Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct vocabulary, and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid sentence fragments, and replace incorrect words (‘dollars’) with the right term (‘stories’ or ‘storeys’). Use one linking phrase to explain the reason.

예시: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. Because we live close to the airport, building height is restricted, so most houses are only two or three storeys high.

제안: Improve grammar (singular/plural), natural phrasing and reduce redundancy. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked by a connector (e.g., 'because' or 'for example').

예시: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because architectural photography requires special skills; for example, you need to find the right angle and wait for good light, so I prefer to leave it to professionals.

제안: Make the response more fluent and fix small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add linked specific details (appearance, location, reason). Combine short fragments into coherent sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Mushroom Castle Café on the south side of my city because it has very unusual architecture: its rounded, colorful shapes make it look like a fairy-tale building.

제안: Correct word choice and clarity, avoid awkward phrasing and errors ('realization', 'Wear out'). Use a clear topic sentence and a linked supporting detail with a concrete reason or example.

예시: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I prefer a house with a garden; for example, a garden gives me outdoor space to grow plants and relax, which most apartments do not provide.

× No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. Because we live close to the airport, there are high restrictions, so the tallest buildings in my neighborhood are only two or three dollars high.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because we live close to the airport and there are strict height restrictions, so the tallest buildings in my neighborhood are only two or three stories high.

The sentence had multiple issues: incorrect noun 'dollars' instead of 'stories' (word choice/article/adjective issue) and word order/connector problems. This falls under 'There be issue' because 'there are' was used but followed by incorrect wording and sentence fragments. Combine sentences to remove the sentence fragment starting with 'Because'. Use 'strict height restrictions' for natural phrasing and 'stories' as the correct unit for building height. Also replace the comma splice with 'and' to connect clauses correctly.

× No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because architectures photographers need special skills.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because architectural photographers need special skills.

The original uses 'architectures photographers' which is incorrect word order and form. This is an adjective/noun formation issue (use of adjective form 'architectural' to modify 'photographers'). Use 'architectural photographers' to correctly describe photographers who specialize in architecture.

× It's rounded, colorful shapes look like a fairy tale building.

✓ Its rounded, colorful shapes look like a fairy-tale building.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'It's' (it is) instead of the possessive 'its'. This is a pronoun/possessive error related to sentence structure; classified here as verb + -ing form because it involved a confusion with contraction. Also 'fairy-tale' is hyphenated as a compound adjective. Use 'its' to show possession: 'its rounded, colorful shapes'.

× Yes, I would like to visit the Mushroom Castle Cafe, which is on the South side of my city. I'm interested because it has a very unusual architecture.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Mushroom Castle Cafe, which is on the south side of my city. I'm interested because it has very unusual architecture.

Capitalization 'South' should be lowercase when used as a direction ('south side'). Also 'a very unusual architecture' is unidiomatic: 'architecture' is an uncountable noun here, so do not use the article 'a'. Change to 'very unusual architecture'.

× I prefer a house with a garden. For example, a house gives me more outdoor space for plants and realization.

✓ I prefer a house with a garden. For example, a house gives me more outdoor space for plants and relaxation.

'Realization' is the wrong word; context indicates the intended meaning is 'relaxation'. This is a word choice error that affects sentence meaning and structure. Replace with 'relaxation' to convey the intended idea of rest and leisure.

× Wear out apartments usually don't offer a private garden.

✓ Worn-out apartments usually don't offer a private garden.

'Wear out apartments' is incorrect word order and form. The correct adjective phrase is 'worn-out' to describe apartments that have deteriorated. Hyphenate 'worn-out' when used before the noun. This fixes adjective formation and word order.