Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammar errors and redundancy, and limit filler words. Use correct sentence structures and a concise supporting detail (one or two sentences). Replace unclear phrases like "frontline city" and correct verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes — there are a few tall buildings near my home, mainly apartment blocks rather than skyscrapers. Because my city is medium-sized, tall buildings are fairly common but not overwhelming, so the skyline feels balanced.

제안: Start with a direct answer, reduce fillers (umm), fix grammar (verb forms and articles), and give one specific example of what attracts you to photograph a building. Keep it to two to three concise sentences.

예시: Sometimes I do, but only when a building has a unique style or an interesting history. For example, I photographed an old theatre last month because of its ornate facade and vintage signage.

제안: Answer directly and remove fillers. Use precise vocabulary (historical sites, museums) and explain briefly why with a specific reason or example. Keep to two sentences maximum and use linking words to make it coherent.

예시: Yes — I would like to visit historical buildings and museums because they reveal a city's culture and history. For instance, I’d love to explore the old town museum to learn about local traditions and architecture.

제안: Give a clear yes/no first, then give one or two concise reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Remove fillers and awkward phrases like "pressed" and "society environment"; use words like "claustrophobic" or "noisy" and include a linking word to connect points.

예시: Not really. Although high-rise apartments offer great views, I find them less tranquil and a bit claustrophobic, so I prefer living closer to parks or low-rise neighborhoods.

× Yes, there are a few, mostly apartment buildings, but not skyscrapers.

✓ Yes, there are a few, mostly apartment buildings, but not skyscrapers.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses 'there are' for plural existence.

× Because my city is not frontline city, it is quite used to see them every day and it also pretty common in the area.

✓ Because my city is not a frontline city, people are quite used to seeing them every day, and they are also pretty common in the area.

Issues: missing article before 'frontline city' and incorrect sentence structure and verb forms. Use 'a' before singular noun. 'Be used to' requires a noun or -ing form: 'used to seeing'. Also need subject 'they' and verb 'are' for 'pretty common'. Suggestion: add article, change 'used to see' to 'used to seeing', and include 'they are'.

× Sometimes I do if they have a unique style or umm, a strong sense of story, but I'm not take every of them because some of them doesn't catch my mind and I think it is not something special.

✓ Sometimes I do if they have a unique style or, um, a strong sense of story, but I don't take pictures of every one of them because some don't catch my attention and I don't think they are anything special.

Multiple errors limited to listed types: 'I'm not take' is incorrect verb form — use 'I don't take' or better 'I don't take pictures'. 'Every of them' is wrong quantifier/pronoun use; use 'every one of them'. 'Doesn't catch my mind' is incorrect; use 'don't catch my attention'. Also adjust 'it is not something special' to 'they are anything special' for number agreement.

× Oh yeah, umm, buildings, like historical buildings or uh, for example, the museums, Because I think you can tell a lot of stories and the cultures about the city.

✓ Oh yeah, um, buildings, like historical buildings or, for example, museums, because I think you can learn a lot about the city's stories and culture.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the museums' when speaking generally — use 'museums'. Capitalization after comma wrong. 'You can tell a lot of stories and the cultures about the city' is awkward; use 'learn a lot about the city's stories and culture'. This fixes article use and improves clarity.

× It is really meaningful.

✓ They are really meaningful.

Original pronoun 'It' is vague and doesn't agree with plural antecedent 'buildings' or 'museums'. Use plural pronoun 'They' and plural verb 'are'.

× Well, not really. The top buildings may have a wonderful scenery of the city, but I think it is not, umm, really tranquil.

✓ Well, not really. The top floors of tall buildings may offer a wonderful view of the city, but I don't think they are really tranquil.

Problems: 'The top buildings' is awkward; 'top floors of tall buildings' is clearer. 'Scenery' collocates poorly with 'have'; use 'have a view' or 'offer a view'. 'It is not...truly tranquil' incorrectly uses singular 'it' for plural idea and weak verb choice—use 'they are' and 'I don't think'. This corrects agreement and phrasing.

× And it also make me feel, uh, pressed in such an environment, society environment.

✓ And it also makes me feel pressured in such a social environment.

Errors: verb agreement — 'it also make' should be 'it also makes' if referring to singular; better to rephrase to match previous sentence 'they also make me feel' if referring to buildings. 'Pressed' is the wrong adjective; use 'pressured' or 'oppressed'. 'Society environment' is incorrect collocation; use 'social environment'.