Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct verb forms, and organize into 2–3 short sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Correct grammar: use 'painting and colouring' or 'colouring pictures', and say 'in my free time' and 'I feel relaxed' rather than repetition.

예시: I enjoy painting and colouring pictures. For example, in my free time I like to paint flowers and forest scenes, and I often relax with a cup of coffee while I work.

제안: Use past tense consistently and be specific. Begin with a topic sentence in past tense, then give one clear reason and an example. Avoid repetition and correct phrasing: 'I liked collecting rocks because they were rare' and 'I thought each had a different shape.'

예시: Yes, when I was a child I liked collecting rocks. I thought they were special because each rock had a different shape, and I especially liked the ones I couldn't find anywhere else.

제안: Avoid fillers and repetition. Give a clear statement that you still have the hobby, then add one specific detail about how it continues to interest you. Use present perfect or present simple: 'I've enjoyed colouring since childhood' or 'I still enjoy colouring pictures.'

예시: Yes, I've enjoyed colouring pictures since childhood and I still do it now. For instance, I like choosing colour combinations for floral designs, which helps me relax and be creative.

제안: Be grammatically correct and concise. Start with a direct answer, then give one clear example. Correct phrases: 'No, each family member has different hobbies. My sister collects pictures.' Avoid hesitations like 'uh' and incorrect pronouns.

예시: No, each family member has different hobbies. For example, my sister collects pictures, while others enjoy sports or cooking.

× Yes I enjoy when I am a painting and coloring some picture.

✓ Yes, I enjoy painting and coloring pictures.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing), not a clause with 'when I am a ...'. Also use the plural 'pictures' for general activities. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× I like do that when I have a free time I feel relaxed, relaxation and drink my coffee.

✓ I like doing that when I have free time; I feel relaxed and drink my coffee.

Use 'free time' without the indefinite article when speaking generally. After 'like' use the gerund 'doing'. 'Relaxation' is a noun but redundant here; use the adjective 'relaxed'. Use a semicolon or separate clauses for clarity.

× So I start to painting and coloring some flowers or forest anything.

✓ So I start painting and coloring flowers, forests, or anything like that.

After 'start' you can use either 'to' + infinitive or the gerund, but not 'start to painting'. Use plural nouns for general categories and rephrase 'anything' to 'anything like that' for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child I like to collect the rocks because I think it it's rare because they have a different shape and they didn't found any rocks like what I have.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to collect rocks because I thought they were rare; they had different shapes and I hadn't found any rocks like mine.

The sentence refers to past time so verbs should be in the past tense ('liked', 'thought', 'were', 'had'). 'Collect the rocks' should be 'collect rocks' for general reference. 'Didn't found' is incorrect; use past perfect 'hadn't found' to indicate prior non-existence compared to the time of collecting. 'What I have' becomes 'mine'.

× Yes, until now I feel enjoy when I, uh, get a picture and start to coloring.

✓ Yes, even now I enjoy getting a picture and starting to color.

Use 'enjoy' with a gerund: 'enjoy getting'. 'Feel enjoy' is incorrect; say 'I enjoy'. 'Start to coloring' should be 'start to color' or 'start coloring'. Use consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× I like color more uh, very much.

✓ I like coloring very much.

The original mixes nouns and adverbs awkwardly. 'Like color more very much' is ungrammatical. Use 'like coloring very much' to express strong preference.

× Uh, I like when I choose the color, uh, I start to coloring some picture.

✓ When I choose the colors, I start coloring a picture.

After 'like' use gerund or restructure as a time clause: 'When I choose the colors, I start coloring a picture.' Use plural 'colors' if choosing among options. 'Start to coloring' is incorrect; use 'start coloring' or 'start to color'.

× No, uh, every members for my family has uh, a special hobbies, uh, like uh, my sister, uh, like uh, his hobbies is umm, collecting the uh, picture.

✓ No, every member of my family has a special hobby. For example, my sister's hobby is collecting pictures.

Problems: 'every members' should be 'every member' (singular after 'every') and 'for my family' should be 'of my family'. 'A special hobbies' mixes singular and plural; use 'a special hobby'. Pronoun 'his' is incorrect for 'my sister'; use possessive 'my sister's'. Use 'collecting pictures' not 'collecting the picture.' Rephrase into two clear sentences for fluency.