Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, uh) and repetition, and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Add a brief reason and a specific example to make the answer richer (use linking words like 'because' or 'for example').

예시: My favourite foods are pizza and burgers because they are tasty and convenient. For example, I often buy a slice of pizza or a burger from a nearby street vendor when I’m feeling bored or in a hurry. I also enjoy trying different street snacks like momos occasionally.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Begin with a topic sentence stating what you liked as a child, then give a specific example and brief reason. Remove fragmented wording and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because.'

예시: When I was young, I loved traditional snacks from school. For example, in January I often ate fujika and tried various pickles and drinks because they were seasonal and special. Even now, I try them whenever I have the chance.

제안: Be specific and organized. Give a clear topic sentence, then contrast seasons with examples using linking words such as 'in summer' and 'in winter.' Avoid filler words and repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and mention reasons or preferences.

예시: Yes. In summer I eat seasonal fruits like mangoes and watermelon because they are refreshing and hydrating. In winter I prefer warm dishes, such as soups and roasted snacks, because they keep me warm. This seasonal variety is one reason I enjoy both seasons.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement ('No, it hasn't changed') then give a concise reason and a specific detail. Avoid fillers and tense errors, and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, it hasn’t changed. My favourite fruit is still watermelon because it is hydrating and refreshing, so I enjoy eating it in many seasons.

× My favorite food was pizza burger umm like every junk food is my most favorite food and street food.

✓ My favorite foods are pizza, burgers, and other junk and street foods.

The sentence mixes past 'was' with general present preference; use present tense for current favorites. Also plural forms needed for countable items (burgers) and parallel structure. Suggest using present simple for habitual preferences and make nouns plural when referring to types or categories.

× Also uh whenever I feel bored I I try different straightforward like pizza, burger, momos and I feel better to eat this.

✓ Also, whenever I feel bored, I try different simple foods like pizza, burgers, and momos, and I feel better after eating them.

The original has redundant words, incorrect adjective choice ('straightforward'), and wrong verb/object forms. Use 'whenever I feel bored' + present simple 'I try', use 'simple foods' for clarity, pluralize items, and use 'after eating them' to show result. Punctuation and comma placement improve readability.

× When I young when I go to school I eat fujika in January and some drinks achars also this kind of food my still favorite.

✓ When I was young and went to school, I ate fujika in January and some drinks and achars; these kinds of foods are still my favorites.

Past events require past tense verbs ('was', 'went', 'ate'). 'This kind of food my still favorite' is ungrammatical: use plural 'these kinds of foods are still my favorites' and correct word order. Also add conjunctions and punctuation for clarity.

× Whenever get chance I really try this.

✓ Whenever I get the chance, I really try them.

Missing subject 'I' before 'get', missing article 'the' before 'chance', and pronoun agreement: refer back to plural 'foods' with 'them'. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, uh, I try different foods at different time of the year, like summer or summer gives us many uh, first, first like mango, uh, watermelon like this.

✓ Yes, I try different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer we get many fruits like mangoes and watermelon.

Use plural 'times' for repeated periods and present simple 'I try'. The clause 'summer gives us many' is awkward; better to say 'in summer we get many fruits'. Pluralize countable nouns ('mangoes'). Split run-on sentence into two for clarity.

× Uh, I really enjoy summer and winter both because of uh, this weather food give us very different foods.

✓ I really enjoy both summer and winter because the weather brings different foods.

Original has redundancy and incorrect subject-verb agreement ('food give us'). Use 'the weather brings' or 'different foods are available' and remove repetition. Maintain parallel structure 'both summer and winter'.

× No, when I were a child, uh, my favorite food was watermelon.

✓ No, when I was a child, my favorite food was watermelon.

'Were' is incorrect with singular subject 'I' in past simple; use 'was'. Keep past tense for childhood.

× Still umm, umm, my favorite fruits is watermelon because it's give us a hydrate umm, and refreshing uh, so I really enjoy to eating this every season.

✓ Still, my favorite fruit is watermelon because it keeps us hydrated and refreshed, so I really enjoy eating it every season.

Use singular 'fruit' when naming a favourite type and match with 'is'. 'It's give' should be 'it keeps' or 'it gives' with correct conjugation. 'A hydrate' is incorrect; use 'hydrated'. 'Enjoy to eating' is incorrect verb pattern; use 'enjoy eating'. Pronoun 'it' refers to watermelon. Remove fillers and fix word order.