Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so).

예시: I do enjoy reading, but not very often. I usually read about two or three books a year because I’m busy with work, and I prefer comic books because they’re quick, visual, and entertaining.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give balanced reasons using linking words (however, because). Correct small grammar and choose precise vocabulary (takes up space).

예시: I prefer reading on paper because I enjoy the tactile feel and collecting books, but I mostly use ebooks now because physical books take up a lot of space and are less convenient for travel.

제안: Be specific and avoid vague phrases. Start with a topic sentence, then give clear contrasting examples using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Fix grammar (‘the IT’ → ‘IT materials’; ‘look over our main story lines’ → ‘skim the main storyline’).

예시: I need to read carefully when I’m studying IT materials for work because I must understand details and instructions, whereas I only skim comic books to follow the main storyline for enjoyment.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason and an example. Avoid awkward expressions (‘a kind of impatient person’, ‘as soon as I possible’). Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘so’ correctly and keep sentences natural and concise.

예시: I prefer scanning rather than detailed reading because I’m quite impatient and like to get the main idea quickly, so when I read a novel or article I usually skim headings and the first sentence of each paragraph.

× I read a book maybe twice or three times a year, and I prefer reading comic books to reading, uh, novels.

✓ I read books maybe two or three times a year, and I prefer reading comic books to reading novels.

Original uses 'a book maybe twice or three times a year' which incorrectly quantifies frequency for a single book; use plural 'books' and 'two or three' for standard number expressions. Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma before 'novels'. Suggestion: say 'I read books maybe two or three times a year' to be natural and grammatically correct.

× I definitely like reading on paper to reading ebooks.

✓ I definitely prefer reading on paper to reading e-books.

The verb 'prefer' takes 'prefer A to B' construction; while 'like reading on paper to reading ebooks' is awkward. Use 'prefer' and hyphenate 'e-books' or write 'ebooks' consistently. Suggestion: 'I definitely prefer reading on paper to reading e-books.'

× However, gathering paper books takes a lot of spaces so I currently choose ebooks more.

✓ However, collecting paper books takes up a lot of space, so I currently choose e-books more often.

'gathering' is acceptable but 'collecting' is more natural; 'a lot of spaces' is incorrect — 'space' is uncountable, singular. Also add 'up' after 'takes' for the phrasal verb 'take up space', and 'more often' clarifies frequency. Suggestion: use 'takes up a lot of space' and 'more often.'

× Well, I read materials related to my work. I read the IT carefully, while when I read comic books I just look over our main story lines.

✓ Well, I read materials related to my work. I read the IT-related materials carefully, while when I read comic books I just look over the main storylines.

'I read the IT carefully' is unclear and missing noun — 'IT' needs a noun like 'materials' and hyphenation 'IT-related' clarifies. 'our main story lines' incorrectly uses 'our' and splits 'storylines' into two words; use 'the' instead of 'our' unless referring to a shared project. Suggestion: 'I read the IT-related materials carefully' and 'I just look over the main storylines.'

× I read the IT carefully, while when I read comic books I just look over our main story lines.

✓ I read the IT-related materials carefully, while when I read comic books I just look over the main storylines.

Using 'our' implies shared ownership which is unlikely here; 'the' is the correct determiner. Also 'story lines' should be one word 'storylines.' Suggestion: replace 'our' with 'the' and use 'storylines.'

× I prefer scanning over detailed reading.

✓ I prefer scanning to detailed reading.

'Prefer' is followed by 'to' not 'over' when comparing two activities (prefer A to B). Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' construction: 'I prefer scanning to detailed reading.'

× That's because I'm a kind of impatient person, so I'd like to grasp our main story as soon as I possible.

✓ That's because I'm a kind of impatient person, so I'd like to grasp the main story as soon as possible.

Multiple issues: 'our main story' incorrectly uses 'our' (use 'the'), 'as soon as I possible' is ungrammatical — correct phrase is 'as soon as possible' without 'I'. Also 'a kind of impatient person' is acceptable but could be 'rather impatient' for conciseness. Suggestion: '...so I'd like to grasp the main story as soon as possible.'