Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in parks. I find the fresh air and greenery help me feel refreshed and relaxed, and I usually walk there for 30 minutes after work to clear my mind.

제안: Fix word order and incomplete ending. Give a clear topic sentence about frequency, then one or two specific details (who, when, what). Use linking words and complete the thought.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks with my family after dinner when I was a child. It was a great way to spend time together and we usually walked around our neighbourhood for about 20 minutes to talk and relax.

제안: Remove hesitations and reduce repetition. Begin with a direct reason, then add a specific supporting detail or example using a linking word. Use correct verb agreement.

예시: Many people enjoy walking in parks because the natural environment helps them feel refreshed and relaxed. For example, the trees and open space provide shade and clean air, which makes exercise more pleasant.

제안: Eliminate filler words and correct small grammar issues (article use and verb agreement). Start directly with the conditional and provide one clear supporting detail with linking words.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because I enjoy the sound of the waves and the fresh air. The beautiful scenery helps me relax and unwind after a busy week.

제안: Complete the final sentence and avoid hesitations. Provide a concise topic sentence about where you went and when, then add a specific detail about what you did and how you felt using a linking word.

예시: I went for a walk in Han Libra with my friends last weekend after work. We walked around the area and then had dinner, including ramen and chicken with beers, which made the evening very enjoyable.

× Yes I do, I love walking near park, it really helps me refreshed and feel relaxed.

✓ Yes I do. I love walking near the park; it really helps me feel refreshed and relaxed.

The sentence misses the definite article before 'park' and uses incorrect structure 'helps me refreshed'. Use 'the park' for a specific place and the verb pattern 'help someone do/feel' so use 'helps me feel refreshed'. Also separate clauses with proper punctuation for clarity.

× As far as I remember, I often did go outside with my family after dinner. It was great way to spend time together and really.

✓ As far as I remember, I often went outside with my family after dinner. It was a great way to spend time together.

Use simple past 'went' rather than 'did go' for habitual past actions. Also include the article 'a' before 'great way' and remove the trailing incomplete word 'really' to complete the sentence.

× Umm, many people like to walk in parks because uh, it give, it gives umm, it makes them feel refreshed and relaxed also.

✓ Umm, many people like to walk in parks because it gives them a feeling of refreshment and relaxation.

The original repeats verbs and mixes singular/plural references. Use singular 'it gives' to refer to 'walking in parks' as a general activity and avoid redundant phrases. 'Makes them feel refreshed and relaxed' is acceptable, but condensing improves clarity and removes repeated fragments.

× Yes, uh, if I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk by beach because I enjoy the sound of waves and fresh air and beautiful scenery makes me feel refreshed and unwind.

✓ Yes, uh, if I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk by the beach because I enjoy the sound of waves, the fresh air, and beautiful scenery, which make me feel refreshed and unwind.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'beach'. Parallel noun phrases need commas. 'Beautiful scenery makes me feel refreshed and unwind' mixes verb forms; use a relative clause 'which make me feel refreshed and help me unwind' or 'which make me feel refreshed and allow me to unwind.' Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which make' refers to plural items 'sound, air, scenery.'

× Where did you go for a walk lately? I went for a walk in Han Libra with my friends. We had dinner after work. Uh, we had ramen and chicken with beers. It was.

✓ I went for a walk in Han Libra with my friends. We had dinner after work. We had ramen and chicken with beer. It was enjoyable.

The fragment 'It was.' is incomplete; provide an adjective to complete the thought. 'Beers' used with food is better as 'beer' (uncountable) in this context. No 'there' was required, but the main problems were incomplete sentence and plural/uncountable noun usage.