Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant numbers or unclear phrases. Also correct grammar (use singular/plural and prepositions).

예시: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a high-density urban area. For example, my apartment is on a street surrounded by several high-rise blocks, so the skyline from my window is mostly glass and concrete.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and add a specific reason and an example using a linking word. Improve grammar (plural forms, tenses) and reduce redundancy.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when the light is interesting. For instance, when there is a colourful sunset I take pictures of the skyline because the warm light makes the glass facades reflect beautiful colours.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more specific. Start with a direct statement naming the building or its notable feature, then explain why you want to visit using linking words and concrete details. Avoid fillers and vague descriptions.

예시: Yes. I would like to visit a building in the nearby city that displays digital images on its facade. I have seen it from a distance and heard it hosts large LED displays with portraits and artwork, so I want to go closer to see the installation and take photos.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (articles, verb forms) and finish your thought—don’t leave sentences incomplete. Limit to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building again because it offers excellent views and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, when I lived on the 34th floor before, I enjoyed quiet nights and a wide cityscape that made the apartment feel more relaxing.

× Yes, they are tall buildings near my home because my home is a small apartment just like 15-4.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home because I live in a small apartment, number 15-4.

The original uses 'they are tall buildings' which is incorrect for existence; use 'there are' for plural existence (There be issue, ID 3). Also 'my home is a small apartment just like 15-4' is awkward and has article/number phrasing issues. Change to 'I live in a small apartment, number 15-4' to be natural and grammatically correct. Use plural 'buildings' with 'there are'. Grammar problem type ID: 1 and 3.

× So around my house is a certain route surrounding a lot of tall buildings.

✓ Around my house there is a road surrounded by many tall buildings.

The original word order is unnatural ('So around my house is a certain route surrounding a lot of tall buildings'). Use natural English word order: 'Around my house there is a road surrounded by many tall buildings.' Also 'a lot of' is informal; 'many' is more appropriate. This fixes preposition and sentence structure issues (IDs 11 and 26).

× Yes, I take a photo of building sometime when I saw the sunset or the sky really nice, I will take a picture of buildings with that view.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings sometimes; when I see a nice sunset or sky, I take pictures of the buildings with that view.

Multiple issues: tense consistency and pluralization. Use present simple for habitual action: 'I take photos of buildings sometimes.' Change 'sometime when I saw' to 'when I see' to match habitual present, and 'photo of building' to 'photos of buildings'. Also 'really nice' should be 'a nice' or 'very nice' (adjective usage). This addresses present tense and singular/plural errors (IDs 6 and 1).

× Yes, there is in the city near my house have the building that when I saw from really far is gonna show the picture of like, uh, someone fares and I heard about that building a lot, so I wanna visit that building.

✓ Yes, there is a building in the city near my house that, when seen from far away, displays an image of a person's face; I have heard about that building a lot, so I want to visit it.

The original contains incorrect use of 'there is in the city near my house have the building' and informal 'gonna', 'wanna'. Reorder to 'There is a building in the city near my house that, when seen from far away, displays an image of a person's face.' Use passive participle 'seen' and 'displays' for clarity, replace slang with 'want to'. This fixes 'there be' and sentence structure errors (IDs 3 and 26) and corrects verb forms (ID 9).

× Yes, of course, I really like tall building.

✓ Yes, of course, I really like tall buildings.

Use plural 'buildings' when speaking generally about tall buildings. 'I really like tall building' is missing pluralization. This fixes singular/plural and adjective-noun agreement (IDs 1 and 13).

× I have I have lived in tall building before and I'm at 34 four the view really nice and it's kind of like very peaceful because I.

✓ I have lived in a tall building before, and I lived on the 34th floor; the view was really nice and it was very peaceful.

The original repeats 'I have' and uses 'tall building' (singular/plural) and 'I'm at 34 four' is incorrect. Use present perfect 'I have lived in a tall building before' to indicate past experience, or simple past for specific past location: 'I lived on the 34th floor.' Clarify '34th floor' and fix sentence fragments by completing the thought: 'the view was really nice and it was very peaceful.' This addresses tense consistency and singular/plural errors (IDs 5,1) and sentence structure (ID 26).