Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use clearer topic sentence structure. Start with a direct answer, then add one or two specific supporting details and a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "tall buildings" repeated).

예시: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a rural area with mostly single-storey houses such as bungalows, so the skyline is low. By contrast, the city nearby has many high-rises where most businesses and apartments are located.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence then add specific reasons and an example. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and linkers like 'because' or 'for example.' Avoid vague phrases like 'looks bright'—describe what you mean (ornate façades, reflections).

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I appreciate architectural details. For example, I like photographing ornate façades and glass towers that reflect light, as their shapes and colours match my aesthetic and make striking photos.

제안: Start with a direct answer naming the building, then give two specific details about why you want to visit. Avoid exaggerated or vague words like 'purely magical' and 'non ending'—explain the features and effects. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example.'

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Glass House, which is in a nearby city. I want to see its all-glass structure because the reflections and mirrored angles create interesting optical illusions, and people say the interior light effects are especially beautiful at sunset.

제안: Provide a more specific reasoned answer: state whether you want to live in a tall building and give 2 specific benefits or drawbacks with linking words (e.g. 'because', 'however'). Avoid vague phrases like 'look very nice.'

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it often offers better views and convenient access to shops and public transport. However, I would prefer a higher floor with a balcony and good soundproofing to avoid street noise.

× No, I live in the rural area where there are more remote buildings like a bungalow instead of tall buildings.

✓ No, I live in a rural area where there are mostly low-rise buildings, such as bungalows, rather than tall buildings.

The original sentence used 'the rural area' (article error) and 'more remote buildings like a bungalow' which is unnatural. This fits 'There be issue' because 'there are' was used awkwardly with count/description. Use 'a rural area' for general location and 'there are mostly low-rise buildings' to express existence and typicality. Replace 'like a bungalow' with 'such as bungalows' for correct plural and example form and 'rather than' instead of 'instead of' for better contrast.

× Yes I do, because some beauties are constructed in very luxurious manner that just looks bright.

✓ Yes, I do, because some buildings are constructed in a very luxurious manner and look striking.

The original uses 'beauties' incorrectly (word choice) and mixes singular/plural agreement ('manner that just looks bright'). This is an issue with present participle/verb form and noun choice. Use 'buildings' and 'are constructed' (passive) with 'and look' (present simple plural agreement). 'Striking' better conveys 'bright' in aesthetic context.

× Some of them matches my aesthetic as a person and I just cannot miss the moment without taking pictures of them.

✓ Some of them match my aesthetic, and I just cannot miss the moment without taking pictures of them.

The phrase 'Some of them' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'match' not 'matches'. Also 'as a person' is unnecessary; removing it makes the sentence more natural. Keep 'cannot miss the moment' as is.

× Yes, there is this building that is situated in a more urban area than where I live.

✓ Yes, there is a building that is located in a more urban area than where I live.

'There is this building' is conversational but 'this' is vague; use 'a building' for clarity. 'Situated' is acceptable, but 'located' is more common. This fixes the existential 'there is' phrasing for clarity.

× It's called the Glass House.

✓ It's called the Glass House.

This sentence is acceptable if the building's proper name is 'Glass House'; keep the definite article if part of the name. No grammatical correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× The glass house construction is purely magical.

✓ The Glass House's construction is simply magical.

'Glass house construction' is awkward; use possessive 'Glass House's construction' or 'The construction of the Glass House'. 'Purely' is grammatically correct but 'simply' sounds more natural here.

× It is made of pure glass and everybody loves to go there because of the illusions that are non ending when you look at the glasses.

✓ It is made of glass, and everybody loves to go there because of the never-ending illusions when you look at the glass surfaces.

'Pure glass' is acceptable but 'made of glass' is simpler. 'Non ending' should be hyphenated 'never-ending'. 'Glasses' is wrong for glass panels; use 'glass surfaces' or 'the glass'. This addresses quantifier/word choice and adjective formation.

× Yes I do. I see a lot of people these days live in tall buildings and they all look very nice, so I would definitely love to live in a tall building one day.

✓ Yes, I do. I see that a lot of people these days live in tall buildings, and they all look very comfortable, so I would definitely love to live in a tall building one day.

Add 'that' after 'see' for clarity. 'Look very nice' is acceptable, but 'look very comfortable' better matches living conditions. This corrects a sentence-structure/present tense clarity issue and improves naturalness.