Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid filler words (umm, uh), correct small errors and give a clear reason with one or two specific examples. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 supporting details using linking words.

예시: I really like Asian food, especially Japanese and Indonesian dishes. For example, I enjoy plain rice with grilled fish or spicy sambal because these meals remind me of home-cooked food my mother used to make.

제안: Eliminate repetition and fillers, and organize the response: topic sentence then specific details. Use linking words (for example, also) and give one short comment about why you liked it.

예시: When I was young, my favorite dish was a cold rice noodle salad. It had rice noodles, fresh vegetables, and sometimes shredded chicken, and we dressed it with a tangy, spicy sauce, which I liked because it tasted fresh and exciting.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence and add one specific reason and a brief example to support it. Use linking words like because or therefore.

예시: No, I usually eat the same kinds of food all year because Singapore has a stable climate. For instance, I typically have rice with a different side dish each day, such as vegetables or fish, rather than seasonal dishes.

제안: Remove fillers and hesitations, correct grammar (tense and subject-verb), and structure the answer: state change, explain reason, give a brief example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I used to prefer cold salads as a child, but now I prefer rice-based meals because they are more filling, especially since I am more active and need more energy.

× When I was young, I my favorite food was uh, cold salad made, uh, cold salad made with uh, rice noodles, fresh vegetables and sometimes meat.

✓ When I was young, my favorite food was a cold salad made with rice noodles, fresh vegetables, and sometimes meat.

The original sentence contains an extra pronoun 'I' which is unnecessary and breaks the sentence structure (Incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure). Also 'cold salad made, cold salad made with' is repetitive. Remove the extra 'I' and the repetition, insert the article 'a' before 'cold salad', and use commas appropriately. Suggestion: Read the sentence aloud to identify repeated words and unnecessary pronouns before finalizing it.

× When I was young, I my favorite food was uh, cold salad made, uh, cold salad made with uh, rice noodles, fresh vegetables and sometimes meat.

✓ When I was young, my favorite food was a cold salad made with rice noodles, fresh vegetables, and sometimes meat.

The passive participle 'made' is used correctly to describe the salad, but the original sentence repeats the phrase and is disfluent. Keep a single instance of 'made' and structure the passive phrase correctly: 'a cold salad made with...'. Suggestion: Ensure participles are used once and placed immediately after the noun they modify.

× It really, uh, I like it.

✓ I really like it.

The phrase mixes two clauses 'It really' and 'I like it' causing a fragmented, ungrammatical sentence (incorrect conjunction/sentence structure). Remove the redundant fragment and keep the clear subject-verb-object order: 'I really like it.' Suggestion: Aim for a single complete clause when expressing a simple opinion.

× Throughout the year, the whole year, I usually eat the same food because the weather is mostly the same and uh in Singapore throughout the year so it doesn't really make a difference.

✓ Throughout the year I usually eat the same food because the weather in Singapore is mostly the same, so it doesn't really make a difference.

The original contains redundant phrases ('the whole year', repeated 'throughout the year') and awkward word order. Present tense usage is appropriate but the sentence needs smoothing and removal of repetition. Also punctuation or commas help separate clauses. Suggestion: Remove repeated phrases and place time/place modifiers next to the subject: 'the weather in Singapore is mostly the same.'

× I would usually eat uh rice and a side dish every single day.

✓ I usually eat rice and a side dish every day.

The original modal 'would usually eat' is acceptable in some contexts but here simple present 'usually eat' is more natural for habitual actions. 'Every single day' is redundant; 'every day' suffices. Also no plural error in nouns but modal use and redundancy corrected. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual routines: 'I usually eat...every day.'

× My favorite food has changed since I was a child because I used to love cold salad as a child, but when I become older I noticed that I it it is more filling for me to eat rice with something other than salads because I tend to move a lot more at this age.

✓ My favorite food has changed since I was a child because I used to love cold salad, but as I became older I noticed that it is more filling for me to eat rice with something other than salads because I tend to move around a lot more now.

Multiple tense and word-form errors: 'when I become older' should be past 'as I became older' to match 'has changed' and 'used to'. The phrase contains duplicated words 'I it it' and awkward phrasing 'move a lot more at this age.' Replace with 'move around a lot more now' for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past reference forms consistent: use 'became' when referring to past changes and 'now' for current conditions.

× My favorite food has changed since I was a child because I used to love cold salad as a child, but when I become older I noticed that I it it is more filling for me to eat rice with something other than salads because I tend to move a lot more at this age.

✓ My favorite food has changed since I was a child because I used to love cold salad, but as I became older I noticed that it is more filling for me to eat rice with something other than salads because I tend to move around a lot more now.

The original contains misplaced and repeated pronouns 'I it it' which break the sentence. Remove extraneous pronouns and ensure pronouns refer clearly to their antecedents. Suggestion: After editing out repeated filler words, check pronoun placement so each pronoun has a clear noun it replaces.