Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one favourite, then give one or two specific reasons with simple linking words (because, so). Use correct grammar (e.g. "I snack" vs "I eat snack") and avoid repetitions. Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a more precise description of the snack or salad.

예시: My favourite food is light snacks, especially mixed salads with nuts and cheese. I prefer them because they help me relax and feel healthy, and I often eat them in my free time.

제안: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Give specific examples (e.g. cake, cookies) and a reason why you liked them. Link ideas with words like "because" or "so" and avoid unclear phrases like "when I was drunk."

예시: When I was young, I liked sweet foods such as cake and cookies. I enjoyed them because sweets tasted exciting and were often given as treats at parties.

제안: Be specific about how your diet changes with seasons or festivals. Use clear linking words (for example, "in winter," "during summer," "for festivals") and avoid vague or repetitive statements. Give one concrete example of seasonal food and mention who you eat it with if relevant.

예시: Yes. For example, in winter I prefer hot soups and stews, but in summer I eat more salads and cold dishes. I also try different foods when I travel or celebrate festivals with friends.

제안: Answer clearly with a short direct statement ("No, it hasn't changed") and then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid repeating the word "hobbies" incorrectly and explain how the food makes you feel with precise vocabulary (e.g. "happy, comforted").

예시: No, it hasn't changed. I still enjoy snacks because they make me happy and comfortable, and eating them has always been a comforting habit.

× My favorite food is snack, or maybe it's a little salad because I eat snack because I want to be relaxed or I snack when I'm free and I will eat flat for my health.

✓ My favorite food is snacks, or maybe a small salad, because I snack to relax. I snack when I'm free, and I eat flat (plain) food for my health.

Errors: missing plural for 'snack' (should be 'snacks'); incorrect article/phrase 'a little salad' better as 'a small salad'; repetitive and run-on sentence structure. Suggestion: Use plural for countable nouns when generalizing, use correct articles ('a small salad'), shorten and split sentences for clarity, and replace unclear phrase 'eat flat for my health' with a clearer expression such as 'eat plain food for my health'. Note: 'eat flat' is unclear and not standard English; choose vocabulary that conveys the intended meaning (e.g., 'plain food' or 'simple meals').

× Same as another people, when I'm when I was young, my favorite food is snack or maybe cake or beef biscuits because umm, when I was drunk I like to eat, uh, much sweet.

✓ Like other people, when I was young my favorite foods were snacks, maybe cake or beef biscuits, because when I was a child I liked to eat a lot of sweets.

Errors: 'another people' incorrect — should be 'other people'; tense and agreement: 'when I'm when I was young' redundant and inconsistent — use past tense 'when I was young'; 'my favorite food is snack' should be plural 'favorite foods were snacks' for multiple items in the past; 'much sweet' incorrect quantifier and noun form — use 'a lot of sweets'. Suggestion: Use 'other people', maintain past tense for childhood ('was'), use plural for general lists of items, and use 'a lot of' or 'many' with countable nouns like 'sweets'.

× Yes, I want to eat our food in the world, so I want to try many food in my life in around the world. So I will eat different food at different at different times of the of the year and I will stay at with my friends.

✓ Yes, I want to try foods from around the world, so I hope to taste many different dishes in my life. I eat different foods at different times of the year, and I sometimes stay with my friends.

Errors: awkward and repetitive phrasing 'eat our food in the world' and 'many food in my life in around the world'; incorrect singular/plural 'many food' should be 'many foods' or 'many different dishes'; repetition 'at different at different times of the of the year'; extra preposition in 'stay at with my friends'. Suggestion: Use clear phrases like 'foods from around the world' and 'many different dishes', maintain consistent plurality, remove redundant words, and use correct prepositions ('stay with my friends').

× I think no because my favorite food is my really hobbies and I don't want to change my hobbies and snacks.

✓ I don't think so, because my favorite foods are really my hobby and I don't want to change my hobbies or my snacks.

Errors: 'I think no' is unnatural — use 'I don't think so'; 'favorite food is my really hobbies' mixes singular/plural and word order — use 'favorite foods are really my hobby' or 'my hobby'; inconsistent noun forms. Suggestion: Use natural negation 'I don't think so', keep subject and predicate in agreement ('foods are'), and use correct word order ('really my hobby').

× It might really hobbies so I want to eat snacks because snacks also is make me happy and make me funny.

✓ It is really a hobby, so I want to eat snacks because snacks also make me happy and make me laugh.

Errors: 'might really hobbies' incorrect structure — use 'is really a hobby'; 'snacks also is make me happy' wrong verb form and agreement — use 'snacks also make me happy'; 'make me funny' unnatural — likely intended 'make me laugh' or 'make me happy'. Suggestion: Use correct verb agreement (plural subject 'snacks' takes 'make'), proper article usage ('a hobby'), and choose natural collocations like 'make me happy' or 'make me laugh'.