Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, fluency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct articles and verb forms, avoid errors (e.g., "a couple of hobbies", "helps me stay active and relieves stress"). Keep within 3–4 sentences and avoid unclear words ("Lily's"). Use a linking phrase to connect reasons.

예시: I have a couple of hobbies. First, I enjoy scuba diving because it lets me explore underwater life and relax. I also play golf with my friends, which helps me stay active and relieves stress.

제안: Fix tense and grammar: use past simple consistently and correct singular/plural forms. Begin with a clear past-topic sentence, then give a specific reason and one detail (where or with whom). Use linking words like "because" appropriately and correct articles ("there were many soccer fields").

예시: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing football with my friends because there were many soccer fields in my neighborhood. As a result, we could play together almost every day after school.

제안: Use present perfect for long-term habits and correct verb forms ("has changed", "makes"). Be concise: state that football is a lifelong hobby, then explain how participants changed and why it continues to matter. Use linking words like "but" and "so" correctly.

예시: Yes, I have played football since childhood. It has changed because now I usually play with colleagues and university friends, but it still keeps me active and helps me relax.

제안: Correct grammar and sentence structure: use present simple for general facts ("my dad also likes football") and past simple for past events. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Provide a clear reason and a brief example of how your family influenced you. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, my father also likes football and we have played together since I was a child. He taught me basic skills and encouraged me to keep playing, which is why I love the sport.

× I have couple hobbies, first I like to do scuba diving and the second I like golfing with my friends.

✓ I have a couple of hobbies. First, I like to go scuba diving, and second, I like golfing with my friends.

Missing article and plural phrasing: 'a couple of' is the correct expression. 'Do scuba diving' is unnatural; use 'go scuba diving'. Also split into two sentences or use commas for clarity. Add commas after introductory words for readability.

× This activity help me stay active and Lily's stressed.

✓ These activities help me stay active and less stressed.

Subject-verb agreement and word misuse: 'This activity' should be plural 'These activities' to match 'hobbies'. Use 'help' with plural subject. 'Lily's stressed' is unclear; likely meant 'less stressed'. Use 'less' to indicate reduced stress.

× When I were in childhood, I like to play football with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to play football with my friends.

Wrong verb forms: use past tense 'was' for 'I' (not 'were') and 'liked' to match past timeframe. Also use natural phrase 'was a child' instead of 'in childhood'.

× This is because there was many soccer field in my neighborhood and we can play anytime with my friends.

✓ This was because there were many soccer fields in my neighborhood and we could play anytime with my friends.

Quantifier and agreement: 'there was' should be 'there were' for plural 'soccer fields'. Use plural noun 'fields'. Also match past tense with 'could' instead of 'can' for past habitual ability.

× Yes, I enjoy playing football with my friends but nowadays it change to friends from work and friend from university because it make me stay active and relax in the same time.

✓ Yes, I enjoy playing football with my friends, but nowadays it has changed to playing with friends from work and friends from university because it helps me stay active and relax at the same time.

Tense and agreement: Use present perfect 'has changed' for a change that has occurred up to now. Use gerund 'playing with'. Plural 'friends'. Use 'helps' to agree with singular 'it' (or better 'playing' as noun: 'because it helps'). 'Relax in the same time' should be 'relax at the same time'.

× Yes I do, my dad also like football too and we enjoy played football since I was child and I I think I like football because of that.

✓ Yes, I do. My dad also likes football, and we have enjoyed playing football since I was a child. I think I like football because of that.

Verb forms and articles: Use 'likes' for third person singular. Use present perfect 'have enjoyed' for an action from past to present. 'Played' should be 'playing' after 'enjoy'. Add article 'a child'. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× He always show me.

✓ He always showed me.

Tense and agreement: Use past tense 'showed' to match prior context (past influence) and agree with subject. If meaning is habitual in past, use 'always showed me' or if present habitual 'always shows me' with additional object (e.g., 'He always showed me how to play').