Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや語彙の誤用、意味の不明瞭さが多く、まとまりもありません。まず簡潔なトピック文を作り、具体例を1つか2つ挙げて接続語（例えば "for example", "also"）でつなぐ練習をしてください。また不自然なフレーズ（"targeting on your money", "primary kid"）は避けて正しい語を使いましょう。発音・流暢さのために短い文を意識し、5文以内に収めてください。

예시: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a large hospital and a multi-story school building. They make the area feel busy but also convenient.

제안: 答えは直接的で短くまとまっていますが、語彙の誤用（"billing"など）と文法の誤りが目立ちます。理由を述べる場合は一つの明確な理由を示し、接続語（"because", "so"）を使って論理をつなげてください。発音が不明瞭な単語は事前に練習しましょう。5文以内で具体例を一つ加えると良いです。

예시: No, I usually don't take photos of buildings because I find architecture less interesting. I prefer photographing nature, such as trees and rivers, because they feel more relaxing to me.

제안: 応答が不明瞭で文の構成が崩れています。まず訪れたい建物を明確に一文で示し、その理由を具体的に述べてください。たとえば歴史的な価値や建築様式に興味があるといった具体的な理由を述べ、接続語（"because", "for example"）で補足してください。あいまい表現（"I don't know"を繰り返す）は避け、簡潔に話す練習をしましょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the European museums in the future. I am especially interested in historic museums because I enjoy learning about art and history, and many European museums have famous collections.

제안: 意味は大まかに伝わりますが、語彙と文法の誤りがあり、具体的な理由や比較が欠けています。まずは簡潔なトピック文（"No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building."）を言い、その後に具体的な理由を1〜2点述べてください（例えば費用、騒音、スペースなど）。接続語（"because", "so"）を使って論理的につなげ、5文以内に収めましょう。

예시: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I think it would be more expensive and it might feel crowded. I prefer a low-rise house because it usually has more outdoor space and feels quieter.

× Yes, it's called, there are many targeting on your money, uh, for example, hospital and uh, this is a primary kid. It's very convenient.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, such as hospitals and a primary school. They are very convenient.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronouns and unclear references ('it's called', 'this is a primary kid'). Replace with clear subjects and plural forms where needed. Use 'there are' for existence of plural nouns and use correct nouns ('primary school', 'hospitals'). Keep sentence structure simple: state existence, give examples, and add a comment about convenience.

× Uh, no, I don't take photo of billing because, uh, I don't know, entering taking picture or billing. So I prefer take nature.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings because I'm not interested in photographing them. I prefer to take pictures of nature.

Errors include missing plural for 'photo(s)', wrong noun 'billing' instead of 'building(s)', missing articles, and ungrammatical phrases ('entering taking picture'). Use plural 'photos' for general activity, correct 'buildings', add gerund or phrase 'interested in photographing', and use 'take pictures of nature' for clarity.

× Oh yes, uh, I don't know, want to visit European meet in my uh, I want to go to the PM in the future because, umm, I don't uh, no more, uh, history on history.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit European museums. I want to go to them in the future because I am very interested in history.

The original is fragmented and contains wrong words ('European meet', 'PM', 'no more, history on history'). Reconstruct into coherent sentences: use conditional 'would like' for desire, correct noun 'museums', and provide a clear reason with 'interested in history'. Maintain future intention with 'want to go in the future'.

× I don't want to live in Torben in the future because it takes a lot of fee a song. I prefer to live in a lovers, uh.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building in the future because it costs a lot. I prefer to live in a low-rise house.

Original has garbled words ('Torben', 'fee a song', 'lovers'). Correct to meaningful nouns: 'tall building' and 'low-rise house'. Use 'costs a lot' for expense. Keep the future intention and preference clear and grammatical.