Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly answer, then give one clear supporting detail. Fix grammar (use present simple), choose a correct verb and phrase (e.g., "unwind"). Avoid redundant words.

예시: Yes, I do. I often walk with friends and colleagues after work because it helps us relax and unwind after a busy day.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about past habit, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct past tense and clear subjects. Remove confusing phrases ("me and my school").

예시: Yes, as a child I often went for short walks. For example, my family and I used to walk together to the nearby park after school.

제안: Give one clear reason and support it with a specific detail using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Correct grammar: use "walk in parks", "offers", "busy city noise", "quite relaxing", and avoid unclear sentences.

예시: People like to walk in parks because they offer a peaceful environment. For example, the greenery and fresh air help people escape city noise and feel relaxed.

제안: Answer directly with conditional phrasing, then give one or two clear specific details about the place. Use correct vocabulary ("new park", "located", "large green areas", "a fountain"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Mentor Key Park. It is a new park in southern Bangkok with large green areas and a fountain in the middle, so it would be very relaxing.

제안: Use past simple for recent action and give one specific detail (distance, who you were with). Correct collocations ("popular park", "it offers", "many people go there"). Avoid repetition of "recently".

예시: I recently went to Linkin Park, which is a very popular park. It offers large open spaces, and I walked about five kilometres there with my friends.

× Yes, as far as I remember, I usually went to the park with me and my school with my family to take a short walk from school to the parking and.

✓ Yes, as far as I remember, I usually went to the park with my family and my schoolmates to take a short walk from school to the park.

The original sentence misuses 'me' where 'my' + noun is required and uses awkward phrasing 'with my school with my family'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/possessives and sentence structure (IDs 12 and 26). Use 'my family' and 'my schoolmates' to show possession and correct reference; replace 'parking' with 'park' for correct noun. Also reorder phrases for clarity: 'with my family and my schoolmates'.

× Afterward I usually work with my friends and my colleagues as well to help with is help us to relax and unwife after the busy day.

✓ Afterward I usually spend time with my friends and colleagues to help us relax and unwind after a busy day.

Errors include incorrect verb choice and forms ('work with' instead of 'spend time with'), extra words ('is help us'), wrong word 'unwife' for 'unwind', and article/word order issues. These are present tense and word choice problems (ID 6 and 13). Use 'usually spend time' for habitual present and 'to help us relax and unwind' for correct infinitive verbs and collocations.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

No correction needed. The question uses proper past tense with 'Did' and base verb 'go', so it matches the past-time context and is grammatically correct (ID 5). Returned here only to show it was checked.

× So I think that and the reason why people like to working in the park is that it's offered the peaceful environment and people can escape from busy and noise in the city and it's very quite relaxing. You have to view of the greenery and it's hard.

✓ I think the reason why people like walking in the park is that it offers a peaceful environment and people can escape from the busy noise of the city; it is very relaxing. You can enjoy the view of the greenery.

Multiple preposition and form errors: 'like to working' should be 'like walking' (verb + -ing or infinitive), 'it's offered' is passive and incorrect here — use 'it offers', 'escape from busy and noise' should be 'escape from the busy noise' or 'escape the noise', 'view of the greenery' needs 'enjoy the view of the greenery'. These are incorrect preposition and verb form uses (IDs 11, 8, 9). Also correct word order and remove extra/conjunctive fillers.

× Well, I choose to walk at the Mentor Key Park. It's a newly parked and located in the southern city of Bangkok. Have like great big greenery places and have the fountain the fountain in the middle of the park. It's still quite relaxing.

✓ Well, I would choose to walk at Mentor Key Park. It's a newly developed park located in the southern part of Bangkok. It has large green areas and a fountain in the middle of the park. It's very relaxing.

Errors include article and noun form issues: 'the Mentor Key Park' can be 'Mentor Key Park' (proper names vary), 'newly parked' is wrong — use 'newly developed', 'southern city of Bangkok' should be 'southern part of Bangkok', 'Have like great big greenery places' should be 'It has large green areas', and repeated 'the fountain the fountain' is redundant. These are article, adjective order, and noun choice problems (IDs 22, 17, 18).

× I recently went to the Linkin Park. It's very quite popular park right now. There are many people used to go there because as offer more great space and you can walk for the long distance. Recently I walked around like 5 kilometers with my friends.

✓ I recently went to Linkin Park. It's a very popular park right now. Many people go there because it offers a lot of space and you can walk long distances. Recently I walked around five kilometers with my friends.

Problems: unnecessary definite article before a park name ('the Linkin Park'), 'very quite popular' is redundant and incorrect (choose 'very popular' or 'quite popular'), 'There are many people used to go there' should be 'Many people go there', 'as offer more great space' should be 'it offers a lot of space', and 'walk for the long distance' should be 'walk long distances'. Also write numbers in words for clarity in speech transcripts. These are article, adverb/adjective usage, verb tense and sentence structure errors (IDs 22, 13, 26, 5).