Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition of phrases like "and so on" and avoid casual fillers like "yeah" and "like."

예시: I have several hobbies, but my favourite is cooking. I enjoy experimenting with different cuisines, especially Mediterranean and Thai, because it challenges my skills. Additionally, cooking lets me express creativity by combining flavours and presenting dishes attractively.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrases and repetition, and correct tense/grammar. Use one linking word to explain the change from childhood to now and give a brief specific reason.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed several hobbies as a child, especially playing football and cycling. However, as I grew older, I felt these activities were time-consuming and sometimes exhausting, so I now focus on just one or two hobbies.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating whether the hobby started in childhood. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, tense) and avoid vague words like "or something." Provide a specific example of the hobby and one reason why you kept it, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I started making video edits when I was a child after seeing them on social media. Because I enjoyed combining music and clips, I continued practising and improved my editing skills over the years.

제안: Respond with a clear direct statement and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Avoid fillers and vague endings. Give one specific comparison and use a linking word to explain the difference in interests or skills.

예시: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, I enjoy video editing, whereas my younger sister prefers drawing, and I don't feel confident in drawing myself.

× I proudly can say that I have a lot of hobbies, but one of them I one of my favorite one is cooking.

✓ I can proudly say that I have a lot of hobbies, but one of my favorite ones is cooking.

Incorrect word order and redundant 'one'; 'proudly can say' is unnatural—modal/auxiliary should be 'can proudly say'. Also 'one of my favorite one' repeats 'one' and should be plural 'ones' because it refers to one item in a group of favorites (singular/plural agreement). Use 'one of my favorite ones' or better 'one of my favorite hobbies'. Suggestions: place adverb after auxiliary ('can proudly say'), remove duplicate 'one', and use plural 'ones' or phrase 'one of my favorite hobbies'.

× Yeah, because I'm really addicted to it.

✓ Yes, because I'm really passionate about it.

'Addicted to' is grammatically possible but often implies a negative dependency; for speaking tests, 'passionate about' is more appropriate. No present participle error strictly, but improving word choice avoids awkwardness. Suggest using 'passionate about' or 'really enjoy it'.

× Like I love experimenting with different types of cuisine and so on.

✓ I love experimenting with different types of cuisine.

Informal filler 'Like' and vague 'and so on' weaken the sentence. Remove filler and vague phrase to make a concise statement fitting the question. Maintain present simple to express general habit.

× And also I think you can express your creativity and so on by cooking.

✓ I also think you can express your creativity by cooking.

Avoid beginning sentences with 'And also'—use a single connector 'I also think'. Remove 'and so on' as it is vague. Sentence expresses general truth so present simple is correct.

× Yeah, I used to have a lot of hobbies, you know, such as playing football and so on.

✓ Yes, I used to have many hobbies, such as playing football.

'Used to' correctly indicates past habits; change 'Yeah' to 'Yes' for formality and 'a lot of' to 'many' for concise formal phrasing. Remove 'you know' and 'and so on' as fillers.

× But now when I grow up I under realize that such types of different hobbies just burn you out.

✓ But now that I have grown up, I realize that many different hobbies can burn you out.

Tense and verb choice errors: 'when I grow up' should be present perfect 'now that I have grown up' to refer to change to the present. 'I under realize' is incorrect—use 'I realize'. 'Such types of different hobbies' is awkward; use 'many different hobbies'. Maintain modal 'can' to indicate possibility.

× So yeah, I now I don't have really a lot of hobbies.

✓ So now I don't really have many hobbies.

Word order and adverb placement: remove duplicated 'I now I'; place 'really' before verb phrase 'don't really have', and use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for smoother phrasing.

× I can say about my childhood, but when I was a bit younger, I saw that in social media, social medias was full of like edits or something.

✓ I can talk about my childhood: when I was younger, I saw that social media was full of edits.

'Social medias' is incorrect pluralization; 'social media' is an uncountable noun. 'Was' agrees with singular uncountable 'social media' so 'social media was' is correct. Remove filler 'like' and 'or something' and use 'talk about' instead of 'say about'.

× So I thought why not? And I tried to edit as well.

✓ So I thought, 'Why not?' and I tried editing as well.

Verb form: after 'tried' both infinitive and gerund can be used but 'tried editing' better conveys experimenting. Add punctuation for clarity and remove filler 'as well' or keep for emphasis.

× And I think it's really good way to demonstrate your creativity and share with your.

✓ I think it's a really good way to demonstrate your creativity and share it with others.

Missing article: 'really good way' needs 'a'. 'Share with your' is incomplete—should be 'share it with others'. Use pronoun 'it' for clarity and 'others' as the audience.

× Umm, I can't be sure, but probably not because as I said, I love editing but they cannot because they are not keen on it.

✓ I can't be sure, but probably not, because as I said, I love editing while they don't, since they are not keen on it.

'They cannot' is awkward here; use 'they don't' or 'they are not able to' depending on meaning. Use contrast 'while' and provide clearer clause order. Ensure pronoun reference 'they' clearly refers to family members.

× And umm, for instance, my little sister like to draw, but I can draw, you know, I don't have like skills for drawing and so on.

✓ For instance, my little sister likes to draw, but I can't; I don't have the skills for drawing.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my little sister like' should be 'likes'. 'I can draw' conflicts with next clause; intended meaning is inability so use 'I can't'. Remove filler 'you know' and 'and so on'. Use 'the skills' to refer to specific ability.

× So I don't think that we have the same hobbies where.

✓ So I don't think that we have the same hobbies.

'Where' is unnecessary and incorrect at sentence end. Remove it. Sentence expresses opinion about present time—present simple is correct.