Food— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Add linking words for coherence (e.g., "so", "because").

예시: I enjoy Chinese-style noodles the most. I often cook them at home with assorted vegetables and a spicy sauce because I like bold flavours, so they’re my go-to meal when I want something quick and tasty.

제안: Use past tense consistently and make the response direct. Give one clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

예시: When I was young, I preferred healthy foods because my mother didn’t allow junk food. For example, I ate a lot of fresh fruit such as apples and bananas as snacks.

제안: Finish your sentences and organise your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then contrast winter and summer habits using linking words ("in winter... whereas in summer..."). Provide one specific example for each season and avoid unfinished thoughts.

예시: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In winter, I eat more fruits and dried nuts, such as oranges and almonds, because they keep me warm and provide vitamins; whereas in summer I prefer lighter foods like salads and chilled fruits.

제안: Use correct grammar and precise vocabulary ("changed", "junk food"). Give a concise contrast between past and present and a reason or example to support it. Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases.

예시: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I mainly ate healthy items like fruits, but now I often prefer junk food such as fries and instant noodles because they are more convenient and tasty to me.

× My favorite food is the Chinese one which includes noodles.

✓ My favorite food is Chinese food, especially noodles.

Use of 'the Chinese one' is awkward and incorrect article usage; 'Chinese food' is the correct noun phrase. Also clarify 'includes noodles' to 'especially noodles' for natural expression. Suggestion: Use 'Chinese food' without 'the' and replace 'one' with a specific noun or phrase.'

× I love to cook the noodles at my home by adding different veggies and making it spicy.

✓ I love cooking noodles at home by adding different vegetables and making them spicy.

Use gerund 'cooking' is more natural after 'love'. 'the noodles' and 'my home' are unnecessary; use 'noodles' and 'home'. 'Veggies' is informal; use 'vegetables'. Pronoun agreement: 'noodles' plural so use 'them spicy'. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'love' and ensure pronoun agreement.'

× Whenever I want to eat this spicy thing, I used to cook the noodles.

✓ Whenever I want to eat something spicy, I cook noodles.

'Used to' indicates a past habitual action and conflicts with 'whenever I want' (present). Align tenses: present habitual 'I cook'. Also 'this spicy thing' is vague; use 'something spicy'. Suggestion: Match tense (present) and use clearer vocabulary.'

× I remember that when I was young, I prefer to eat something healthy at that time because my mother won't let me to eat the junk food such at that time I prefer the fruits.

✓ I remember that when I was young, I preferred to eat healthy food because my mother wouldn't let me eat junk food, so I preferred fruits.

Tense inconsistency: 'I remember that when I was young' requires past tense 'preferred'. Modal 'won't' should be past 'wouldn't'. Remove 'to' after 'let me'. Sentence structure and repetition fixed by using commas and 'so'. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout the clause and simplify the sentence.'

× Uh yes in winters I prefer eating something healthy like the dry fruits and the fruits like apples, bananas and oranges.

✓ Yes, in winter I prefer eating healthy foods like dried fruit and fruits such as apples, bananas, and oranges.

Use 'in winter' (season usually singular) and 'prefer' in present is acceptable for habits. 'Dry fruits' is better as 'dried fruit' or 'nuts' depending on meaning. Use 'such as' for examples and add commas for list. Suggestion: Use standard collocations: 'in winter', 'dried fruit' or 'nuts', and 'such as' for examples.'

× Oranges are one of the most common during the winters but in summer I would not prefer eating something healthy.

✓ Oranges are very common in winter, but in summer I don't prefer eating healthy foods.

'One of the most common' is incomplete without a noun; simplify to 'very common'. 'During the winters' should be 'in winter'. 'I would not prefer' is unnatural for a general habit; use 'I don't prefer'. Maintain plural 'foods' for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple comparative phrasing and correct seasonal preposition.'

× I just.

✓ I just don't, or I just eat whatever is available.

Fragment: 'I just.' is an incomplete sentence lacking a verb and object. Provide a complete clause that conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with the intended action or preference.'

× Yes, my favorite food has been changed since I was a child because in childhood I prefer eating healthy things like fruits and now as I am older so I usually prefer eating drunk food.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child because as a child I preferred eating healthy things like fruits, but now that I am older I usually prefer eating junk food.

'Has been changed' is incorrect passive; use active present perfect 'has changed'. Tense consistency: 'in childhood I prefer' should be past 'preferred'. 'Drunk food' is wrong word; should be 'junk food'. Also fix conjunctions and sentence flow by using 'but now'. Suggestion: Use active voice 'has changed', keep consistent past/present usage, and correct vocabulary 'junk food'.