Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., 'a big city' or 'big cities'). Avoid repetition.

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small town called Busingwala, which is surrounded by farmland, so most buildings are only one or two storeys high.

제안: Organize your answer: give a direct response, then one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and fix tense/word choice (e.g., 'I don't often take photos of buildings' and 'whenever I see a building'). Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photography, but I don’t often photograph buildings. However, when I see a building with an unusual design I usually take a picture of it, and more generally I prefer photographing sunsets and dramatic clouds.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific detail. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I have known knowledge about buildings' and use correct conditionals ('If I had the chance' or 'I would like to visit').

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Taj Mahal with my family because it is famous for its beautiful architecture and historical significance, and I would love to see its intricate marble inlay work in person.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and two concise reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I wouldn't get the same environment' and avoid unclear phrases like 'in UMM'). Mention specific differences between town and city life to support your opinion.

예시: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building. I grew up in a small town surrounded by fields, so I prefer open space and a quiet neighbourhood rather than apartment living in a busy city.

× No, I live in a small town named Busingwala.

✓ No, I live in a small town named Busingwala.

This sentence is correct; no article error. Keep 'a small town' as is.

× It is away from a big cities and there are no tall buildings near our home.

✓ It is away from big cities and there are no tall buildings near our home.

The phrase 'a big cities' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'cities'. Remove the article to use plural 'big cities'. Also 'away from big cities' correctly expresses distance from multiple cities.

× Yes, I love to take photos. I really don't often take photos of buildings.

✓ Yes, I love to take photos. I don't really often take photos of buildings.

The adverb placement 'really don't often' is awkward. Move 'really' after the auxiliary 'don't' to form 'don't really often' or better 'don't often really', but 'don't really often' is acceptable. Alternatively, use 'I don't often take photos of buildings.' which is clearer.

× Whenever I saw a building with unique construction, I prefer to take that, uh, that buildings picture.

✓ Whenever I see a building with a unique design, I prefer to take a picture of it.

The mixed tenses 'saw' (past) and 'prefer' (present) are inconsistent. Use present simple 'see' and 'prefer' for habitual actions. 'Unique construction' is awkward; 'unique design' or 'interesting architecture' is clearer. Also use 'a picture of it' instead of 'that buildings picture' to fix noun phrase and possessive errors.

× Uh, mostly I capture sunset and dramatic clouds.

✓ Uh, mostly I capture sunsets and dramatic clouds.

'Sunset' should be plural 'sunsets' to match 'mostly' (habitual action) and parallel 'dramatic clouds'. This fixes singular/plural mismatch.

× Well, I have known knowledge about buildings.

✓ Well, I have some knowledge about buildings.

'Have known knowledge' is ungrammatical. Use 'have some knowledge' or 'know something' to express possession of knowledge.

× If I get a chance to visit any building, I will prefer to visit Taj Mahal with my family because I know only that.

✓ If I get a chance to visit any building, I would prefer to visit the Taj Mahal with my family because that is the only famous one I know.

Use 'would prefer' for hypothetical choice after 'if I get a chance' (both are acceptable; 'will prefer' is less natural). Add the definite article 'the Taj Mahal'. 'Because I know only that' is unclear; rewrite as 'because that is the only famous one I know.' This clarifies meaning.

× No, I'm a person from a small town.

✓ No, I'm a person from a small town.

Sentence is acceptable. No pronoun error.

× I don't think that I will get the same environment as my town.

✓ I don't think I would get the same environment as in my town.

Use 'would' to express hypothetical situation and include 'in' before 'my town' to indicate location: 'the same environment as in my town.' Omitting 'that' makes the sentence more natural.

× In the tall buildings in our down there are many fields and our houses around fields.

✓ Around the tall buildings in our town there are many fields and our houses are around those fields.

'Down' is a typo for 'town'. The original preposition structure is incorrect; reposition phrases for clarity: 'Around the tall buildings in our town there are many fields' and add 'our houses are around those fields' to clarify relationship.

× So I think it it is not better for me to live in UMM.

✓ So I think it is not better for me to live in UMM.

'It it' has a duplicated word; remove the extra 'it'. The phrase 'not better for me to live in UMM' is slightly awkward but grammatical. Consider 'So I don't think it would be better for me to live in UMM.' for a more natural phrasing.