalization and comma issues. Suggestion: Use correct nouns and complete responses.

× But me now, I love to play basketball more than football because it's quite cooler and football is quite hot.

✓ But now, I prefer playing basketball to football because basketball is cooler and football can feel hot.

Errors: awkward pronoun order 'But me now, I', and tense/verb preference expression. Use 'prefer playing X to Y' or 'I prefer X to Y'. 'It's quite cooler' is comparative with unnecessary 'quite'; use 'cooler' alone or 'quite cool'. Suggestion: Use natural comparative structures and correct subject order.

× Hottest generation.

✓ It gets very hot.

Fragment and incorrect phrase 'Hottest generation' makes no sense in context. Provide a complete clause describing temperature. Suggestion: Use full sentences and correct adjectives for temperature descriptions.