Building— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases.

예시: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. I live in the central area of Riyadh, while most of the skyscrapers such as KAFD and King Abdullah Financial District are located in the northern part of the city. So my neighbourhood mainly has low-rise buildings and houses.

제안: Give a direct answer, then provide specific examples and correct grammar and word choice. Use linking words to connect reasons and habits, and avoid repetitive or unclear phrasing.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially tall modern towers and historic cultural sites that I find impressive. For example, when I visit a landmark I take a few pictures and usually post one on my Instagram story, often with calm R&B music playing in the background.

제안: Answer directly and give accurate, concise details. Correct factual or grammatical errors and use linking words to compare the two buildings. Provide clear reasons for interest.

예시: Yes, there are two buildings I'd like to visit: the Eiffel Tower in Paris and the Leaning Tower of Pisa. I want to see the Eiffel Tower because of its iconic iron structure and panoramic city views, and the Leaning Tower of Pisa because I'm curious to see its famous tilt and historic architecture up close.

제안: Begin with a clear statement and then give specific reasons. Fix unclear phrases (e.g., 'paint houses') and sentence fragments. Use linking words to explain benefits and end with a complete concluding sentence.

예시: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, for example a penthouse overlooking Central Park in New York City. Penthouses there are very expensive, sometimes costing over $100 million, but the advantage is the amazing view and easy access to the park, which would make daily life more pleasant.

× Well, I live in case A we are.

✓ Well, I live in case A.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains extra words that do not fit the structure. Remove the unnecessary fragment 'we are' to form a clear sentence. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb.

× I'm in the central region and most of the tall buildings, stuff like KAFD, King Abdullah Federal Department and all the tall buildings in Riyadh are in the northern side.

✓ I'm in the central region, and most of the tall buildings, such as KAFD and the King Abdullah Financial District, are on the northern side of Riyadh.

Use consistent present tense and correct noun forms. 'stuff like' is informal; 'such as' is more appropriate. 'King Abdullah Federal Department' is likely incorrect; 'King Abdullah Financial District' fits context. Use the preposition 'on' with 'side' and place 'of Riyadh' after the noun. Keep subject-verb agreement: 'tall buildings... are'.

× And I'm living in the central area of Riyadh.

✓ I live in the central area of Riyadh.

Use simple present 'I live' for general facts or habitual situations rather than 'I'm living', which implies temporary action. For location and habitual state, simple present is preferred.

× Therefore in my area there isn't any tall buildings.

✓ Therefore, in my area there aren't any tall buildings.

The negative 'there isn't' contracts 'there is not' which requires a singular noun; since 'tall buildings' is plural, use 'there aren't' (there are not). Also add a comma after 'Therefore' for clarity.

× Yes, I do take photos of buildings, especially tall buildings and cultural buildings which impresses the one who's looking.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of buildings, especially tall and cultural buildings which impress the viewer.

The relative clause subject is plural ('buildings'), so the verb should be 'impress' not 'impresses'. Also 'the one who's looking' is informal and awkward; 'the viewer' is clearer. Maintain subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.

× I usually take a picture of them and post it on my Instagram story with a calm R&B in music, R&B rhythms to rhythms and Blues and type.

✓ I usually take pictures of them and post them on my Instagram story with calm R&B music or rhythm and blues.

Use plural 'pictures' to match 'them'. 'Post them' aligns pronouns. The phrase 'with a calm R&B in music, R&B rhythms to rhythms and Blues and type' is ungrammatical and redundant; simplify to 'with calm R&B music' or 'with rhythm and blues'. Use proper noun form 'R&B' and add 'music' to clarify.

× Yes, actually there are two buildings.

✓ Yes, actually there are two buildings I would like to visit.

The original sentence is grammatically correct but contextually vague; adding 'I would like to visit' clarifies the response to the question. No plural/singular error here, but improvement clarifies intent.

× It's a very nice and tall buildings.

✓ It's a very nice and tall building.

The subject 'It' refers to a single building, so the noun should be singular 'building', not plural. Ensure adjective-noun agreement: 'nice and tall building'.

× Once Upon a time, it was one of the world's largest buildings in the world.

✓ Once upon a time, it was one of the world's largest structures.

The phrase 'Once Upon a time' should be 'Once upon a time' (capitalization). The original repeats 'in the world' redundantly. Replace 'buildings' with 'structures' or keep 'buildings' but remove repetition. Also 'one of the world's largest' does not need 'in the world'.

× And the second building is that Pisa.

✓ And the second building is the Leaning Tower of Pisa.

Use the correct name 'Leaning Tower of Pisa' and the definite article 'the'. 'That Pisa' is incorrect. Proper nouns for famous landmarks require standard English names.

× This is the Pisa Tower, which is in the 90 angle degree.

✓ This is the Tower of Pisa, which leans at about a 90-degree angle.

Use correct adjective-noun order '90-degree angle' with a hyphen in writing; say 'leans at about a 90-degree angle' to describe the tilt. 'Pisa Tower' is less common than 'Tower of Pisa' or 'Leaning Tower of Pisa'.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building.

The original is acceptable, but 'I would like to' is more polite and natural when expressing preference. No strict grammatical error but stylistic improvement.

× To be specific, the paint houses, which is in New York City in front of the Central Park.

✓ To be specific, the penthouses in New York City, in front of Central Park.

'Paint houses' is incorrect; the intended word is 'penthouses'. 'Which is' is wrong because 'penthouses' is plural; use a plural structure or rephrase as a noun phrase. 'the Central Park' should be 'Central Park' without 'the'. Ensure correct noun choice and article usage.

× Usually all of the penthouse there are very expensive and their price reaches to almost $115 million.

✓ Usually all of the penthouses there are very expensive and their prices reach almost $115 million.

Use plural 'penthouses' to match 'all of'. Change 'price reaches to' to 'prices reach' and remove 'to' after 'reach'. Use plural 'prices' because multiple penthouses have prices. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct verb collocation: 'reach a price' or 'reach almost $115 million'.

× The view is astonishing.

✓ The view is astonishing.

This sentence is correct as written; no grammatical change needed. Keep concise descriptive sentences.

× When you wake up, the Central Park is right in front of you, and it's very.

✓ When you wake up, Central Park is right in front of you, and the view is spectacular.

'The Central Park' should be 'Central Park' without 'the'. The clause 'and it's very.' is incomplete; complete the thought with an adjective like 'spectacular' or 'beautiful'. Ensure sentences are complete and convey a full idea.